All Comments on 'Tina's Threesome'

bit and maybe about a half page but it was pretty good for a guy.

Lookin foreward to Linda and Tina

Good and erotic, but needs to be proofread.

I believe that a couple of your critics came off overly harsh and I just wanted you to know that I enjoyed your story. It had a plot, character development and was left open for continuation without turning happily ever after on us.

~Cromm~

Very well put together. Great plot development. Please don't keep us waiting for part two. Sounds like with Linda added, me screen will be smoking.

Great story! Needs proofing. Spelling errors detract from the story. At least for me

I personally would like to see an continuation of the story, especially when Tina and Linda meet.

You're trying too hard. Story was good, but narrative was a little labored. Write the way you'd talk, and it'll be better.

But the one thing that is common in all these stories on the site, is that the main woman in the stories is new to this, and is always on the rebound, either the boyfriend is not good enough, or the husband has left her or she has never gotten off with any man, and she is curious about what it would be like with another woman, there are a few exceptions.

Not bad, but it was Monday evening when she went for the bus and suddenly tomorrow is Saturday

The shaving scene didn't seem to fit into the story. Personally I think if the story was more hunter catching the prey it would have been fine but the caring nature made it break the flow