All Comments on 'Two of Us'

Very hot! I loved how he forced her legs open and how he was relentless with his thrusting while she was comming. I can't wait to hear more!

Great writing, great tension building, hot sex.

Got my 5 stars and the will to read more of your work.

You could have worked more on the main character, the story teller was kind of flat. The girl was great though.

Nice going.

but proof reading would make it great. Spelling errors and general mistakes let the story down. Other than that I thought it was a great story. keep writing.

Oh, the anxieties of a proto romance.

And a well-told one, too.

HP

it's hardly a romance, it's just another fucking story in the end. they are fucking and haven't even had a first date...she is a slut...

I think people need to look up the word romance in a dictionary. Yes, it's a erotica site, but the genre is romance. Even in sex stories there is a place for romance. Romances are more than fucking.

You need to find another word for vagins. Stop saying it. It's not sexy and was used repetitively. You need to vary your word choice or readers become numb to it.

Again, this isn't romance. I didn't like Miranda either. I especially don't like people who say they are busy. This was like a hookup with guy having feelings for girl and girl just giving a shot after the hookup

Was crappy. Sorry

A very slowly building romance finally takes root.