All Comments on 'The Wrong Movie Ch. 03'

Your story telling is one of the best I have read recently. Although I don't think you intentionally made this one to be s serial lik POF, it is shaping up none the less. Your descriptions are colorful enough to add detail but not enough to bog the story down. Getting the reader to have a believable connection to the character and the story is every writers intent, and I think that you are doing a superb job. Keep it up.

enjoy erotica of all kinds and you have a good hand at what you are doing

You have a wonderful mastery of expression. You paint the emotions and thoughts of your characters with ease and finese! I love reading such expertly detailed and crafted writing. I'm a huge fan of incest stories and you certainly have written the finest I've had the pleasure of reading. I will certainly follow your serial stories with great pleasure! Thank you so much for sharing your imagination and talent.

I like your use of interruptions in your dialogue. It makes the dialgoue sound more realistic. It's good that you try to flesh out Dr. Austin instead of just having her become a totally stock character.

Danny's character though, is a bit too goody-goody (typical nice boy type). He needs more subtlety and nuance, a little more edge to make him 3D.

Another great story can't wait for the next chapters. So much scope for fun and play between all the characters. I must also comment on your writing style which makes following the story and enjoying the relationships easy and engaging. Keep up the good work - bring on the doctor, mum and dad!!

It´s been total wonderful story, all 3 parts. Can't wait next parts coming. Pls hurry up, and Thanks!

there isnt enough of this stuff around at the mo! which makes these stories even better!!!

Your writing is excellent. This makes two of your series that I'm hooked on, whether you mean for them to be series or not.

this story is wonderful but you are really starting to annoy me. why do you keep teasing me? i love all three chapters! please oh please continue the story!

Loved this and two of your other series. Keep up the good work!

I really like how the Mom is coming off as the befuddled "victim". Therapist angle works nicely. Good composition and story-telling! I look forward to seeing the completion of these stories!!!

-- asterikx

This is a brilliant peice of literature. i have not found as much excitment in this series than in any other of the submissions i have read. please keep letting them have SEX, SEX, SEX!!!

This is a awesome story, all three chapters. I'll keep my comment here, simple and straight to the point :

AWESOME STORY, SO WRITE MORE CHAPTERS!!!

That is all.

This is a great story line. Please continue it soon I am dying to see what happens next.

I have never been more turned on by any other story please make a new chapter

I love it. Keep the story going, as Racel says, please. You have developed the story well. I just worry about them having unprotected sex. They don't need more problems.

I like your story, but its end is a cliffhanger. What happens next? What about the therapist? How does the mother react when she finds her daughter in bed with her brother again, what did se want to tell Danny?

Please continue

Just re-read this and can't wait for Part IV.

Wow, this is funny, sexy, dramatic, and all the while remaining on a true professional standard. If incest eroticas weren't illegal, I'd suggest you sent this, infatuation, and your all time best, Party of Five, to a publisher. You can still try, Party of Five could make the cut. Also, I could have use for a great mind such as yours, with inspirations for my own novels. Of course you would be accredited for your ideas. email me at pugfugly_a@hotmail.com with your thoughts

that great story but what happen to mother and there kids?

would Rachael be pregnancy or not? and how there future? Please more story of chapter 4 and more please

Romantic! Erotic! Sexy! Well written. Thank You! Ronnie W.

I very much enjoyed this story. It arroused me and intrigued at the same time. I am attempting to write a story of my own-though not for Literotica and nto even erotic-and i always marvel at how a writer can make something believable and almost make it feel like it could somehow happen to you. I love the way your stories pull you in and do not let go until the very end.

-keep writing because i-and i know many others do too-love your work

I am looking forward to your next chapter. Keep up the good work

I just read all three chapters and I can't wait for the next chapter. I love your writing style. You are my favorite author. PLEASE keep up the great work. I can't wait for more of your stories. I have read everything you have wrote so far. I can't wait for more. Thank you and keep up the good work.

Fantastic writing style. Please continue this series (it's my favourite on Literotica).

Cheers

Mom and dads resolve doesn't sound very strong to me. Dad even sounds a tad supportive even. Looks like a family is "cumming" together very soon...

Love this story please put more story chapter 4 thanks cfh

Please write a chapter 4 I'd really like to read more and I'm sure many many others would love to as well.

senbloodysational

Yeah, definently need a chapter 4 on this one, Trudy and Steven have their hands full with these two, I'd love to see how the rest of the story unfolds.

I love all of this guys stories but you guys have to realize that the last thing he wrote was almost two years ago.

*Sigh* The dude really is gone. All we can now do is jes keep readin his work A-Z all over again...I love em, ye should too.

This is one of the best i have read.

Please make a chapter 4

This series of stories is the best I've seen on Literotic for sure.

best series ever.. sadly VertigoJ is missing..

sad, sad, our writer has left because a happy ending (forgive the pun) would have been lovely!

this story was outstanding.i really-really liked it.it had me locked in from start to finish.there is not to many authors who have the talent that you do.i look forward to many more stories from you.keep up the good work,i definately appreciate your efforts.

Nice story, and I"m sure Mom will have to get over it. Keep on writing stories.

write more i like this its amazing

does the psychiatrist get in on it

i want to kno

btw i really like this story your an amazing writer

great story, hope you going with it.

Outstanding incest story. Certainly hope that you intend to continue.

Keep going, I want to see where the ending heads. Very much an attention-getter.

Literally, pure fucking gold my friend, please give us more! we're starving to hear about these two lovers, we need more! great work once again!

More story! More story! This story is amazing! We demmand more! Danny is gorgeous and Rachael is adorable and MORE STORY!

What a great ending! Love it! And I hope it's not really the ending. More, please!!

This is a wonderful story and I hope you can make at least one more chapter! You have talent as a writer and I like this story

This should have used at least one more chapter instead of this cliff hanger. Considering this story is 8 years old its a safe bet we will never get that.

As the others have said, another chapter or two or three would be nice. It's been some time since I have enjoyed a story like this. Actually, I can't remember ever having read anything quite like it. Sweet, loving and fun. It reads like a true love story, full of warmth and heart. I caught myself smiling with them as they shared the joy of simply being together. Refreshing, I would love to read more. Thanks!

Some more - please! A seriously good ending, now we need some more chapters - soon! I''m absolutely agog to see how this plays out, so please, don't leave me hanging!

WHY START A STORY LET IT GO FOR THREE CHAPTERS AND LEAVE THE READERS HANGING. I WON'T READ ANOTHER STORY LIKE THIS OR VOTE AND COMMENT ON IT..............LAROC OF AGES

Despite contacting VertigoJ about another story that was left hanging, I am believing that this is yet another author gone silent. Such a good story as with all his others, the readers yet again are left wondering.

Regardless of what WE think,there are many possible reasons he has not written in a while. I will just hope that if he has time he will write again and if he does not, for whatever reason we will just endure. I will be glad if he does, though. I really enjoyed his work.

In my opinion it would be hot if the psychiatrist asked the mother for a therapy session with both Danny and Rachael and then things heat up leading to a threesome right in Dr Austin's office. Whatever the case is, keep writing please.

P.S: I almost never comment, but at the beginning of the story you wrote that you wanted people to rate and comment so I did.

...bet the therapist was masturbating before the door hit the moms ass on the way out! Lol!! :)

It IS an interesting situation though, lol. I never wanted kids. Strike that, I always wanted two or three girls, but I always think of them as coming to visit once they've grown up, or hanging out and doing stuff with dad during the summer in their mid teens and on... Actually raising them from the ground up has never had any appeal to me, ESPECIALLY in this fucked up world we live in now :(

What to do with these kids... Kinda with dad, at least if shes wrapped up with her brother shes not out banging some drug head fuckup or getting knocked up by some jock. I cringe at the thought of having a daughter that is dating, lol. ....and boys are their own kind of stupid when they get into trouble, lol.

I'd put the daughter on b.c. Right off the bat (cant believe the retard parents havent done a sex-ed class for the kids since the school didnt!, hell my mom had a book with pictures and was teaching me before I even had any interest in girls!).

....anyway, b.c., then a talk with both of them about how easily it can be for them to emotionally hurt each other really badly over the long term. Pushing them apart is the sure way for them to pack up and move out that week...

....thats a tough nut to crack, and dammit, no more chapters have been written! Argh!!!

... we're never going to get to read chapter 4, are we ?

I do hate it when a good story is never finished !

No number #4 in the future -- time for me to pull the plug as I just can't take it unless I know the outcome.! WAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH { i will give another #5 }

Anybody know a "good" Lawyer - ??

This is a good story, different to others incest stories, but the author is forgotten us.

Is about 8 years waiting for a chapter 4, but the author is no written nothing else in LIT from the year 2005, and this is strange, because is was prolific author.

Maybe he/she not want to write again more stories, I don`t know.

Is for that I give only 4*.

Good story, well written and with some amusing scenes. It's a real pity that the author never followed it up with further chapters.

romantic, funny, adorable

Sadly this joins the numerous unfinished stories on Lit. 3/5

Come on mom, get with it. Bring dad into it and everyone fuck