All Comments on 'Under My Thumb Ch. 02'

Your willingness to display your erudition is welcome when compared with many other authors here who seemingly enjoy displaying the extent of their grammar school educations. However, one must be careful not to ruin the effect through errors. Consider the following quotes from this enjoyable story:

"That is still tentative. I tugged Lisa's over processed hair to annunciate, the word "tentative." [You mean "enunciate."] ##

"Of course you don't know whom Waterhouse is." The pronoun here is "who." ##

"I only want you to love me as you once did. I am drawn to your strength and passion. It compliments your gentle ways." 
 [Try "complements."] ##

"burying my fingers in her dry over processed curls and forced her to her knees." [Try: "overly-processed curls] ##

"I sensed that her orgasm was starting to peek." [At what is her orgasm peeking? -- You mean "peak." ##

"I took Lisa's nieces downstairs to the bookshop and let them select a book each as a gift. Wendy chose; "Make Way For Ducklings" and Debbie, the youngest, selected "The Cat In The Hat." " [Careful writers will use the comparative, not the superlative, when comparing two things.] ##

"and his face flushed with a look of shear ecstasy on his face." My word, did he use scissors? Try "sheer." ##

Why didn't you continue this series?

Jesus, man.

And I thought my prose was wordy.

Has anyone ever told you that you maybe over-think things? I love reading, but this was practically unreadable.

It's not as dry as Atlas Shrugged, but good God, man.