All Comments on 'Two Moms, Two Laps: Laying Penny'

I love this series, but I've got to say. There is a lot of emotion coming through on this. It's most unusual.

Loved the earlier works in this series. have literally been checking every day for this latest update. But I cant read past the first few paragraphs. In the immortal words of a distasteful British 'comedian'... Who the fuck is Alice?

Please please please repost with the errors fixed.

Basic error. Really not sure how you missed it?

Thanks for another great chapter to this story.

This is an amazing series, just keeps getting better and better. I love the complexity, any new characters can lead to new developments. The more the merrier, I say.

Thanks for a fantastic chapter and please give us more.

max052

Loved the 1st two chapters.

Chapter 3 took it all south and Chapter 4 has continued the trend. To the Zero.

Unreal.

No stars.

Boo-Hahh!!!

This is done very well to sumptuous degrees. Yet, I miss the covertness, risk and taboo elements of intital story. Everybody but everybody is a secret freak & nearly everything but everything is sanctioned by committee.

There are no villains and no sense of risk or danger. I dig the mom action don't fully get third party, moment by moment directions, feedback & endorsements of erotic action. The action in bed is exquisite though squished with third & fourth parties.

When you are old school & still dislike offensive coordinator directing the quarterback via wireless helmet receivers. This seems a extension of insiduous chamber group think . The aesthetics of all feminine player/coaches far outdo Bill Belicheck or Parcells. Thank God.

These Lovely Lone Star Milfs are ommnipresent erotic yentas. They call the plays, give running commentary in the action and finally insert themselves in the hubris huddle. I do appreciate that TTT Is trying something different from what he's done before. This is fantasy and decadant camp. The writing is sterling but doesn't touch me on a primal level.

This gets full marks overall. Its too excelllent in too many ways to grade out as less. Five stars for technique, boldness and innovation. The raw heat index is a four. I'm sorry but Jeremy is following " the rules " laid down by mom, dad, gf, gf's mom. The story won't be full-on En Fuego until this seduction by task force bit goes on sabbatical.

excellent and quite interesting to bring in Penny's mom. However, there was a little confusion at first with references to Alice's mom and Alice's First time(it should have read Penny). Other than that waiting for next chapter

Second commenter (Anonymous) was correct. Don't know why I'm having so many issues getting this series submitted correctly. This time I submitted a version which didn't have final edits. There were some name issues early on, a couple of misspelled words, a few grammar errors. I'm sure I didn't catch all the errors in the final edit, but the corrected version has been submitted and should be going up shortly. Mea culpa.

The first chapter, as said earlier, was an effort to do something similar to other 'lap mom' stories, from the son's view. The rest of the series is an effort to deal with family dynamics, love, and romance. I didn't want the typical Dad scenarios where he is either a) clueless, b) out of the picture, c) a bastard who deserves it, or d) a willing cuckold. I know it won't be everybody's cup of tea, sorry about that.

I hope to have the next chapter up within the week. Thanks for the comments and continued reading. Hope everyone had a great Thanksgiving!

Awesome story .

"I didn't want the typical Dad scenarios where he is either a) clueless, b) out of the picture, c) a bastard who deserves it, or d) a willing cuckold."

Yeah, instead, this time you made Colin all of those things. Except maybe for the "bastard" part, but I'm sure you will fit that in, if you want, among the love-fest going on involving everyone but Colin...

I loved the first chapter primarily because it did pay homage to some of the great 'lap' stories. To be honest I would have stuck with it my friend. I think the story is good but its getting too off subject and involving too many people now..Should have kept it with the two moms and two sons...Now needing to change the title dude, Its not two moms and two laps anymore..Is it???

One of the hottest stories I've read. This last part fits in well with the previous parts, very integral and well thought out. Loved the introduction of the two moms and their interplay. Also, loved your little hints on what might follow. Keep up the good work.

Vriesea

I have to say this is by and far one o the best series that I have read. Not to much that it muddles all the main plots. I am loving the addition of Penny and the dynamic she has brought into things. It is not often to find a story that is this multi-faceted, having the dad slowly work into things has been nice as well. As others have said it's normally a dad that's one of a few things, well Harold really holds his own, doesn't take crap and is someone Jeremy can look up to. I have to say from one fellow Texan to another, awesome job!

The first parts have been stellar and I was going nuts at the possibilities with mom and her sister reconciling. Hoping the next chapter is better though. For me things are getting a little hard to follow with so many other players involved. Penny and now her mom?

Again, just my opinion, but I prefer things a little simpler. Look forward to what's next.

excellent story, very hot, some of the best on this site, keep the chapters coming and dont make us wait to long.

The continued absence of Colin is understandable since his character/motivations were very weak from the first two chapters. However, it comes off as lazy writing to just leave him out completely with no further explanation. The addition of the new mom willing to join in with her daughter is very out of place since you never laid the foundations for it. It went from hesitant girlfriend to full on slut WITH her mom involved out of no where. It's like you skipped a whole chapter in the story or that the world this story takes place in became more fantastical where things just happen for the sake of crazier sex scenes. Again, like some here, I was a big fan of first two chapters. The third chapter was new but I accepted it because I really like your previous works. This chapter just became bizarre and I found myself just skipping whole sections of your story which is a shame. I know you put a good amount of time into these stories so thank you. Also, if you have problems submitting stories why not just submit to mediafire and post the link on your bio update? I'm sure your fans would appreciate the quicker updates for this popular story and you can just take the links down when the story gets posted for ratings and feedback. This would avoid all the strangeness that were present in your last two updates.

Excellent story. Only issue I had was you mixed up the names of Alice and Penny a few times at the beginning. Lookng forward to ensuing episodes.

Usually series get redundant and boring. Yours continue to excite me with new ideas that I didn't even expect. And that Open up Alice line from the father after Jeremy did it had me lmao. Excellent. You need to hurry and make more.. I need to know what happens next! PLEASE!

Good job on the lay-out of the story. Looking forward for the next chapters.

more please more

I love the way there are 3 different sub-plots going on at the same time in regards to the son with the girlfriend, the mother and the aunt. The blend very well together. I keep checking for the next chapter.

The story would be great if only you got rid of the dad or didnt mentioned him at all. The story makes him gos gift to women even though he is a taker-player. The mother is just a cum bucket. basically a free whore and now thier going to make the aunt one to.

To Anonymous on 11/23. Colin says "Aunt Alice" in part 1, so I don't understand your question

That being said, eagerly awaiting the next installment. So many ways it could go

I'd be more than willing to Proof/Copy Edit your work before you post it. I went to school long enough ago that I have a pretty respectable command of the English language, and read with enough comprehension that I should be able to catch invalid references or what ever

The "Laying Penny" installment of "two Moms', for example, is full of invalid use of "apostrophe s", for example, a particular peeve of mine Usually your work is pretty clean

If you are interested let me know at kputnam@usa.net

excellent storyline. please don t give much gap to put up next story, it ll kill all interest

I am waiting for the next story...your series rocks...

Brilliant story well written I can’t wait for the next chapter

Thanks just ticking 5 stars seem inadequate

It's not very often that an author here can make me see in my mind's eye what is happening in a story, but you have done just that! This has been a great set of stories and I look forward to more.

This is a stunning piece of writing. I am an obscenely well-educated person and ridiculously well-read. And I've never had my mind and imagination taken someplace like this. It is powerfully erotic, but it also veers into a vein of darkness and pathology that hasn't been revealed since the work of Georges Bataille. This is the sort of thing that Lars von Trier tries to do in cinema. But this works better. Wow.

hi there

i loved the whole series. mom and i have had a thing going since i was 12 when she and dad started us. we still make love 3-4-5 times a week, and its still hot as a fire.

i would love to read more stories like these.

i am also from texas

jim

texson75124@yahoo.com

You obviously put a hell of a lot of effort in to your story writing and are damn good at it. For your effort and skill I applaud you. However, for me, your judgment isn't up to the same high standard when it comes to character behaviour and interaction. One of my favourite scenarios is husband, wife and wife's Mother (or boyfriend, girlfriend & her Mother) but in this case, it was a total turn-off. There was no clue, back-story, suggestion etc. that Coleen had 'that' sort of behaviour in her or was especially close to her daughter. It was laughable that she was voicing her displeasure at the fact that her daughter was about to lose her virginity one minute and laying beside her and happy for it to happen the next! That whole contrived situation and the dialogue within it was frankly ridiculous. Strange then that I feel a need to read on but I think this is because (despite my criticisms) I'm on your side, really enjoyed the first two chapters, like most of the characters and am hoping you manage to somehow pull it back round...

My perception, my premonition tells me there is going to be a sixsome in the very near future for this family, including Penny and her mother, Colleen (may even Penny's father). There's more fucking and cock and pussy and tits flalling and bouncing and goin in and coming (and cumming) out, and slurping and sucking than I've think I've ever read about!! It just does not quit.

I cannot imagine taking a woman's virginity with my mother and the virgin's mother coaching and coaxing, and rooting and hollaring while the virgin and I beak and take her cherry!! It is most certinly the most erotic fantasy but I feel it would be tough to accomplish the consummation!

This story series is getting so complicated I have no idea how it will end. One thing is probably for sure, is that every one will be fucking every one Jeremy and his father Harold have an unusual affair with Jeremy's mother (Harold's wife), Alice, using her as a slut-bucket, a cum-bucket, a blowjob-bucket and she loved every minute!! Very, very hot, Hot, HOT stuff; no one deserves it more than Alice (God I love her)!!

This is so un-fucking-believable, this could never happen. BUT, it is a wonderful story. I would like to believe that it could happen and wish I could be a part of it. You are amazing and I plan to read all of your work. This is well beyond a 5 but that is all the higher we can go. Thank you for taking my mind on a wonderful trip. This is what fiction is all about..

Father & Son using mom like that is sooo hot!

In the main, because I'm finding so many bits and pieces—references, snatches of dialogue, basic scenarios—that seem strongly reminiscent of my own works; and, to a lesser degree, also of El's "Conflicted" series. Because it does seem so similar, of course I'm loving the hell out of it. So much of this is right up my alley, primarily where it concerns the wildly sexy Alice, of the otherwordly ass. I just love her to death.

That being said, I do have two issues with this series so far. The first is just personal preference, in that I don't like BDSM at all. Never have, never will. Simply not my cup of tea, and Alice's relationship with her husband smacks too much of Dom and Sub. Now he's even trying to coach Jeremy into controlling her via the same method, which detracts from the 'love' aspect that you're otherwise weaving so beautifully into the story.

Again, though, that's just my own issue. Nothing wrong with what you're doing. It's your story. By all means, always write what pleases you.

The other issue, however, is a bit more jarring, in terms of the character development. Throughout this series we keep hearing Alice and Jeremy go on and on about how much they love the dad, and want to honor him, and won't lie to him, etc. Meanwhile, they continue to lie to him at every turn. There have been so many occasions that were tailor-made for them to come clean with him (either individually or together) about what they've been doing with each other, and still they just keep bald-face lying to him even as they continue with their earnest promises to honor his wishes, to the letter.

In particular, it's really annoying that Alice isn't telling him, considering how often she self-righteously admonishes Jeremy about their obligation to be honest with "the best man she's ever known"; never mind her equally self-righteous attempts to put her foot down with Jeremy regarding the "rules." And, for that matter, Jeremy is no better. Every time the dad extracts another promise from them about maintaining boundaries, they unabashedly talk the talk while never intending to walk the walk.

If I was writing this story, I couldn't do that. I would have had Jeremy come clean with his dad a chapter or two ago, probably when they were having their heart-to-heart while cutting up the meat together. I certainly would have had Alice confess everything to him during their first real discussion about the car ride. He could take it. If either she or Jeremy would simply tell him the truth and do so at the right time, in the right way, he would accept it.

Instead, we're subjected to this constant litany of highfalutin' bullshit, as the main players keep lying through their teeth while proclaiming their absolute love and honest virtue. In an otherwise wonderfully compelling tale, this one glaring anomaly continues to stick out like a Texas-sized sore thumb.

I still give it a 5, though. All in all, it's a great story...truly a cut above.

I loved the stories but the chapters are so hard to find in the correct order I'm going to have to stop reading them, just getting to confusing :(

You write such wonderfully hot stories. Especially the part of father and son working on mom's g-spot. You wrote that from experience, my friend, no doubt about it. It's all true, right down to the part of building trust, and it all getting more spectacular over time (years). I'm experiencing the same with my wife; she just keeps on surprising me over and over again. Anyway, thanks for writing these stories, You're the best (really, you are).

and they have ceased to be a family.

you did say at the outset you were going to take the story line above and beyond those upon which your series is based. as it turns out, way beyond.

I always struggle when a shy, virginal, and socially immature 18 yo almost overnight becomes a brilliant seducer and manipulator, or as you had Penny calling him

"Fuck God. That's what I'm going to call you." She giggled. "I'm going to build a shrine in my closet. Mom can help. I'll pray to my Fuck God, every night."

yup, just a bit beyond.

This one has it all. This series, I mean. You have a gift. Thank you for sharing it.

Just a great series. I love the way you develop your characters and the story lines. You are one of my favorite authors and you truly have a gift!

The "deflowering" made me laugh. It was like a Keystone Cops scene. It is a wonder the kid didn't stay soft. I agree with the comment made about the father; he is a pompous, voyeuristic, controlling horses-ass.

Two much of Penny and Harold. Need to stay in the scope of son with mother and aunt. 3 *'s

Guy is really insecure and a closet? voyeur. Be interesting to see what his character would be like if his son was twice his size cock-wise.

I love the stories of Two moms, two laps thus far, fucking amazing, really enjoy the details and well, overall a darn hot story. very well written, thank you tx tall tales.

We need more chapters on this story

Penny's mom's entry is very hot in story, everyone loves her to get fucked by day and germy. Penny's thoughts of double fuck of her mom's by two dicks other then her father's and also wanting hardol n jearmy both cock for herself makes me come. Alice is my all-time fuck toy fevrate

Penny's mom have to get more pleasure like Alice getting as his mom. After watching daughters virginity loss video by Penny's dad, he have to get blowjob by penny and get fuck by her mom in front of her. Or their threesome, while talking about jermy n alice. Dj

Good story besides the toxic masculinity every few paragraphs.

Moses recreated, parting the Red Sea.

Reading through your backlog, you seem to have a knack for writing sexy situations and then killing the mood with an unlikable abusive asshole. Traci in pool payments was like this, and so is jeremy's dad. Literally every scene with him is 100% cringe as he abuses his wife and acts like a dick to his son, while they sing his praises. It's boner poison and, worse, makes the story unenjoyable.

I'll also repeat what I commented on an earlier chapter, you seem to be a virgin because you have no understanding of female anatomy. A girl's first time doesn't have to hurt and doesn't have to be tight. By the time of menstruation there is no hymen to speak of, it tears and decays over time. If a girl is primed like Penny was she would have no trouble having sex, the vagina swells with blood during arousal just like the penis does and, especially after orgasming as hard as you claim she did (you also don't seem to understand what female orgasms are actually like), it loosens up. It doesn't loosen up via repeated use, that's a folk myth that's been disproven by science.

The whole Hollywood Production feel of Jeremy & Penny's first time left me colder than a necrophiliac and I almost stopped reading and left a 1-star for this one. Thankfully the following scene almost salvaged the story!

am i the only who thinks that someone might want to fuck his dad?

I love this story. The writing is nearly perfect. Hot, graphic and so over the top hilarious at the right times. The squirting description matches exactly my experience also, best "how-to" I've read.

One question: wasn't this supposed to be thought Jeremy's first time too? Some fatherly advice beforehand might have worked well. And a dad neck squeeze with "my son is now a man" would also fit, along with some tie-in to the butchering conversation to practice often.

Very much looking forward to reading more.

(9/19/2021) Uhm well, it got pretty much abusive at the end there, didn't it? So while dazed and confused after several forced orgasms, Alice is then used as the families cum bucket. Wow, was this necessary and hell, was it remotely believable. I couldn't see Harold tenderly carrying his beloved wife back upstairs and putting her gently to bed. What I saw in my mind was this hairy neanderthal throwing Alice over his shoulder picking up his club and knuckle-dragging up the stairs. Only a moron would ask for clarification after watching Marie pouring her heart out in her video. The making Penny a woman scene was more funny than it was erotic. This story went from fun and erotic too unbelievably abusive and incredible and not good incredible. Well, at least Penny wasn’t given to Harold to deflower. I was a bit disappointed in this installment. Sorry, but this is my opinion.

Epic tale just god dammed epic. You have a gift my friend im currently reading all your stories. I’m sorry for not commenting on most of them but it’s your own fault you see I finish chapter 1 and I think bollocks to commenting I want chapter 2 asap lol. So thank you miss/mrs/mr tall tales a really bloody big thank you I can’t stop reading it’s currently 04.56am and I’m looking at yet another sleepless night due to your stories being too good to put down this is the absolute truth I can’t stop reading so thanks again.

Outstanding series. Only in fiction can a reader find people so mature, well-adjusted, self-confidence in the abilities, annd so self-assurred. This series is logically developed. I wish the real world was as understanding and willing to help the situation. The mothers easing the concerns of Penny. Likewise, the mthers coaching /instructing Jeremy. The one person who needs some education is the husband/father. There is a difference between domination/submission and psychological and physical S&M (e.g. forced to squirt so frequently; forced to swallow whether Alice wants to or not; husband simply using her because he can).

Great job, thanks for sharing.

EXCELLENT 🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟.

Congratulations on yet another triumphant chapter, your understanding of erotic psychology is outstanding as is your ability to put that psychology into words. What a pity that this scenario is fictional and not factual the world could be a far happier place.

Couldn’t agree more with mrdata9770. The dad is a class one jerk, a real shit. The only way this story redeems itself is if everyone else wakes up from the haze they’re in and leave the bully behind and make a better life for themselves. I swear if the dad fucks Penny I’m through. This installment was so hard to read. I felt ashamed for Jeremy.

Oooohhhh....the comments about this are so varied...This is my first comment on the chapters so far, due to agreeing with the other reviews...nothing else to say.

Ratings?? All chapters get Five**5**Stars...the writing is excellent (a few small issues, but SSSOOO well written!!)

Dad/Harold...is an animal, reminds me of quite a few men I have met over the years. Willing to abuse "his woman", them SHARE HER!!?? I mean, I am enjoying the stories, but the abusive aspect IS disturbing to me.

Penny should be off-limits to Harold, except for watching...Do Not Care that Alice is fooling around with son...dad would ruin the whole thing with his "neanderthal"( someone else's term, but apt!!) attitude!!

And, to be a total hypocrite, sharing Alice and Marie...looking forward to sisters healing their relationship...see where this goes (I know, total fantasy, but I am enjoying this!!)

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I’m not sure the dad is as bad as some of the commenters have said. He actually is only being filled in retrospectively for the most part.

Yes, he did cheat on his wife that one time, but she has fucked MC a couple of times. And she doesn’t know. I think he’s been pretty fair for the most part.

This keeps getting better and better. It was so tender and erotic. That scene with the 2 mothers, Penny and Jeremy... hot diggity dog. Then later when Mom and Jeremy are recounting the details to Harold, oh boy. Towards the end though he did seem to become a bit of a jerk, all possessive and somewhat abusive. That was a bit disturbing. He says not to worry, that she loves this, but honestly, it still weirds me out to do that to someone without their clear consent at the time. Alice clearly enjoys being submissive for Harold and I'm also starting to think that maybe something happened in the past between her and her father, based on something Marie was saying with Jeremy earlier and the fact she liked to call Harold "daddy" when she was taking his loads while in her post-orgasm bliss.

Mom really wants Jeremy to "win" her from him, though apparently that only means sharing, so maybe the dad really does give her what she needs, so much so that she never actually wants to leave him. She claims she loves him and there does seem to be a great deal of affection between them. I guess part of me is just hoping she'll somehow end up with Jeremy exclusively, though it seems unlikely given how easily he seems to latch onto whatever pussy comes his way. But then there's Penny to consider too. They say they're both in love with each other, and now they've said they want to continue by meeting whenever they can instead of ending the relationship when he goes away to study. I don't see how this can all be reconciled without someone getting hurt or it turning into some messy multi-partner relationship fiasco. Time to read the next chapter I guess.

Suprised at all the hate about certain traits of the characters, but nobody mentioned weirdness of moms supporting Penny on her first time. I was going to point out that in some cultures the moms do prepare & support the daughter on herry cherry being plucked. I would have loved such a scenario to play out for me. Even to fuck her mom after taking her virginity. It was beautiful to me. & yes, I would love to see a video of my duaghter having her cherry plucked. Lucky Joe.

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Honestly the best part about this story were the secrets between the mom and son and their relationship.. this series just gets to the point where the sharing is a bit out of control and loses the turn on from the naughtiness of hiding things and sneaking around.. if everybody’s just sharing everybody then so what.. it’s just meaningless group sex at that point and no connections or interesting relationships.

Not really a fan of the dad in this story either.. seems like a douchebag with a double standard just cause he has an ego. I bet he wouldn’t hesitate for a second to fuck his son’s girlfriend if he could get away with it but when it comes to his women no one can have her.

Don't care what anyone says, this is wild and hitting ALL my buttons. While Harold is slightly annoying, with his big man attitude, it's also kind of fun that he takes ownership of his woman. He's an old school guy. He'll come around to sharing Alice with Jeremy more, I'm sure. He just needs to lower his expectations in a modern world.