All Comments on 'Unseen Love'

Another great story from Bebop3 and MsCherylTerra. Those on the fence about checking out her library, do it and thank me later.

Great story as usual!

5

I admit, I teared up about Page 8. You two got the human part right. Nice ending, too. I like green chile too, probably my favorite flavor next to chocolate.

It's just a really well told story, one of the best.

R.

Loved it

Your story was engaging and exceptionally well-written. Thank you.

It was awesome working with you again! Thank you :)

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This story really is tremendous. On my first read, I didn't even realize Danny had damaged legs and was in a wheelchair until quite late in the story. I just figured he had low self-esteem due to some sort of heartbreak he'd experienced years ago. The fact that they couldn't see each other for a while due to the whole social distancing thing made the masturbation scene very unique, and very hot. Loved it! Of course, their picnic in the park followed by them having sexual intercourse... just wow. Again, I am still smiling ear to ear. :)

Great story. I agree, I like the Nellie stories.

One of the best I have read. So powerful, so emotional. I truly hope these two love birds stay together to tell their great grandchildren the story of how they met.

An outstanding, heartwarming story with just the right amount of eroticism thrown in.

What an amazingly well-crafted tale! Thank you for sharing it with us.

A wonderful heart warming story! Thank you for sharing!

The reader knows Danny is disfigured from very early in this over-long tale, but not how Belle is going to find out. It's a little far-fetched that a beautiful young woman is going to saddle herself with someone as incapacitated as Danny, but that's what a fantasyland site it for. 4*

Loved this timely story. Many thanks for your efforts in making my day.

Great story. Now that I've finished it I can actually do what I should have done this morning.

Just what we needed to make our day a little brighter during these uncertain times caused by that nasty little piece of viral evil.

Thank you both for this wonderful tale!

I have never commented before even for some authors i really like but this story given the circumstance we are all living with meant a lot thank you for a masterful effort OEP

OK. We know where we were going from the start (This IS Literotica Romance) But OMG what a journey!

Thank you so much!

Top marks all around. A beautiful story, beautifully paced and told, and completely plausible. If I could give more than five stars, they'd be yours.

Thank you for this. A brilliantly bright spot in at an all-too-gloomy time.

Lovely tory! I usually get confused by Day X headings, but it didn't seem to matter in this one. You two are amazing collaborators.

But together? Fuhgeddaboudit! Phenomenal story.

This was outstanding. Thank you for your work.

Really heartwarming romance, thank you both.

What a beautiful heart warming story. Excellent work. Thank you.

I favorited this story.

I don't know how you know and understand what it is to be disabled, but you nailed it. The feelings of being "different", of not being "whole," of being unlovable and a "freak." Part of the story was formulaic, yet it wasn't. Some of it was predictable, but you were unpredictable in your predictability. I have no idea if that makes any sense, but thank you for a heart-wrenching (in a good way) two hours that I know I will repeat over and over.

I loved the different tack this story took. It is really unlike any other. Heart warming. *****

This was truly worth reading; thank you for writing and sharing it with us.

I have no suggestions. Well, I might suggest a sequel for meeting the in-laws (his, not hers) and reconciling with his dad.

Truly outstanding! Thank you.

I understand what I think you're trying to accomplish but as a disabled person you want being sympathetic. You are patronizing

The white knighting by the fabled brother is so fking typical. I know all you typical folks love this story but it's condescending.

<b>"Written by someone who has no idea what it's like to be disabled"</b>

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You're operating under some serious misassumptions.

As someone who has spent their whole life in a wheelchair, I can only assume that either you are just trolling in order to get some attention for a change, are assuming offence on behalf of someone else to get some attention for a change, or are actually disabled yourself and out to prove my assertion that being disabled doesn't prevent someone from also being a complete arsehole.

You make statements that make no sense, are just generally malcontent and yet really insulting at the same time. I helped edit this story, and there is nothing at all in this story that is outside the experience of a disabled person who actually has a life.

This is a very good story, written well and with empathy, but without being patronising in any way.

And if you think being in a wheelchair automatically excludes you from pulling and marrying beautiful women, I have news for you: it's not the wheelchair - it's you!

I thoroughly enjoyed your story. I am a hopeless romantic and found this perfect. Thank you for writing!

This story was fantastic!

I may not be disabled, but I can imagine the fear that could go through someone's mind that is, not because of the disability, but in the case the deformity. Those negative comments about being condescending to the disabled I think missed the whole problem that Danny had in the story. I see not the disability but the deformity that brought on his fears, pain, and anger that the deformity caused, but just as much the abandonment from his father, and the fear of being abandoned again. The comment about the brothers interference being predictable, sure, but it expanded the story to include a loving brother that was willing to risk being hated by Danny to show him how he was wrong in his fears, and to show him that he needed to take risks to find happiness again.

My favorite story so far, it also showed fears and isolation caused by the virus, and hope for a brighter future through kindness. It had very little erotica, but it didn't need it to be a great story.

Thanks

Really enjoyed this story. I've read both your collaborations and hope you'll write more!

""...and I love them, Danny, I swear to God I love them, but if I have to break up one more fight because Felicia insults John's imaginary friend and John retaliates by filling her tea party set with toilet water again, I'm going to lose it. I'm just going to fucking lose it."

I hope you guys don't mind - I sent that passage, which had me laughing out loud so hard it brought tears to my eyes, out to a couple of people.

Thank you. This story is wonderful.

Stories that make you think, that give you a fresh and very different perspective, that torment you, making you think, "come on, come on, get it done," and, for a romantic, finally end just as you hoped it would, are very fulfilling. Your collaborations are very special. Thanks for writing.

The best story I read in an age. It got me engaged right from start and maintained the interest right to the end. Bravo.

A great story about isolation and disability when a pandemic has us all feeling those aspects in our altered lives! Circumstances can have most of us feeling damaged and "gray"! Wonderful to read how someone in an even more difficult situation has created a a complex network of work, friends, & family to assemble a worthwhile life--and then unexpectedly a new friendly neighbor adds a lot more sunshine to every day!

Just what I bloody needed. Dude you guys rock, wow. I am a sucker for a well written romance and this one is 💯.

Thanks

K.

Tears, and a smile

Thank you both..

A warm and satisfyingly complete little story.

Great story!! A technical issue, you could given a fuller explanation of how Danny had his contacts in the food business.

You two make a great story-telling team. Great story, great characters, good conflict, both internal and between your characters with the best resolution. Take out some of the swearing and you could release it mainstream.

I honestly expected something else.

I read a "collaborative Story" between you and MsCherylTerra and think/expected a Him/Her Storytelling type of Style.

It is meant as a compliment when I say, I couldn't make out who wrote what part.

I would've liked to read about, the family meeting, how it went Mark and Danny with Bella, maybe some reconciliation with the dad (if he's alive, didn't saw any mention of death).

anyways very nice story. looking forward to more work of you in collab with her?

This story was incredible! It was real, and natural. The story sucked me right on into the character’s life.

The dialogue felt uncontrived and your descriptions were woven so well within the story that they were a part of the canvas instead of ancillary as so many are. Just so you know, I actually laughed at loud at some of the lines written for the kids.

Also, as a member of the disability community, thank you. I’m fortunate in that mine are invisible, but the devastation when you have chemistry and start dating someone, opening up to them, only to have them let you know it’s just too much to take on is heart wrenching. Even though it’s fiction, it’s uplifting and hopeful to hear stories of acceptance.

One phrase was written so simply it made me laugh out loud:

"That girl had ears like... I don't know. Something with big ears."

Just one example of the easy-to-read prose throughout this great story.

Definite 5*, and congrats on the win!

A very compelling and moving story.

Like the story of Pyramis and Thisbe. but with a happy ending. Lovely story, thank you both!

Collaboration is a great gift for readers.

Not so much for other authors seeking readers, but...wow! You two are unübertrefflich!

I don’t know how that didn’t win the contest, so now I will have to read JoeDreamer’s tale as well.

Can ngratulations on putting together a wonderful story.

Reading this story has been the best thing to have happened to me due to the COVID-19 lockdown. So far.A job, very, very, well down. Thank you.

A rare vote indeed. His usual score is 3*. Consider yourself lucky. But note, he has never submitted anything for us to read.

Those who can’t do, criticize.

Mann, this was something else. Beats the majority of the movie scripts.would be a lovely low budget indy flick.

Best collaboration between 2 writers I saw for ages

PS. WE JUST NEED MORE!

Very nicely done and so very well written. I an really enjoying your work.

Utterly charming, and poignant, and funny, and so well written - I loved it! You have a gift for revealing emotional truth, something I strive for in my own stories, and I know I will be reading more of your catalog. Five stars, and a big hug to you both!

What a lovely, well written story with plenty of great twists and turns, and tons of smart observations about life under lockdown combined with romantic buildup. Thanks for the tip to follow MsCherylTerra!

An excellent story. this story was so well written it would have survived with out any eroticism. The romance and humanity would have carried it. the erotic elements were icing on the cake.

This is the best story on this site. It isnt the sexiest or the most racy or anything along those lines, but it is so well written and so emotional. Well played. Sincerely.

This is one of the best reads I’ve had in a while. First I’ve read from you and now I’m going to check some other stories. Being from Ajax I knew most of the landmarks you mentioned too!!! Keep up the great work!!!!

Incredible story! Well written...touching...a favorite outstanding read! Thanks for this one!!!

Thank you both for this wonderful story. It's difficult to express how deeply it moved me as a romantic medically impaired kindly introvert living a very Danny-ish life thru the trials and tribulations of covid and quarantine.

Sincerely - it gutted me, thrilled me, made me laugh, and I appreciate that so much.

That went places I wasn't expecting when I sat down to read. What a great story that puts the Lit into literotica!

What a wonderful, heart warming story. It took me almost a week to find it again on Literotica to re-read. I loved the fact that Danny and Bella really got to know each other's heart and soul before seeing pictures of each other or meeting in person. Setting it in a pandemic was a nice touch to bring it to today's reality.

I've been an obese person my entire life (weighed 143 lbs in the third grade) and have been judged my entire life before people get to know who I am at my heart and soul. My first two boyfriends and I met over a CB radio (I'm ancient) and we got to know each other very well before meeting in person. CB radio air time was free, while talking on the phone would have been long distance calling. Many a night I'd spend my time with them versus watching TV or doing something else instead. We met in real life maybe 18 months after first talking to them. It allowed us the opportunity to get to know each other very well before taking the 'meeting in person' step.

Thank you for such a great story and wonderful collaboration.

What a wonderful love story.

She walked into his apartment and immediately kicked off her shoes? Not bad for an American. She caught on quickly...

It was truly a beautiful romance, the kind where the characters are real and fleshed out with backstories. I’ve said it before: good erotic writing is just good writing.

I was deeply touched as someone who feels disfigured, disgusting, unlovable, and doomed to be alone forever. I ugly cried so much. :( I kept having to set it aside for a couple of days at a time, but I kept coming back to it. It was so beautiful and so compelling--and even more enjoyable on subsequent reads. Thank you.

Danny is the runaway winner of the arsehole of the century award.

A true Canadian would have spelled color as colour :)

Two of my favorite authors in one story.... I'm beyond words so you both will have to settle for "Thank You".

This was wonderful ... thanks.

it was so good, I wouldn't even want to tease you about Chili Verde or Chile Verde ... and bore you with a treatise on the regional arguments over an E and an I.

The growing sense of the characters and what created the steps along the story were very well developed. I really appreciated the situation and its back story.

Really needed some kind of wholesome read like this, i cried at some points. Thanks

This story was so good! I loved every second of it and wanted to read more...So good!

Wonderful story! One of the best!

Great job constructing story. Well done. Your talents shine through. A story for our current a time. Thanks.

It absolutely resonated with me.

a lovely romance. thank you for writing & sharing.

A very lovely love story. I guessed the ending pretty early, but that didn't stop me from enjoying the excellent writing and build up to the satisfying conclusion. I wanted to kick him a few times for being so stupid and self-centered, but we humans are like that sometimes. Thank you to all you caregivers during this difficult time.

Well, I went through every one your stories and this was the last one I hadn't read. Another excellent story by Bebop3. I honestly do believe I rated everyone of the stories a 5 star rating and I'm a follower so I won't miss any of your stories. Thank you Bebop, for being one hell of an Author and entertaining us all with your Brilliant stories!

... for things like this story. A word that means the absolute best, and this story certainly deserves it.

OUTSTANDING!

Very well written, lead-ups to things unexpected, along with the trials and tribulations of the Lockdowns that we all experienced.

5 Stars (wish I could give more) and an Instant Favorite.

My thanks.

Wow I got hooked on mscherryterra’s stories. Read everything on this site. Now she got me hooked on your stories. If this first one is a preview of what I’ll be reading next. I’m in for many a long outstanding read. Excellent.

Mark was a loser, a pathetic asshole...his email to Bella was a big NO!!

Danny's father was a drunk bastard and no hard feelings for Danny not speaking to that bastard!!

Danny was better off without the loser Mark and drunk father

Gathered something was wrong with his legs when he spoke of High Ground and she mentioned walking and ge said she can do it!!

Good story but ended too soon after the drama of the earlier pages!!

Mark is still a loser that's why he couldn't even run the farm!

One of my all time favorites. I would ignore the anonymous crank a couple down. Mark was essential and he loved Danny enough to risk their relationship to tell Bella what Danny was afraid to tell her even though he needed to. Masterful exploration of the messiness of being human.

LMJ

this is a wonderful story. i have walked beside a disabled friend and watched him go through all these feelings. took me back to an emotional time in my life. thank you

This was wonderful. Thank you both for writing this story

How did I miss this beautiful love story when it was published??? Thank you for sharing! 5 stars!

Outstanding story from two very talented people, MsCherylTerra and Bebop3.

Thanks!