All Comments on 'Until Tomorrow'

wonderful

Really am. Good stories remain good, good punctuation helps but isn't overly bothersome to me. Simple spelling mistakes and incorrect words annoy the hell out of me however. Wrong words or spelling mistakes mess with the flow of the story you are writing. It all grinds to a halt when the reader has to try and work out what you mean and what is going on in the story. I see it so many times on here the one word that SO many people screw up. Shutter is a damn camera speed people and unless your taking photo's at the time it has nothing to do with sex or orgasms. The word is SHUDDER. The three of you, you and the two helpers you mention at the start didn't pick it up? Really? How is this one word so misused by so many people? Almost as much as there, their, they're. Other than that, not bad.

Even though it was far from perfect.

I'm guessing English is not the author's native language.

Lesbian strap on sex makes her an adultery also so the one sided plot and resolution does not treat her or him fairly.

Hope your next one is even longer!

To the author ..... Good story! Keep writing!.

Anonymous; I am a person whom struggle with spelling, I use spell check and other tools to catch my mistakes. No tool can catch a word that is spelled right, but is the wrong word, so please let's be fair and nice with our comments! ( And if you want to be so strong with your words STAND BESIDE them and put your name)

Great story and very well though out. This story had a great flow and was very easy to read. I thought that it had the right amount of sex mixed with the plot. Love how you left some characters to possible involvement down the road. The more stories you write the less mistakes will show up in them. Keep up the good work. Can't wait for your next story.

Very enjoyable story! Good work:)

I enjoyed the story on many levels. I feel you balanced very passionate and intimate sexual exploits with passionate love making sessions. Your character development demonstrated the complaexity of love and attraction to another individual regardless of gender. The search for soul mate is I believe the scaerest journey of all. Beyond the passion the constant need to validate their love was refreshing. I had a daughter who after following the precived guide lines and strict expectations of our family married and was for some time miserable. While visiting one day she and I walked the back woods of our property. I finally had the courage to ask her and what was the cause of her sadness. A lie she said, knowing I have zero tolerance for such a thing. When I asked for the truth she came out. My answer to her was this "On beHalf of your mother and I Thank you." Now let's get on with your life. Five years later and she is free and sharing her life with her soul mate. Two amazing young women. Keep writing.

just plain wowwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

carrie

I so enjoyed your story. Great character development. I read it all in one sitting. You have a taken the story so far beyond the usual 3 page quick meet and passionate sex with eternal loving relationships. Thank you for your story.

DRock

Another great story,

Thank you!

L

I read this story in one sitting! Admittedly I came several times along side your characters! But your story was about more than the sexual encounters of these two women! The story captured me and I honestly had tears in my eyes several times throughout! I didn't see the ending coming at all... Wow! Amazing work and writing!

You have the "royal jelly" in writing! Superb story construction & suspense! But your grammatical & Spelling errors spoil the flow & mar your accomplishments. Get help!

Trematic is spelled "traumatic", from the word: trauma. Many others. Suggest you fix.

Your story is amazing! I could not read it in one reading. I got too involved and had family members asking if I was OK. Yes, there are spelling and grammatical issues, but WOW! You captured the emotions! I loved your differentiation between the physical and true emotional love. That is where I am now, so your words meant alot to me. I must say I did not like the ending. Let John go on his merry way.

I will reread when I know I am alone for a while!

Just to let you know, I wrote this comment before I registered

It was a great story but ,the ending was kind of predictable . I almost looked ahead to see if my hunch was right about it, it was .The one thing I thought wasn't necessary was over describing every woman she met, with measurement details. Describing them as mature ,young ,attractive ,ect would be better. Being that she a one woman woman ,her describing their features made it sound like she was looking for more and unnecessary as most were professional meetings other than the waitress, where describing her was important to that part of the story. I really liked the story. You could feel their compassion for each other in their\your words. I'm giving you five stars

I, like some others, was a bit distracted by the spelling errors or missed words. I chalked that to blindly trusting in a spellcheck app...errors were consistent. As far as grammar errors, I can cast no stone because I speak and write only two languages English and Bad-English. At least I could tell who was doing what; some writers that I have read here, so over use personal pronouns that the story gets muddled and characters get lost and it all becomes frustrating and meaningless. Besides Sexy_Lisa did warn readers, "shit happens" lol

Regardless I was drawn into the story by Kayla's relationship progressions.

1- Mistaking lust and passion for love with John when they dated, then married. However, the relationship fizzled to one of indifference, pain and loneliness for Kayla.

2- Kayla self medicated with lust fueled sexual escapades with Tatiana. This seemed to have left her sex-drunk, but starved for intimacy and fulfillment. However, good, bad or otherwise, this relationship opened her sexual fluidity and broaden her relationship purview

3-The building attraction mutually shared between Kayla and Shannon led them to want to learn more about one another, and it also led to a growing affection and appreciation of one another. The intense sexual interaction seem to have sealed the relationship (in a very short time) for them. It all gave each the soulful, intimate, caring, and physically satisfying relationship they both craved.

My only real critique, because it seemed out of place or there was no 'set-up' for the reason given for why John attempted to kill Shannon. Through out the twelve pages there was no indication that he was even aware that Kayla was in an extra marital relationship. Matter of fact the only ones who knew the nature of Kayla's and Shannon's relationship were Shannon's family and the waitress Ellen. If the reason given, was that John became murderous towards Kayla because she had the nerve to divorce him, and threaten his life style ...that would have flowed...But Shannon was an unknown.

Thank you for sharing Sexy Lisa. I enjoyed the story in-spite of the illogical "reason" given for John's last action.

I read it all ,making me realize that, although I am married, I might be a Lesbian deep inside because I desperately want to be like the woman in this lovely story.

If the pursuit of materialistic wants overwhelms a relationship - meaning that work over takes life to supersize life - then downsize and nurture the relationship.

The theme of absolving the cheater of any wrong doing is tiring regardless of sexual orientation.

Everything wrong with this story was, in my opinion, mere details.

The story was sound throughout. The heart of the story played "true" to me, in many different ways.

But I think Kayla was a bit disingenuous starting her own affairs before finding out about his ... and then acting all indignant about his. She, otherwise, struck me as someone self-aware enough to recognize her own actions for what they were. Felt just a tiny bit too male-bashing for its own sake.

I didn't understand killing John other that her getting "everything". But we never found out what "everything" even was.

And would someone so afraid of losing his job with the feds that he blindly signed the papers ... and then turn murderer (regardless of how he might or might know about Shannon). Why bother to settle; why not just kill them both and be done with it?

I would have preferred seeing them learning more about each other outside of sex. Sex-driven relationships always go through such rocky startups they rarely survive in the long run. My significant other and I were best friends for 5 years before being anything more. And that's what has gotten us through every single hardship ... for 43 years.

Nice read, di not expect the ending and how did John know about Shannon?

DOWNSIZE! - DOWNSIZE! - DOWNSIZE!

LOVE > MONEY or MONEY > LOVE

MAKE A CHOICE AND LIVE WITH IT - STOP BLAMING THE PARTNER

The only ones shedding tears are the manhaters - everyone else knows whats up.

Really needs proofreading and editing. And how did John find out about Shannon?

Ya know, leaving comments for someone who hasn't been on this site since 2017 seems a little absurd and useless (then why am I doing it?? I never said I was bright)

Anonymous from 6 days ago... though you may never read this, I do check on comments that are said to me. Although problems that appear in this story can't be fixed, (oh how I wish I could) I'd do it in a heart beat. Thanks for leaving your thoughts for me to read,

Good story but poor editing, proof reading and grammar took the edge off. Quite a few loose ends which were never addressed which was a pity.

what a pity about the story not being finished. so many loose ends. what happened to Wanda Panda, the waitress who gave them her contact details Ellen. Perhaps if a second or third chapter or even a spin off from their point of view.

Shame about the spelling, grammar and editing. Again this could be corrected in future episodes.

It is a shame a lot of American authors have trouble with written English.

A really good love story!

A few loose ends, but they could be fixed in another chapter or two, please?

As for spelling and grammar, no one is perfect!

Thank you very much for sharing this tale!