by magmaman
Very well constructed tale, good build up and quite believable. I would love to think that things progress in a sexy way, and hope that there will be another chapter.
I wish people would be a bit more realistic. Granted you don't endow your characters with 10" dicks and double dd tits who work out every day of the week but writers are also hung up on the virginal wife. Just guessing, 75% of freshman girls in high school suck cock, and outside of the ultra religious, I doubt more than 25% graduate as virgins. This was not the case fifty years ago. So when we go on about virgins entering marriage, or only fucking one guy, it's really rare, so rare as to require a suspension of belief. Young people today have had a lot of sexual experience, and it's better if the stories reflect this reality IMO. This overall story wouldn't have been affected at all if you had them have normal sexual experiences. All the rest would have been about the same.
Chilley
Don't mind the negative comments. You know how a female thinks so you're bound to get us higher as a lover than those rednecks!
On page one There was a line, "Darin didn't know what to expect, not really."
Mistype?
Should that have been "Dale"?
A little tame, but I realize that's what it was supposed to be. Good story. Well written.