All Comments on 'The Transistion of Elijah Brooks'

We need more Lovecraft stories

This is not incest, it is sci-fi and poorly written.

You've got to be kidding! Halfway thru the first page I skipped to the end of the last page...You suck

Can we get a second part please? But with maybe more sexual intercourse?

Whichever it is, it's not working; it's poorly written, poorly drawn, rushed, and instead of brooding and tense, is just derivative and poorly executed. My friend, you may wish to write erotic horror, but this isn't how it's done, and until you get an imagination of your own, I've got no further time for you.

Please say you're either going to sit down and make this the story it should be, drawn from your own mind but told in the master's voice, or just cease and desist altogether, because on the evidence here you just don't have the tools to make this type of copycat offering work.

If you're telling a story in someone else's world, then you need to be consistent with that world and that voice; so far, only faint echoes remain, and that's not good enough.

What the fuck did I read?

0 stars

Are they written by the same person?

It's a very well written story and probably one of the best I read on Literotica, for the originality of the transformation alone.

Of course the incest tag might have mislead some people. A Horror tag would have been more appropriate and would have avoided the backlash.

I was kinda wondering on the comments so it's nice to hear that it isn't quite so bad.

I think you're right and i should've posted with a horror tag. Live and learn but it's not my normal stuff. This was a commission for someone.

Thank you for saying something!

A pleasure as always to read through your work. Although I cannot comment

on consistency with the lore having not experienced any of it myself, I can say that this was certainly an enjoyable read and that the build-up of the eldritch horror was very well paced and executed.

I appreciate the comment :) I haven't read HPL in quite a long time but skimmed a few things to catch up and then tried to find a balance between creepy and sexy. Ish. I'm glad you enjoyed it!

I gave it a 5 stars cause i honestly don't think this deserved as low a rating that it has atm. So hopefully it bumps it up a bit. It was well written, mysterious, and kept me guessing what was going on. It's a sign of a great novel in the works imo, perhaps not exactly the best type of style for literotica (since, well u know...). Anyways, I think this should have been given a SCI-FI instead of incest, perhaps warn the reader of incest beforehand. You have a great style and I already enjoy some of your other work. Please keep up the good work!

This was a great mix of erotic horror & incest. It definitely deserves a higher score. Well done.