All Comments on 'Trallis: Summer Storm Dancer'

I really liked this story. The premise is wonderful. However, there are some rough spots in story flow and punctuation. These made the story less believable to me, and thus less effective. That said, I really loved your fully realized world of Trallis, and grew to really care about the main characters. With more editing, this would be the best piece fantasy genre piece I've read on the Literotica site.

Nothing but horror and death and abuse. A terrible story!

The world you describe is non-industrial, where did the horse people, or others acquire bed linens,or blankets? They are woven on looms; to create anything close to a sheet, it could not be a hand loom.

And that just covers the method of production, what did they use for raw materials?