All Comments on 'Too Late for Goodbye'

I think the author got across the point that was to be made and the story is entertaining.

Well written and a complete story.

Thanks

Short and to the point. Happened to a laid back friend of mine a couple of months ago, he isn't laid back anymore. The other guy left town within a week leaving most of his stuff behind, it was the smartest thing that he has ever done. The Tommy's of the world need to be put in their place, there are few men left who will put them there. It is a good thing to find out before it is too late.

Love the Story but it would be nice to know how everything turns out. does Tommy get his. does Stella stick by her friend.

Does are Hero get a New Better Woman to Flaunt in Jackies Face,

Nice Story

Good short to the point story. Your doing very well with your stories, carry on writing.

... But it seems a little unfinished. I like to see the cheaters face SOME sort of consequences for their actions.

I can come to terms with Writers using VRS, if you do, but for commenters to use it . . is plain ridiculous, or dumbed-down and lazy.

How do we detect VRS? Bad word choice is the dead give away " Does Are Hero .... " indicated the accent the commenter has, even.

" I bought this Voice program and I'm damned well going to use it " seems to be the motto

Cheers

Kilroy

fiance = loving wife. To be frank, too short and nothing new.

It still needed a bit more resolution. While I appreciate its brevity and economy of words, I would have enjoyed a more fleshing out as it may of the main characters. Good story and will forward to more.

A "Flash" story that is complete and not some unfinished BS. Well said, well written, and well done.

*sigh* This is such self-important writing. It's not particularly well-done, and that makes it worse.

Thanks for your fine work

Good! Enjoyed it!

This is a good story, albeit a bit short.

However, it is "perspective", not "prospective" as used here.

I thought is was well written. Her reaction to 'you're out of here' was about right. Endless groveling is generally over done. However, as others have commented, it needs filling out, and some resolution to the revenge aspect. As it stands, there is too little in the plot department.

As to originality, while it is to be encouraged, it's an unrealistic expectation, given the tens of thousands of LW stories.

So keep writing.

I liked it. We didn't have the main character make sorry excuses for her cheating or have him wrestle with the decision to break up. Pretty refreshing!

At least he learned about her cheating ways now instead of after the wedding.

Why go after Tommy? Put the bad behind and go on with the future.

I agree with the comment regarding Tommy. Totally out of character for Mr. "in control" to go postal on the other guy. Tommy is probably just the latest in a string of other guys, anyway. Kick the cheating bitch out and get on with your life.

No complications to a common plot. Fiancée thinks she can play games and she gets caught. At least he didn't end up married to the bitch.

The whole "I need time to get perspective" is bull even if she hadn't been cheating. She had already accepted his proposal. If she hasn't already got the certainty of wanting to be married to him why would he accept someone who has to talk themselves into marriage. That's a very weak start to a supposedly lifelong relationship. "Yes, I love you but I need to get away from you to think about it." Not someone I would want to be married to. I'm not saying she's bad for having doubts (but she is for cheating). But you don't start a marriage with a maybe/maybe not attitude. Better to set her aside and move on.

And yes, Tommy needs to get his ass kicked. Tommy knew he was dissing him. Maybe a busted nose will remind him in the future not to move in on existing relationships. If Tommy didn't know she was seeing someone else it would be a different story.

Short and sweet. Good job.

and a quick reaction from the husband.

short and to the point a real man.

I like it and the NO-NONSENSE way the story was written. In the mean time I disagree with the others who felt Tommy needn't be dealt with. In another case, had she gone out and found someone to connect with (minus her ring) it's entirely on HER (as, by the way, it would be on YOU if the circumstances were reversed). However, in this case, scumbag Tom asked about him by name and screwed with an "engaged woman" deliberately, so all bets regarding Tom are off and he is DEFINITELY fair game for whatever he gets. -LBuddG

Your stories are good. You do not need to explain that there is no sex in them. With the way you write sex would only distract from the story line. Please do not change your style you are breath of fresh air.

Short, correct and to the point. Keep up the good work.

perspective, perspective.

I like it, will there be more?, will he find Tommy or meet someone else who rocks his world the right way?

was he bitchslappin' the cunt as he said this? He ain't going after anyone. She's Tommy's.

The set up is great, even the confrontation fast and to the point. But then it stops. We don't get to enjoy her suffering the consequences, and we don't get to enjoy Tommy having the crap beat out of him. I know some authors feel it's stylish to stop the story short, but if you don't want to write then why did you begin the first part? I mean you got things going, so follow through.

Well paced and well plotted.

Keep writing your stories are one of the few left that have Men With Balls in them. Way too many castrated cuckold wimpass stories making there way to this catAgory. THANKS!

Short & sweet! She obviously didn't value what she had and valued Tommy more. Tommy may learn a valuable lesson about screwing with a woman that isn't yours.

Thank you

This is what I wish I would have done with the last woman I married (number three, and no more) , then I would have been far better off. This was a great short story with so much in it. Great job CC. R.T.

You told the whole tale, but I wish there had been more.

I read all of your stories on here real powerful and good reading. Keep up the good work

It is not prospective. It is Perspective! It sets my teeth on edge when the wrong word is used when a simple dictionary/thesaurus check would give the correct word!

How do you know the author meant 'perspective' instead of deliberately misspelling the word?

In the context of the story it could be intended - get off your high horse.

They are not married yet. But she should be devoted to him, and not Tommy. She's done something that will certainly dirty her social history, so to speak. This chapter could/should be continued and developed into one of several possible ways: the chapter could form a template for a longer story. Nice job.

Good point made that she had already been caught doing this before. She didn't learn nor did she love her fiance enough to quit playing around. We did not get any dialogue as to her reasons. Maybe she thought him a wimp? Tommy needs to be at least scared or at least scared enough to say no unless she was breaking her engagement. The writer did not cover that either. Maybe she told Tommy that her fiance was a wimp cuckold to be? Without the "Whys" what do we get from these snapshots? Of course we get the point that the main character is not going to tolerate an unloving and disrespectful slut for a future wife. I mean if he had, that would be describing a willing cuckold wimp wouldn't it?

I started to be bored after four sentences. That's how long it should have been !!

i wish it was a little longer, maybe make her cry some more and tell how the hunt for tommy went. lol. would have made a kick ass story. though, that was nice and sweet for a short one.

Bye,Bye bitch

Very sweet and to the point! Short or not I liked this one.

Oh this one sentence.

How pussy-whipped are we as a gender?

Nowadays you have to feel bad about dumping your cheating fiancé because she's crying? Evolution evolves in a sinus-curve, I think the female gender in the west is in for one rude awakening.

If she really doesn't love the guy anymore, why the meaningless tear. Why couldn't she straighten herself, take responsibility, and take off with her lover?

And the main guy would be stupid if he went along with his threat, when she obviously isn't worth the risk of putting himself into jail.

user (boy or girl); hate them.

John got rid of a future cheating wife and never even broke a sweat.

My man.

HA

but she's sorry and didnt mean to hurt you. TK U MLJ LV NV

Short and sweet and to the point. Thanks for sharing

short and not so sweet

Short but not too sweet, just like you said; good read.

That's how you prevent a future cheating skank slut whore ex-wife.

HA Ha ha

... but I think he shouldn't have mention the Regency. Just tell the slut it's over and to get the Hell out. He has nothing to explain. He said it before, back in college. As for Tommy just catch him in a semi public setting, jack him up against a wall and in loud voice ask "What did you say about my Mother?" Let people break in up. Over a period of time repeat with "I hear you been talking behind my back" and other such claims (there is a million of them). At some point he'll fight or run when he see's the big guy coming. Both should work out well.

Panther Fan.

How stupid do women think men are? I know men think too much with the "little head", but Jackie got what she so richly deserved. Good short story.

As Simon Cowell used to say ... So what? Thanks for the effort.

Its about time one of your male charachters had two balls and a backbone!

Not prospective. ~grin.

who can create a world in one page. Please write more for us.

Short, sweet and to the point and that point being the area where the footpath meets the road.

but you will, TK U MLJ LV NV

for his ring back.

Short. To the point. Pack it. Get out. Don't come back. Ever.

Nice and short. Only real problem I had with it was the misuse of the word prospective. You should have used the word perspective.

short sharp and too the point.Best way to deal with a cheater,perfect.!

"Tell me, when did Stella move to the Regency Hotel?"

perhaps it would have been more dramatic to just play the recorded message on the answering machine...

Nice cute story, very enjoyable.

If you can't spell, get help before submitting your work to be published.

Prospective literally means "looking forward". It can also refer to an event that is likely or expected to happen in the future.

In this case, her behaviour, arrogance, and deception, led to her being caught in her past lies.

Her cheating happened in the past. She did it yet again expecting to get away with it another time. In actuality, he had the perspective of enjoying the prospective of looking forward to a life without her and her lies. And the perspective to put it all together in order and to understand her betrayal.

He's quoting something she's said to him in the past. By this time in the story, we already know that she's not very smart.

A clear headed protagonist for a change!

i wish i was not asleep at the switch 5

is that they don't know that they are stupid. But they sure as hell think everybody else is.

Just like I like it!

My own was just as short and sweet. My fiancé and I were not far from our wedding when I happened to stop in at a restaurant/lounge about 60 miles from where we lived. I enjoyed the place, they had the best wings back then so if in the neighborhood, I'd swing in. So, I take a corner seat with a bucket of wings and a pitcher of beer along with the sports page and settled in, until I saw my betrothed coming in on the arm of a guy who I knew to be an 'ex' lover. She was smiling up into his face like he was God.

My heart dropped and I was almost sick. They sat across the room from me and neither saw me simply because they didn't take their arms off of one another. They sat next to one another and I saw him fondle her more than once. It was really over when I saw her take his hand and actually put it between her legs. I watched, took a couple cell phone pictures and then set it to video. When there was enough evidence anyone would understand, I was thinking about her folks who'd spent a lot of money already, I'd show it.

I'm willing to give every problem time, time to understand ones feelings and not jump the gun. I gave it about 30 minutes, more than adequate time, then started my new life, without her as my wife. I stood, dropped two $20's and walked directly to their table where his hand was working furiously between her legs, obvious to more than just me. They didn't see me before I got to their table and her left side was to me. Before they knew someone had stopped, I had grabbed her left hand and swiped my engagement ring right off her finger. She shrieked when she saw me and what I was doing, and then started crying. I told her in words loud enough for the entire room to hear.

"I'll have your shit packed on the front porch and you can pick it up tomorrow. I don't want to see or hear from you ever again."

She tried to grab me when I turned to leave but I shook her off and left without looking back. I had to walk around the side of the building to get to my truck, right past the window where they sat. She was back in the booth with her head down on the table crying, her new boyfriend was rubbing her back and talking to her. I stopped and when he noticed the movement, he looked up. I drew my finger across my throat and pointed to him, then left. My point was clear.

My cellphone rang so many times I took finally turned it off. We didn't have a landline so the only way to contact me was my cellphone or stop by. The next 8 hours were spent purging our rental of her stuff, I had it all in garbage sacks on the front porch by midnight. The pictures I saved for last. All of our pictures were in photo albums, on our computer or hanging on the wall. The ones from the computer, I purged. Every single one of them. Nothing was saved. Those that were on the wall I took down, took the picture out and cut myself out of it and replace what was left. Every picture in our albums I did the same thing, I cut myself out of them where possible, or threw it in the fire if not. All these I laid on top of her bags of stuff.

I was woke up the next morning with banging and screaming. Befuddled with not enough sleep, I went downstairs to see what the hell was going on. It was my ex, along with her folks and she was screaming to get in. I'd blocked every entry with a chair so she couldn't get in. With my truck in the garage, she had no way of knowing whether I was there or not. The racket continued for at least another hour with her folks trying to pull her away. They finally got her to agree to wait in their truck while they loaded her stuff, until she happened to noticed the wall photos on top of her shit and that I was cut out. She went ballistic! It got so bad, I finally went back upstairs and called the police. She had broke out the window in the kitchen door and was trying to unlock it when the police showed up.

When they knocked on the door I had to answer it. My ex tried to slide by and get in, until I slammed the door in their face. I watched as he put her in the squad car and came back to the door, this time I invited him and her folks in. I explained to the police we'd split up and I had packed her stuff and they could pick it all up, plus, they were welcome to come back later and go through the house for anything else I might have missed. Then I explained to her folks, who never really cared for me, they like the other guy better even though he'd cheated on her before, what had happened. Her dad spit and sputtered, saying his daughter wasn't like that. I dug out my cell phone and after I showed them a half dozen pictures, along with the policeman, he calmed down. It wasn't until I made them watch the video and believe me, dear old dad didn't want to, that they truly understood. When it got to the point where I had zoomed in on his hand rubbing her clit and making her cum, neither had anything to say. I apologized for the money they had already spend and offered to split it with them. They didn't say anything when they walked out with the cop. It was only a few minutes and her shit was loaded and they pushed her into their crew cab pickup drove away.

You'd think that was all, right? Nope. The cheater cunt wouldn't leave me alone. She stalked me harassed me and did her best to embarrass me. Worst of all, she set her friends on me, telling me I was being unreasonable. It came to a head when two of our friends stopped by and told me I had overreacted and I should take her back. So I asked to have Lisa sit next to me. When she did, I kissed her and stuffed my hand between her legs and grabbed her cunt. Fuck, you would have thought I set off a bomb! She screamed and tried to get away and her boyfriend went ballistic trying to beat the hell of out me. When they had calmed enough, I showed them the video and said my playing with his girlfriend shouldn't be any big deal, that is what they were telling me when it was MY fiancé. They were properly quiet when they left, and I told them not to come back, ever.

I'd had enough so I downloaded the video on the computer and started sending it out to everyone in our email list. EVERYONE. I'll say this, no one called or stopped by to apologize to me but no one bothered me again. Even my ex didn't bother me anymore. The last I heard, she had moved in with the guy and about 6 months later, she moved back out after he had cheated on her multiple times.

I thought it was apropos.

Stupidity runs amok. Now she can fuck her boy but she lost her man.

Enough said

and using the same excuse doesn't work every time. TK U MLJ LV NV

A perfect cheating resolution!

At last a man that has a realistic perspective on relationships and cheating partners.

Thanks for the ride, short but oh so sweet!

He found out before they got married thank God. Life's too damn short to waste time with stupid sluts. He found out about the problem, dealt with it and moved on. Well, except for the promise to show the asshole who was willing to fuck his fiancee. Gotta love a man who knows when someone needs to be taught a very important lesson about life, that being that sooner or later such a bastard is gonna fuck with the wrong man's woman. The ex fiancee loses him, the asshole gains the need to grow eyes in the back of his head, and learn to never sleep again, for the rest of his life. Sounds like a great ending to me.

Ed Grocott

edgrocott@gmail.com

Still a good story, still the best way to deal with a cheater. Married or not, the willingness to cheat is part of the core personality in a weak, selfish person. In truth, such a person should never be allowed to marry, or hold a position of trust or responsibility of any kind. You see, the phrase once a cheater, always a cheater is in fact true. That is because cheating is only a symptom of a much worse condition - pure foolishness! Yes, cheaters are fools. Their selfishness overcomes their intelligence and they do foolish things of all kinds. So, this story took the best, most wise path in dealing with a cheater: Cut off all communications with the cheater and move on.

This site is for posting your own stories, right?

So why would you use the comments section of someone else's story to post YOUR story?

Am I missing something?

Look, if you want to post "burn the bitch" stories to bolster your flagging self-esteem ... awesome, but something like this belongs in the non-erotic category. That is what that category is for, stories with no sex or eroticism that have business being in any other category. Now beyond that, this story reads like the bitter, little fantasy of a guy who's been kicked to the curb and spends his days in a dark room muttering to himself over what he "should've said to that bitch".

Whine much? Butt Hurt Cause Your Boyfriend Cheated On You? Just get off your mom's tablet, get out of her basement, pull your panties out of you vagina and FUCK OFF.

So what happened to Jackie and Tommy? Stella needs to be dealt with as well. As far as it went, it was a decent enough story. It just didn't go far enough.

Its a shame you no longer write.

Seems the reactions of the men in your stories a very close to real.

Not really a story, more like a scene from one.

Also it's perspective, not prospective

Enjoyed this story. Brief and to the point.

A good thing that Jackie didn't know how to work the answering machine.

This one I liked! He wouldn't let her get away with it but what I liked most is that he wasn't going to let Tommy get away with it!

Good flash story

Think author was being sarcastic.

Girlfriend using wrong word thinking she was sounding intelligent

A Flash story the worth the few short minutes to read. *****

A perfect short story. No questions left unanswered.

short and to the point

very well done

just wish i could of heard about her suffering a tiny bit

I think you meant perspective.

Good story, bad girl, and much needed freedom.

Some commenters asked why should the ex-boyfriend who was fucking his fiancé get punished, lol. These guys must be alpha males who routinely screw fiancés and married women. They are afraid that this type of retribution will be applied to them! Like are hero, I point at those commenters, move my finger across my neck and point at THEM! They are next!

Just too bad you didn't carry it just a bit longer with him taking care of Tommy!

Great story. Just a man taking care of his business.

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Perfect flash story. She is accused, tried, and convicted. The end.

Wish it were always that easy.

The confrontation with Tommy. I am sure he got his ass kicked royally.

Why Trandall. They aren't even married and John put up with it before and forgave her. If they were married then perhaps but they arent. She made the promises and it was obvious she was going after it. Fuck em both, they aren't worth the effort