All Comments on 'The Troublemaker'

Thanks for the story. Yours never "set up" the scene like a lot of would be writers for a cheating wife to take place. I guess wimp writers write about wimp husbands. Glad yours arent.

Damn You write a fine story. Somehow I suspect more of us have had moments of "temper" than we would like to admit. With maturity we learn to control it and life gets better. What a fine story and a nice Holiday treat!

thnx dg good work as always!

Does this story take place in the future? It has to, otherwise it makes no sense.

The war with Iraq started in March 2003. Assuming Randy joined the marines right at the beginning, he spent 6 months in training then went to Iraq for 'a few years'. Let's assume between training and his tour, he was in the marines for 3 years. That brings us to March 2006. So between March 2006 and December 2007, Randy met a girl, got married, spent 8 months in jail, met another girl, married her, had a baby, and has another on the way? Taking out the time in jail, that means in 13 months he got married twice, had a kid, and impregnated Sandy again. Not very plausible.

To anyone who is bound to say 'He didn't say it was THIS Iraq war, duh. It could be Gulf War 1', no it couldn't, since we didn't occupy Iraq in that war.

and then thinking second has got more than a few of us in trouble. Good story.

... nice story of yours. Maybe a little similar to your story "Bad Boy" but it doesn't matter. I like it. Thank you.

<p>Sincere regards</p>

<b>Nucleus</b> from "Knut" country

Well done as always - good luck on the contest.

Regards, Jack

<p>DG, You have written some fine stories. This one however, was not one of your best. With two editors I don't know how so many grammatical errors and misspellings escaped their attention.</p>

<p>There was too little tension here. The Beth character was a throw-a-way. She could have been eliminated from the plot. As for his first wife, I found myself asking why he married her. You tell us that she eventually married her lover and that she was a cheater, then no more. Did she get her just desserts? The lover took a hit from his children and in his divorce but what of Shelly? This part of the story read as if it was truncated to save space.</p>

<p>When our hero meets the woman he will marry you add the potential conflict with her ill friend near the end. But that episode seemed to be hastily added to the story. If you were trying to show that our hero had changed then you should have drawn out that entire scene. Instead it happens so quickly that the impact was minimal.</p>

<p>The bottom line was that I could not get emotionally connected to this story or the characters. Perhaps I've seen them before in a couple other of your stories. Here they were not fleshed out enough.</p>

<p>One thing I like about your stories is that you write about working class people. However, I would argue that their lives are much more interesting than you have presented here or in your other stories.</p>

<p>And what is scary is that I see my brother a lot in this character. I believe (and I really do hope) he's finally grown up now that he's expecting his first kid, but he could have mirrored this character a lot with his hit first and ask questions later actions</p>

<p>To me the characters were believeable, not over the top, and I didn't feel like people were getting it over on the main charater. I was kinda curious about his first wife Shelly. I mean he said that Brett shouldn't have married her, but I was wondering if that is because she did something to make him think this, or because it was just a prediction on his part.</p>

<p>But I thought it was done pretty well</p>

-Risq

You have done another good job. Thanks for the entertainment<P>PT

Two stories by DG Hear in one day. What more can we ask for. Both were very nicely wriiten. For anyone who follows your stories, like I do would have to believe that you put a part of yourself in every story. Each story has common traits. Thank you for another wonderful story.

A fan

every day for months on end. You're still glad that there's something in your lunch bucket, but wish evey once in a while your wife would include a piece of cheese just for a change. Or better yet, something entirely different, say ham or roast beef? DG has become a legend but also he has become formulamatic. With each story, you can see many, many parts of other stories of his. I won't go into the details because if you'd paid any attention at all to his library you already know what I mean. DG please keep writing but do us all a favor and reread your own stories. The next story you write may have already been posted by you before. This comment is out of respect for your work and not meant to be spiteful.

I love your stories. I enjoy seeing your name as I scroll the topics. Keep up the good work.

Elements of several DG-type characters in here as has been noted already, but this is a good story to just sit down and read. Well paced and believable character development.

Another in a long string of very well written stories in a vernacular that anyone should be able to relate to and understand.<P>

You write to life and its consequence with a strong sense of reality and the ability to bring it home with clarity.<P>

A ray of sunshine that others could also project once in a while but don't for their own reasons I guess.<P>

Don't change a thing - just keep doing what you do so well at interval.<P>

Thanks Again Author<P>

With Very High Regard

and so what if it's a little formulaic. It's like a old dear friend that you just keep liking to see over & over. DG, you just keep writing them, I'll just keep reading & enjoying them. Thanks

It kept my interest and moved at a good pace.

DG - - - This rather troubled world we live in is in need of some good bright spots, and you are one of them. Most of us who read your stories smile inside and feel a little better because of what they have read. I have considered "Formulamatic", and think I have seen them advertised on TV for $19.95, made by RONCO. A quarter and the "?" button gets you perhaps a bologna sandwich, maybe a book on good story writing, or best yet, a DG Hear story. Please ignore the nitpickers and just continue to make us humble folk smile when we need it, by doing what you do so well. Grammar? There are college graduates out there who cannot spell for sour apples, or think that a noun is a woman who wears Black Habits. Keep on writing, pal, we needs ya!! Prof. Ramstein

I thought it was an uplifting story that really demonstrated both how true love can happen and also what can happen when we're burned. I thought that Randy showed a good deal of development through the story, and though he's not over his jealousy, he shows that he'll work on it. Good job.

Communication and love making -where can you go wrong with that? It read like a hybrid of Loving wives and Romance (mostly romance actually and was indeed a heart warming tale. Thanks.

DG, you can’t please all the people all of the time, but you are always damn close to it! This story is a realistic portrayal of life and the relationships therein and our hero deserved and got a second chance at happiness and true love. Those of us who love ‘Happy Endings’ should be very happy with this one. DG, just keep writing and we'll keep enjoying your genius. A truly excellent story! Enough said! Pete.

Thank You!

As I've said so many times . . . a new DG Hear makes the day a great one!

DG I think you have a Blue Ribbon on this story its full of spirit ,love,and jealousy ,I give it hands up for this story I hope you win DG.

My favorite moment was when they agreed to always talk things out instead of just reacting. More people need to learn that lesson.

Great story. All people make mistakes and if you are really in love you need to forgive them if possible but the other side of the same coin is that people need to think before they act because you can't go back in time and redo what has already happened. Before you do something you need to think about how you would feel if the shoe is on the other foot so to speak.

Enjoyed the way the characters developed. It is easy to get comfortable with the gradual flow of events. Thanks for a good read.

One way communication or is it that when only one is truthful? You can judge the sincerity and honesty of another's words yet be dead wrong if they're a habitual liar and so used to lying they carry it through easily. In instances like that does 'communication' work for you?

Good Story! Well Written (as usual!). Gave it a FIVE!

That the Iraqis need our help. I gave it a 1

I read a story this & think it's simple.I've tried to do stories like this .... Not so simple at all. Great read. Thanks to the author for sharing.

Just a plain well written very entertaining story. Thanks for sharing.

May have been a bit set piece but it was very enjoyable. Thanks for that. But I see that DWidiot has been here shat and left. His/her comments are more offensive than Harrys. I am sorry you guys get this kind of crap for giving us your efforts for free.

and it stops on a winner. TK U MLJ LV NV

really a nice story.

Great tale. Thanks.

You may actually believe that shit about Iraq.

Great tale. I'm not really a happy ending kind of guy but this was an exception. When good people have a happy ending it's heartwarming. Our hero deserved to be happy. Five Stars

Damn I said happy four times.

Ha

The Iraq war exists - whatever -

FAR more important -the story was well conceived and written well with compassion and love being the paramount truth for most of the people in it.

For those obsessed with other issues:

Troops have been there and done good things for the actual people living in the villages and towns there - TRUTH

Much has been abused, we have been abused, troops have been betrayed and abused, the populace has been abused, money has been abused - many troops have returned and been pleased to have done what they perceive as good things, building hospitals, schools, housing - peoples lives have been saved by action by the troops - get over it - they did good. Whether good was done overall or not.

Okay, gonna do my usual nitpicking here.

You refer to a small wedding and big reception to save money. It's then reception that costs the money, so you want a small reception to keep costs down.

If you don't want to pay for them to get drunk you want a CASH bar. An open bar is when the drinks are free for the guests and you pay.

You made a point about the white wedding dress. I did notice in some of your other stories the bride didn't wear white for the second marriages. The tradition of white for only first marriages died a merciful death years ago. It's only stick-up-their-butt busybodies who care about that crap these days.

The whole world owes a huge debt to those who served in the American Military. U.S. politics at times sucks but we should never confuse that or add it to the mix where the guys 'on the ground' are simply trying to get a lousy job done and get home to their loved ones safely!!

A good simple story, well told.

Please leave your political propaganda and bullshit off this site. You are free to believe whatever crap you are told to believe to save you from using your brain, but don't foist it on the rest of us. You have your opinion, great, but this is not the site for it. Comment on the story and the writing here, and save the propaganda for the sites devoted to it! I certainly have my own opinions on your comments, but this isn't the place to debate or refute them.

I thoroughly enjoyed it. What wonderful women Sandy and Rachel are. Did I misunderstand the line about Sandy wearing a white gown, and nobody complaining? Isn't white traditional at a wedding? Why would there be a problem there? Or did I completely misread the sentence, and it was referring to something entirely different? One of my favourite Dg stories.

This is in regards to your comment about Rachael wearing a white wedding gown: Some people will disagree that she should not wear white because of already having a child. This comes from old traditions that women are still virgins until they consummate their marriage.

I loved it. And I am an old 240 lbs. rounder with scarred-up knuckles and heart. Thanks for an interesting chick flick story for aged-out bar-fighters.

certain types or is it random. TK U MLJ LV NV

Went from loving wives to romance. That was after the bull shit analysis about the US invasion and occupation of Iraq. Right. Before the US came there were no schools in Iraq. Sure.

They didn't have schools?

Is that why he was REbuilding schools?

Seems more like your own politics are showing.

warm fuzzies all around.

I enjoyed this story. It has characters that I actually admire. The guy had to start over with nothing and seemed to change his trouble-making ways. I am cheering for these people and in my mind they live happily-ever-after. Good Job and Thank You.

It's probably all for the best that he and Beth didn't get together because he probably didn't have the maturity then to have a successful marriage.

Sandy settled with her baby's fathers family for $15,000

It takes at least $10,000 a year to raise a child.

So she settled for 1/12 of the cost of raising her daughter to age 18, when a lawsuit would have established her as his heir giving her claim to far more money.

pity he did not mame that bastard who was screwing his first wife.....but he was well rid of that slut....and found an even better woman....but jealousy is hard to overcome without totally trusting each other...

Communication IS the answer to a good marriage. I should apply that to my marriage, hehe. Great story. 5*

Another really good story from DG Hear. You tell stories, not just scenes, and I really appreciate them. Thank you.

What about his kids

Never disappointed when reading one of your stories. Yes, I like some more than others, but I never read one of yours and think "Why did I waste ten minutes reading this crap" , unlike some authors who shall remain nameless...

Very enjoyable story and well written. Living a good and full life is the best revenge!

...no one invited u there.. ur stupid Bush and his pops personal issues with Saddam were the cause of this unwanted invasion of Iraq by the us army... u hoodwinked everyone on false chemical weapons to unleash a conflict that the iraqi people never asked for... all so that mr bush could get a better oil deal for his personal pockets...u left iraq in a worse place then before... more death daily now then before.. isis and all other terror groups have come out as a result of the destabilisation u guys left behind...so stop patting urselves on the back..u fucked it up...

I actually liked the feel-good story, although it was missing any drama.

I did see the comment by Anonymous dated 09/25/20. The then President Bush and asswipe Cheney got us into a war that did more damage to America than almost any other war that we have fought. BUT, the problem was the president and his evil WH cabal, and we should not be taking anything out on the brave and competent soldiers who went to war. I salute those who have served, because their service defines who they are, and not the the people who sent them in harm's way.

This was a great story. I'm glad he got his happy ending with Sandy.

A bit too saccharine after the initial dust-up, but I guess the occasional change from ugliness is welcome.

Excellent story. Personally, I think beating the guy his wife cheated with cost him more than she was worth, but it made for a good story. Thanks for sharing.

I don't give a shit about politics but let me tell you that these people needed help. I bear witness to the killing of women and children. Why would anyone blow up churches and schools full of innocent people?

Buddy

same reason as the Spanish did to the INCA and the AZTECS IN s America

Same reason that you destroyed the original Indian inhabitants of America and also used small pox infected blankets and whiskey to slowly vanquish them…

Same reason as the Brits and Dutch’s nd French slowly impoverished and annihilated the inhabitants of Asia!!

When u do it …we’ll u have self made reasons of justification…

When others do it …they need treatment

Wow to talk about double standards!!!

When Churchill allowed millions of Indians to starve and die by diverting needed food crops from India it was OK? Is that so different from a Islamic suicide bomber ? Churchill killed slowly …this guy kills instantly…both are murderers…

So was Hitler! Why is Churchill honoured and Hitler reviled? Aren’t they both mass murderers??? So is Stalin!

U guys are nothing but a bunch of inhone any hypocrites !!!

When I finished reading the story, I went back and reread the beginning. You never told us why he was at a Mickey D's on Thanksgiving. Other than that unfinished part of your story, it was a really good piece of writing, but then, that is your standard. Thanks for a good story.

detroitdave

Good romantic story, thanks. However, what about Samantha's birth father's parents after all they are still her grandparents and the only child of their deceased son. I understand they denied Sam’s birth but I bet in time they would come to regret that decision. So I was sure they would have made an appearance?

Why didn't Randy widely publish the affair between his ex and the baby produced with the lover as part of his revenge? It is also obvious that this experience has marked him for life: as proof, the way he saw Bill, his future wife's cousin.

Apart from that, nice and sweet little love story.

5*

BJ

Good story 5*

Awwww.... :)

Quit page 1 . He is a trouble maker and married a slut. After that who cares

Raising someone elses child is a simp move.

"Raising someone elses child is a simp move."

She was married to a dickhead when she had her, probably one just like you.

They also have two more of their own.

My guess concerning you: Your idea of date night is a jar of Vaseline, a big screen TV, and your favorite Pornhub playlist.

Prove me wrong. lol

Good one.

She wasn't even married when she had Sammy. The asshole who got her pregnant while dating her and whispering sweet nothings was given marching orders by husband rich family to get out of Dodge and he complied, but then died soon after in a car accident. Shelly was an unrepentant slut. Secretly naming a lawyer some 20 years older than her. Lovely. /sarcasm off

Great story. I really like Randy. He’s a man’s man. Always a pleasure to see the cheating wife’s lover mauled. Author is one of the best to ever post in LW.

A million dead Iraqis did not appreciate the USA coming to their country. Nor did the half a million children from Iraq who died due to illegal sanctions prior to the war.

Good story otherwise.

@kelcha what was the death rate before the war? I've seen sources claim the death rate was lower higher, and comparable, also far more children would have died without the sanctions as the sanctions and no fly zone were sops to other regional powers to get them to agree to not invade and slaughter everyone in retaliation

sure the west and in particular America benefited economically from a enforced stability. but so did Iraq

I don’t usually like the non-stop, machine gun style, but this story grabbed me and never let go. Love it. I even teared up at the end. Wish my own life had such an ending,

Very nice. Four stars for this, no stars for the knuckle dragger further down who thinks 'raising someone else's kid is a simp move'. He has clearly never forgiven his sister for rejecting his sexual overtures.

JR