by Nils Huim
Confused for sure, story was all over the place.
Desceiptions were shite and it was rushed
2* is all i give it
A little slow. If you do another chapter it might help
A slightly unusual writing style for this site that is both unique and most pleasing to the eye and mind. Tip O hat Nils Huim.
Keeping the mystery of their relationship worked for me. I would almost class this under humor.
Keep writing. You have a nice feel for holding attention. Don't listen to those who just want a quick jump into the sex.
I'd give six stars if I could.