by JDecker
This was a good concept, but the writing was awful. Get an editor please. I'll split the difference with the rating. A for effort, F for product. So you get a three.
For once, I kind of agree. This kind of was just some stuff I had left over from other stories or wrote quickly because I felt like it, but which wasn't really intended to be a story of any kind. I though some people might still want to see these scenes, so I just wrote some crap there to make some kind of a plot around it. If you want to see more serious attempts by me, try "Heart's Guardian", "The Dream Gift", etc.
I am a bit confused. Did J's dad know about this, or was the the only one oblivious to the family fun?
Who were the twins?