by RipperFish
I'm thoroughly enjoying your story and look forward to reading many more chapters.
Thank you for sharing.
I don't know what you plan for this tale, but make it a long one. Very
enjoyable read.
Love this story plz make it a long one or have a sequel once it's done greatness
Keep up the good work. You have a gift for crafting stories. Thanks for your hard work.
to read this well written mix of sci-fi and erotica,
two of my favorites genres.
Well done. Each installment makes me want more. This isn't just good for a free site. This is good period. You should wrote professionally if you do not already.
Keep em coming. One of the best stories Ive read here. As someone already said, great story that combines my favorite, SciFi and Erotica.
Refreshing, well written...
This story rocks...
Please keep up the good writing
Damn it I already have four stories going and now my brain is bubbling with another idea. I wanted to knock out a few short stories but if I let the idea bubble and take form it is going to be another series. Grrr...
Oh, if you don't finish this I will curse you with the fleas of a thousand camels and short arms... (grin) Oh just tossing a bone to myself take a look at my Sholan Alliance fan fic, you might like it.
You did a great job with characterization and doling out the world building. Your writing it top quality. I wish the chapters were a bit longer.
Nicely done sir. It's 1 am here and tomorrow I have work but now I can't put it down.
Love rereading these great stories
thanks for posting!
Nicely done, the sex just hot enough and the characters even better.
Jason
writing, you are close to image writing. Which i enjoy the most. You did not try to solve the worlds problems in 20 seconds, hope it last. thanks
Wonderful story!!! I really like this. Well written and so far no jarring spelling or grammatical errors to have to deal with, nearly a miracle in and of itself, and the plot is to die for! If the rest of the story is as great then it will definitely be high on my must reread often list.
and there was little wrong with the first, other than the abrupt feel of it's brevity.
You've found a good voice, and have a good feel for the intricate emotions involved in different cultures, let alone the hypothetical involved if two intelligent species were to meet, and be thrust into the marooned circumstance you've created.
Well done, all the way around, and not even ONE of those pesky homophones! Thanks for sharing your imagination, creativity and talent and, especially, thanks for all the work it takes to put together a well-polished submission, as you have.
GeoD
But please learn about differences between lie and lay. It can be frustrating when everybody lays eggs.
Shame on MaxD01 for his little plug, then chiding you about finishing this story, since he still has not finished his Sholan Alliance story after 3 years, but you have finished this, and a fine ending it was, too!
Now I'm waiting with bated breath for you to finish (or at least post Ch. 11) the sequel to this: Storm World. Both stories have been very enjoyable, I LOVE the Jzav'Etch! Keep ém coming!
Really you have him an average penis he's mating with super powerful feline aliens and you have him a stumpy dick that's just so wrong 😱😱😱😱
I'm enjoying the story and find the situation rather funny. I guess if you're going to get marooned on a distant planet, might as well be with three females that enjoy sex.
That was incredibly hot, and incredibly sweet at the same time. It's a rare thing to be grinning while reading erotica, but I certainly was. I can't wait to read more!
Woah. I stumbled upon this story by coincidence. What a great story!
It got it all: action, aliens, spaceships and great sex told in a “not sordid” manner.
The sergeant is a fine specimen of our species and soldierly conduct. He’s not just raping her, and he’s honering the dead enemy.
I like to think, I would be as civilized as he is - the future may not be without hope for our species after all!
I really like it. Thanx
I would get rid of the word "gun". Not used in the military. Great story or I wouldn't bother to comment.