by coaster2
Creative, adult, real feeling, get's the details well, excellent pacing. You the Man, coaster2
A good normal man discovering that he can make more out of his life after forty than he or his wife imagined. Personally I could take an even larger dose of details and reflections but I suspect that many colleagues would growl at the idea.
Jerry in Washington State, USA - I was surprised to see that you have two chapters posted and available to read today. I look forward to Chapter 4, but wanted to comment on Chapter 3 while the story is still fresh in my mind. I generally prefer longer chapters, but I feel the length and pacing of your chapters works well enough for me. I like the addition of Teresa to the story and like how you are taking it slow so far on a possible romance. I also like how the future job prospects are being covered in a nice detail - again without rushing events too quickly. Thanks for continuing to make me care about Stan - he reminds me of a person I would have enjoyed being a friend to. The ice skating / hockey doesn't interest me, but it won't keep me from enjoying the rest of this journey that Stan is experiencing.
work ethics and luck has to be considered, TK U MLJ LV NV
FYI, a printed copy of an email is only evidence that a communication occurred. What is evidence, is the email itself. Also, instructions/guidelines on the company intranet could also be used as evidence of unlawful work conditions
I find Sylvia's sudden concern for her family curious. While there is always the "you don't know what you have till it's gone" factor, if she had shown a FRACTION of her current concern earlier, they wouldn't be in the situation they're in now.
I do wonder a bit a Stan's reluctance towards a possible reconciliation.
Assuming she isn't/wasn't cheating, if she is willing to have a honest discussion about how her job is affecting the family and make appropriate changes, why COULDN'T they make a go of it?
The trouble I have with the whole idea of him reconciling with Sylvia is that for several years she has lived off of his income while putting her income (which was as much as his) away and treated him like an unwelcome nuisance in their home.
What it looks like is that she planned on a life without him in the future.
She was using him and lost respect for him because of it.
He wasn't a partner to her, he was a tool to get what she wanted.
Maybe author should read title book. Good story, but inappropriate comma use causes some confusion by changing sentence meaning.
Note to foreign writers…find aout a little more about US business law. NO ONE starts a one man company by incorporating. Ohio, and most other states, have Limited Liability Companies. Every small business in Ohio is an LLC. Also, unlike most socialist countries and states, I do not believe Ohio has the unspecified labor laws outlawing the unspecified “rules”. Perhaps we’ll be provided some concrete examples but so far a rather weak plot device.