by sunburycd
Good start. I loved the way this unfolded and the revelation from the mother that she was turned on by her son's cum is hopefully leading to mom teaching her son and daughter the pleasures of the flesh.
Willing to become sluts just to fit in.
Manoblue, what because a girl likes sex she doesn't deserve respect? If a guy fucks around he's a stud. Such hypocrisy.
This surprise trip to the lake has interesting implications. Mom hot for son, sister will bag brother, Dad wants daughter. You have set in motion a lot. Time for you to write chapters 2 and 3 and 4 and and and. Five stars for you
I love twin stories. Hope you continue the story soon.
So your other stories I enjoyed but this one I see you're making the sister into a slut and heading towards having one big family orgy/partner swap and that kills the interest for me in this story. Sorry but not my cup of tea.
Sorry but this is a family incest story and the family doesn't love each other they just lust for each other. This is a sex story plain and simple. Dad checking out daughter is the biggest red flag and please don't use the word love when you have the twins fuck each other the the parents swap partners. That's not love it's a porno. 1 star story
Tommy first being confronted with her ass was hot, cumming on her face was hotter.
Could have done without the sorority thing. And I prefer one-on-one - romantic lust vs. family orgy. Involving the rest of the family would have been a mistake.
... I can't believe the vitriol spewing from people reading a fiction incest story. Really?
I think you are firing on all cylinders. I can't wait to see where you're going to go with this. A family orgy at the end with several bro/sis, mom/son, dad/daughter, and mom/dad scenes will work for me. Great job so far. Too short though.
Okay...so I started losing interest as soon as Daddy started perving on his own daughter. Then a few sentences later we get hit with:
"They won't accept my application unless I send them a photo of my face, covered in cum! It's to show I'm willing to do what the sorority commands and that I'm the right kind of girl!"
That finished this one off for me. I quit reading the story and jumped straight into the comments. I'm quite certain that you have a better imagination than that. Any sorority sending outrageous such as this would immediately be banned from the university that wasn't named yet by this point in the story.
I fully realize that this story is entirely fiction and as such, the reader should suspend reality to a certain extent. But you can only push the line so far before you leave the land of fiction behind and arrive in the country of LUDICROUS.
So between the foreshadowing of an upcoming family orgy and the ridiculous letter, I'm walking away from your tale. 1/5