All Comments on 'Warren Butterfield Pt. 04'

Great Story!

Boyd

Great ending. I was really worried you werent going to give this guy a set. I guess that a good author has to keep the lower class guessing. Thanks for taking the time to write for us. Love your work.

wrong, each and everytime he said anything about anything her words were I dont want to talk about it. Very difficult to discuss concerns and such when one person walks away from the other. Two real problems in the story are not addressed. When the mom was using the car to go see her man, where was the wife and how did she get the car back to go home? This was not addressed and she never offered any excuse for her absences or why she was letting the mom use the car. The other glaring thing was she had to have known her partner in tennis was trying to get into her pants. When her husband indicated he did not want her to play tennis with him and to stay home she definantly when to play and virtually told him to mind his own business. Yep, seems she understood her husband was having trouble and was very open to discuss the problems with him. Personally I would have left her there by herself forever. She wasnt neutral, she took her mothers part in everry action. She offered nothing in defense of her husband, and let her penniless mother direct and run the house. One can say actions speak louder than words, she did not love her husband! It was your story and you ended it your way, but you left to many open questions for a satisfactory ending. Watch for the small parts, its the details that get you every time. Let the mom in law getting awhole of his investment records and such, goodness the wife was really upset by mom getting into personal items wasnt she?

Sappy and happy ending. The problem as mentioned by others and myself in previous comments was the "reality" factor. Its painfully obvious why he did things the way he did and the wife's crying about her hurt was plain ol stupid. If she can't see what she did wrong, they'd have no hope unless he just kept letter her run over him. She felt alone when left and lost her husband and mother on the same day? Aww.. poor baby. Thats what it took for her to finally see what the heck was going on. He'd been alone without a wife for over a year, just living with a woman and a she-devil battleaxe mother in law.

Overall, still enjoyed the story KK.

he told Megan many times there were problems, but she would not listen.

Or another poor bugger striving for the ultimate in Political Correctness?<BR>

Another one where the man takes 90% of the blame.<BR>

What is with these male writers - do they all hate men?<BR>

There are a lot of maybes for the husband, but bloody hell, the wife was outright stupid! Another brain dead wife who has hubby take way more than his share of the blame.<BR>

Will someone please write a story where:<BR>

(a) The woman is NOT brain dead, and<BR>

(b) The husband takes no more than his fair share of the blame???<BR>

What seems to be so difficult about that?<BR>

I'm truly sorry I took the time to read the story after such a shit ending. Great story until the last few paragraphs!

Great story. The dialogue was excellent and I really liked the humor in part 4. Thanks for a terrific read.

That part about being shot was wonderful. Laughed out loud. Knew there would be a happy ending. Had to be cause I liked the character so much. +++++ Agree with Megan as to how Butter was wrong in his treatment of her. But we aren't perfect are we. K.K. did manage to convey to me that Megan was seen through her husbands eyes - as I noted in my previous comment. +++++ Only fault I find with the story is we never find out what happened to Butter's old boss. After reading of years of misery, I want to read a chapter devoted to his bosses finding out what a dink he is.

Very well done K.K. - thanks.

Hello KK; Once I started reading it I couldn't wait until the next installment. I really loved it and am a great fan of your writing. Ralph Reardon

Good plot, well written and characterized. An Anon below

pointed out most of the detail problems, though erred because

he forgot that Trish and Brandon were living in the big house and that therefore when Trish came home the Lexus followed along! Seriously though I never understood why he

did not try to document that his wife was not at home when she said she would be. The first time he came home at 10 to

wait for her return he would have discovered that she had not lied and the car was with Trish. It was useful to discover Trish's lover but it would have been so simple to trap a cheating Megan, if she were.

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Basically it did not sound to us as if Megan would have been willing to discuss Treadwell or Trish with him. He was certainly without guilt from his side. Megan should have been upset about the violations of privacy and certainly should have resumed the baby discussion.

But once again I thank KK for a fine read.

This is a pretty bad ending. The wife defense is fucking lame and not even remotely true. Key Text in Bold

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<I> "Warren, I am sorry for what happened," Megan started, "but keep in mind that what my mother did, <b>she did to both of us, not just you. </b> You have to know that if I had any clue as to what Trish was up to I would have thrown her out of the house myself. <b> What she did hurt me terribly but what you did was even worse." </b>

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<b>"I just thought that you and Trish were having problems getting along. </b> I felt like I was stuck in the middle, trying to keep the peace. I would never in my life have thought that my mother would want to hurt me. I believed that she loved me and just wanted what was best for me. I just thought that her problems with you were trust issues caused by my father walking out on her. I'm sorry. I am truly sorry. By believing her lies I let both of us down but you have to know that I never stopped loving you. <b>I never did anything that I thought would hurt you or our marriage.</b> I guess I was wrong about a few things but so were you. You actually believed that I was having an affair. The thought of cheating on you never entered my mind but you didn't trust me enough to talk to me about your suspicions. <b>I was always trying to find a way to make things better for you." </b> </I>

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so Letting Trish shit all over her husband for Months and months was Better for HIM?

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so ignoring Warren' s compliants and warning about Carl was better for HIM?

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so ignoring him for months has Good for him?

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In fact all of these action had NOTHING to do with TRISH Tricking the bitch wife. TrIsh did NOT trick her into dating carl. Trish did NOT trick her into forcing warren into buying Buying a new House or Her a New car.

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Time after time in EVERY case the bitch wife sided with Trish. <b>In EVERY case.</b>

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Trish scheme was NOT about getting her a new Lexus or a new house or stealing money from warren to buy her bastard son a exspensive Guitar. The wife did all that and if Warren's Ball sack was on fire she would not notice.

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Given how vile and patheticlly weak Warren is... then again this IS a KK story which always features super weak faggot like men.... it is no suprise that warren bought the wife's bullshit hook line and sinker

Thanks for another good read. Keep it up. Liked the way they were posted in close sequence. PAPATOAD

The only reason I can think of for the mother-in-law's actions is that she is out of her mind. Why would she devote her life to ruining her daughter? Why would she go to live with people she despised? What did she get out of it?

Why did the wife and the husband have to be dumbed-down in order to fall for this whole scenario, both at home and at work?

There was just too much going on that didn't make sense. It detracted from the story.

Another fine tale from a master. I like these where the wife is just confused, not cheating. Keep up the good work and I look forward to your next one.

This was a wonderful story! And even though I didn't start reading until Pt.3 was posted, I do appreciate that you kept the sequel chapters coming on a frequent basis.

There are....(there's that "but")....a few complaints. Portions of Pt.3 made it seem that you were going to have Warren turn out to be a wimp; that irritated me. And chapter32 made me add "shoot the psychiatrists" to my list of things one should do when taking over a country.

The ending, Pt.4, had some very interesting twists and turns, making for a very unique and thoroughly entertaining story. (And you salvaged the "wimp" aspect very nicely, thank you.) All in all, a very good piece of writing.

-- KK in Texas

As a long time fan of K.K.'s,I belive I have to say that this story was not up to his normal great standard.I found it hard to read in that I found myself haveing to go back and reread chapters over when I felt I was missing something.I also didn't get the feeling that there was any great amount of affection between Butter and Magen.All said,I did like the story a lot.

Initially it looked like a normal story.when i finisihed the second i felt so sic that i decided not to read any more. thank god i kept reading and felt good in the end.

Meeting his f in law was the turning point for the entire story.It jus happenned . Butter never really tried to salvage the situation on his own.It just happenned that way and thats the way things happen in life too

good story keep it up

Great story, have been missing your works

This story about a marriage ranks among the best written short stories anywhere. It contains all of the elements, and in the right proportions. The finale is superb and could rank the story as a Romance as well as a truly Loving Wife story.

Though K.K. really did not develop the workplace drama to any great extends, he pretty much covered all aspects of the lives of key people in the story.

Questions unanswered seem few: 1) One would be is Trish really the biological mother of Megan? Eye color that K.K. gave us suggest that she probably was not. 2) Warren never had a father in his life. His biological father is not discussed and Warren seems to have shown little interest in him, although determining who the father was could become important to him and any children he and Megan had, this through DNA profiling and analysis. Medicine is now investigating many aspects of the generic relationships of diseases such as the cancers; and there is now a new field of science, Epigenetic, that explores the manner in which our life experiences effect our genes. Great story K.K. and keep writing (and doing this more frequency) RAG

It is interesting that some people don't ever want to see anyone get back together. It is more interesting how others try to tell the Author what the real problem the characters are having. "Typical KK story", hey if you don't like his stories, don't read them! I happen to enjoy the "typical KK story".

smitty

A well-constructed story written by a master of the craft. Thanks KK.

marvelous conclusion!!! Almost restores ones belief in

matrimony

<p>This one did kinda bug me somewhat</p>

<p>One thing Harry and I have to agree on is that you left the story unresolved and the husband sharing the blame for the mother-inlaw's character squeezing him out</p>

<p>And, sorry, but unlike the anon writer below I just cant really enjoy a story just because at the end the couple are back together. I just can't. To me it's like watching a western where the hero gets saved from certain death by a passing UFO. You really didn't see the UFO coming, it really wasn't hinted at in the story, but there it is. Some folks will probably be happy the UFO saved the hero from certain doom, but a lot will be wanting to know what you were thinking when the UFO landed out of the blue</p>

<p>That's kinda what I felt here</p>

<p>In the story the husband hinted that something wasn't right with his wife's Father and mother, but that wasn't explored. But I kinda thought what happened may be what the probelm was. But as you had the mother in-law move in with them, have her get rid of their furniture, having her get them to buy a larger house (after cashing in the money he was saving for their retirement), join a country club, pay another man to seduce the wife, etc, the story really never did resolve the wife rebuiding the lost trust her husband Warren felt, enough that he moved out and left everyone to their own devices after all they put him through, by the end of the story. The story had his wife help work for months at destroying their marriage, but never really had her work at putting it back together, other than get him to agree to sharing half the blame.</p>

<p>The story showed how no matter how the husband responded his wife took her mother's side, no matter what she did. Not even when she was going through their finances to see monies they had laying around, did the wife question what her mother did. When the husband said he was uneasy with all the time the wife was spending with the tennis pro, the wife spent <i>more</i> time with him. Nothing the husband said did the wife listen too. Then after he left, the story had him "sharing the blame" with the wife or else reconcillation wouldn't work.</p>

<p>I mean when the wife says something like: <i>"You found out what Trish was up to and never said a word to me until you decided to drop your little bomb on us"</i> that kills a story for me. You had the husband and wife "arguing" about what was going on with the mother in-law, and when you had this exchange:</p>

<p><i>"Stop it. You're acting just the way my mother said you would."</p>

<p>"I am acting the way Trish said I would? We need to talk about Trish when I get home. I want you to cancel your tennis date and be home when I get there."</p>

<p>"<b>I don't want to listen to another one of your attacks on my mother,"</b> Megan said.</i></p>

<p>And then later this exchange:</p>

<p><i>I asked you to be here when I got home," I said.</p>

<p>"I told you I had a tennis date."</p>

<p>"With Tredwell, yes. I remember, but I expected you to break that date so we could talk."</p>

<p>"I don't need to listen to another attack on my mother. I know you two aren't getting along but there is no reason for you to constantly complain about her," Megan said.</i></p>

<p>You created a no win situation with Warren where he couldn't win. Without proof his "loving wife" didn't respect him, his mother in law was walking all over him, and both of them were supporting his Wife's brother when he stole money from him. Then after having him live through all this the story had the <i>wife/girlfriend</i> of his "friends" talk to him about how he was making a big deal over nothing and how <i>miserable</i> he was making Megan after he got enough proof to prove that Trish was only trying to end his marriage like he had been saying all along, and then at the end where it's written that they get back together he says this: </p>

<p><i>As I listened to her I started to see her side of things. Maybe I should have confronted her when I thought she was having an affair and maybe I should have told her what I found out about Trish and stood beside her while she dealt with it. I let my anger blind me to Megan's needs. I began to realize that while I was trying to find a way to forgive Megan, she was also going to have to find a way to forgive me too.</i></p>

<p>That is what killed the story, right at the end, for me. Up till then I really like it, but you had the guy who was getting dumped on my his wife, his mother in-law, his brother in-law, and his boss, accept half the blame because he didn't try harder. Yet when he tried to talk about how he thought Carl was trying to start an affair with his wife, his wife shut him down, ignored him and continued seeing Carl. When he tried to discuss what his mother in-law was doing, his wife shut him down. When he asked his wife to spend less time with Carl she spent more. Then, at the end, you wrote the character, was was victimized, as identifying with one of his victimers as it was partially his fault for not trying harder.</p>

<p>The one person that should have been in his corner wasn't, and by the above exchange to make it a happy ending, it was written so that it was his fault for not finding another way to not be victimized and disrespected by his wife. He tried to show her respect and find a way to live with her mother, but she didn't show it back to him.</p>

<p>Sorry, I didn't like your story as much as I liked your others, but I've never been a fan of blaming a vicitim, male or female, so that a happy ending can be written. What happened the next time Megan does something that makes him uncomfortable? See that was never resolved in his rush to make up with her. Alot of time was spent on how he was victimized and nothing on Megan restoring his faith and trust as him being her husband and someone she could depend on.</p>

-Risq

Another great story by an excellant author. We don't get many good reads any more on this site. Thank you very much for the great entertainment you have provided.

as usual ---insofar as story writing goes --- but the "story" itself is mostly gibberish nonsense.

First of all, a great story. I loved it. Second of all I hate Warren Butterballs. Lets face it, rather than confronting his wife or her mother he drops a bomb on them and leaves. Rather than taking the proposal he wrote and getting what he deserved for it, he leaves. Are we beginning to see a pattern here? Megan deserves a better husband than this retard. I say, let him get shot in the spine, become a quadrapalegic and let Megan marry a real man.

I really appreciate your work, but this story has too many holes left by the end. What happened to his friends and their girlfriends while he was having problems, what happened to his work after he left, and his wife constantly sided with her mother over him. I am surprised he went back to her. Sorry.

K.K.<p>This story just didn't do it for me. I have the same reservations as Risq and Harry. Your characters simply didn't ring true for me. I didn't feel any of them warranted my sympathy or my empathy. Their exaggerated foibles made them appear as caricatures. The mother-in-law was so over the top that she made Cinderella's stepmother seem positively saintly. Her son took slothfulness to an art form. The wife must have overdosed on simpleton pills to have been so blind to her mother's incredibly intrusive actions. She was more defensive regarding how her husband addressed her tennis instructor than how her mother regarded him. And 'Warren.' Could a husband be more spineless than to acquiesce to his mother-in-law replacing his furniture, his house and his car; to abide her scrutinizing his financial records; to her giving her son permission to use 'Warren's' credit card; and to continue to suffer her backhanded compliments and outright insults? And then somehow in Chapter 4 he acquires the backbone he was so sadly lacking in the first three chapters?<p>K.K., your conclusion of reconciliation was "neither here nor there" for me. A story with much promise emerged as a silly tale. The gambit of the wife nursing her husband back to health has become stale. I have been and will continue to be an admirer of your efforts.

As someone who has worked in the past with physically limited adults, I met a number of quadriplegic men who were happily married. To better understand their limitations they satisfied my prurient curiosity by sharing with me that they were able to please their wives in every way. So you see, according to your opinion of what is a real man, they were as "real" as I, and I'd bet more so than you. Perhaps in the future you would be best served by confining your comments to that about which you had some knowledge...let's say, "Dick and Jane" novels?

The only thing that left me wondering was Trish. According to the story, she had never shown any controlling behavior like this before. Her motivation for turning their lives upside down and hiring a guy to break up Megan's marriage just didn't make any sense. But it's your story, and I enjoyed reading it.

Warren succumbed to the beratement of Trish and then Megan. Megan should have been more aware of Warren's concerns with her mother. If nothing else they were very obvious. Nobody gets away with unauthorized use of a credit card and anybody that condones it is, just, wrong.

Warren was good to try and keep his marriage together but should not have accepted responsibility for his actions when dropping the bomb or after. Megan should realize why he did what he did and accept it.

Still a good story. I like the "revenge" type stories. Keep going!!!!!

Jack

I like most of your work, but this one really sucks. sorry

Is Katy Coming to stay with Them now that they are going to stay together or are they going to keep her in the home?

Excellent write. Enjoyable. You accomplished the difficult job of realistically presenting two valid points-of-view between the wife and husband, re the turmoil that Trish sowed.

I did miss two things: 1) Some reaction besides reaching for a sandwich on Brandon's part. 2) closure on the proposal at his old job. Seems they would have promoted him (to sales?) and canned Thackole (spelling?)

This is a great story Keep them coming

Have a great day

Tony

At least he managed to grow some balls towards the end. Anybody named "Butter" is bound to get no respect, he needs to change his nick name to "Spike" or "Frankenstein." Now there's some names that garner respect!

I'am sorry, but I still can't believe that you're capable to produce such a rubbish. You've seriously jeopardized your good reputation. Longhorn__07 must have been dead drunk when he wrote his comment.-------Bavarian

I enjoyed the first 3 chapters where Warren as the loving husband slowly realize how he is getting screwed over and take action to fix his life. What ruined it for me was the ending. Megan as his wife betrayed him on every turn when it came to her mother. She would never think about cheating on him but she could not stay away from her mother's would-be seducer. For Megan "to forgive" Warren for leaving her to the mess she helped create was insulting. The real problem in the marriage is that Megan never respected Warren as a husband and a man. Since she invited Trish and Brandon into their home she was responsible for their behavior not Warren. Whenever in-laws are involved the spouse not blood related is at a disadvantage if there is a problem. She should have been the one to keep them in their place as guests. Instead she allowed her mother to abuse Warren and refused to discuss any problems with Warren. Even when given the decision to have Trish and Brandon move out by the end of the year she refused to support Warren. You wrote a great story at first but the reconciliation at all cost ending ruin it for me.

I would have immediately contacted Trish's ex to clear things up. This guy was as spineless as a jellyfish. It was an interesting read, but Warren was too stupid to believe. I've liked your other stories , but this one made me hate the main character. Luis

writers who always want a happy end. therefore they need a lot of compromises. and I don't see why in the end the husband is the asshole in the whole story. perhaps you should reread and not write your own story.

This was a very good story. I felt his walking out on Megan detracted from the story but it did work out OK. He did manage to get rid of his nemesis, though!

Thank You! As usual, I saved up all the chapters so I could read them NON-STOP. And in this case that included not bothering to get more coffee, even. Another great story. Each time I tried to anticipate, it was something different, although I did see that Brandon was NOT Harold's child, ahead of time.

More, more more PLEASE!!!!! (New stories, that is)

A great read! We all are a litle different and see and read different things in stories. We don't always agree with what the author has written. So ignore thowe who might disigree with your plot. If they are so much smarter

they should write their own stories. Keep'em coming as you have.

Best wishes,

This story was so good I left it alone for 2 months,then read it in one sitting.Thank you KK.

Was it because the way the story kept hammering on the husband with increasingly more and more absurd accusations? Amazingly, sooner or later the husband would take responsibility to all of them… This theme was so incredible, not to mention annoying, it was at times breathtaking and at times funny - but it was always absurd. At one point I thought – ok, time for husband to confess responsibility for the chill at winter and the heat in the summer… just tell him and he would… <P>

But unfortunately it was not just this impossible husband’s character that was disappointing. The way the story handled the task of “resolving” the main conflict between the spouses was gratuitous as much as it was formulaic. Rather than seriously dealing with the couple’s issues, we get instead the flu sub plot. Again and again we can find some sort of an accident/ illness as a plot device to bypass a real encounter between the protagonists. Instead, the illness/accidents always give the author a quick fix. The estranged partners assume old and familiar (if very formulaic) roles which all but solve the story’s complication and move it right to the happy end. The wife automatically turns into a caretaker/mother/nurse role. The husband is the child/ patient/needy, and everything is almost ok already. <P>

We also must accept as part of this ‘medical package’ another heavy handed/awkward (to me it was mostly just silly) presentation of the husband as a ‘psychotic by the flu’... I am not a medical expert, but it must be an extreme and rare case where a usually normal and healthy individual gets the common flu, and as a result he presents with delusions of a paranoid nature (which somehow persist even when the presumed cause – the high fever - have already went down -???). <P>

Last but not least is the way the story chooses to present the wife’s role in the family mess. I would agree that the husband carried an equal number of shares for the fate of the marriage. It’s true because it’s true in every marriage. But the wife’s role in this story is all but white washed. Her role vis a vis her mother and her husband was never not to be a neutral arbitrator, the way she kept claiming. I am not saying that as a character in a story she should have known that. But the implied author should have known better, and should have provided some perspective on her erroneous perspective – only he does not. Many people fall into the false proposition of neutrality when their true obligation is always to first be accountable to their current role as adults (namely their spouse). In other words, and this is a basic maxim: IN TIMES OF TROUBLE: ALWAYS STAND BY YOUR SPOUSE. In fact, Megan rarely stood by her husband (or trusted him) throughout the time her mother was in the house. Moreover, to the end, if not for his proofs (and with proof at hand who needs trust?), I doubt Megan would have EVER trusted him. So much for a sense of reassurance that this is a spouse he should wish to get back together with – blue eyes or not…<P>

The story never hints that in fact Megan was at least as responsible as he was But the problem is that in chapter 2 the author dug the wife and the mother into such a deep hole, it’s really incredible how later on we were supposed to somehow buy her as an equal opportunity victim of her mother and the husband as Mr. grouchy. This is not how they were portrayed in chapter two. There, we see how he was being abused mocked and ignored, and if he was weak, it does not give Megan any brownie points. She presents throughout the story, not as neutral (the way she proclaims). It was much more like she was a willing deputy to her mother’s every whim. At the same time, she was very hostile, untrusting and unsupportive partner to her husband throughout this difficult time. The revisionist version of chapter two presented here seems as credible as the fairy tale portrayal of her in chapter two. <P>

Overall, I would suggest that the author try to avoid throwing the main characters to overly extreme behaviors (which are harder to be convincing anyway) if only for the reason that it’s much harder to turn them around (convincingly) afterwards…

great story.I loved it specially the megan shot me episode it was a bit comedy & a bit funny but anyways i loved it very much.

I enjoyed the setup for this story, but I felt that Warren should have acted differently at the "Family Meeting".

I believe that he should have stated that he was not longer the "Head of the House" since Megan always sided with Trish.

He would also add that since his wife didn't trust his judgement, that he was leaving and for the rest of the year, and Trish would have to pay for the house, car, and the country club membership. Trish would then get katty, and Megan would again side with Trish. Warren would thank Megan for her support of her husband, and drop the 600K divorce settlement bomb on the family. "Trish has been lying to you, and you would rather believe her than me!" Warren would then drop a copy of a letter that her dad mailed the previous week at his request. "Megan, why didn't you get this, has someone been stealing our mail?" The other facts would be presented, and Warren would storm out, and go to Lexington.

For his part in the J&S proposal, Warren should have been re-hired and given Thad's job as a salesman, with a higher salary. The Boss should have given him time off, and said he could start at the first of the new year.

He then could have stayed in Lexington, and worked with the counselor. Megan would continue to call, and "clean up" the mess she created. Warren would continue to stay away because he felt unrespected, even when Trish and her son are kicked out of the home.

The emergency would have happened, and Megan would save his life. Megan would make Warren the head of the household, and let him pick out their new home, but ask him to make sure it has a nice room to make into a nursery.

I believe that this ties up more loose ends, and gives the story a more complete feel to it.

I've read this three times now over the years. Beautifully done. Wonderful character developments. I particularly appreciated the way you kept coming back to Kate. It was an unusual twist to the story line, but for me it was very meaningful. My wife had a stroke eight years ago and, in many ways, it rendered her somewhat like Kate. In addition to not being able to speak, it screwed up other parts of her brain. So, I found your Kate very believable and sort of like glue holding part of your story together. <p> <p> <p> Thanks for writing such a wonderful story!

You should write for the daytime trauma drama TV series you're so good at it. But to write stories that have meat to them you aren't worth a shit so give it up puta

I've read 32 of your stories, and this is one of the best. The tension you develop in Warren's life is almost too uncomfortable to read. A lot of reality in this fiction.

Very well written story, but Megan should have her ass kicked for not supporting her husband and lettin her bitch mother ruin her marriage.

60 year old George

They guy is just a loser. I mean REALLY. First, he is such a total wimp that he allows the bitch mother in law to dominate his life, just as his asshole boss abuses him at work. He just doesn't have a pair.

There is NO way that he could take her back without sacrificing what ever little piece of manly pride he might have.

I thought he was growing a pair when he told off the tennis bum, told off the wife, mom in law and junior, sold the house, car and so on. But in the end our fearless author has to write yet another wimpy protagonist who just has no stones.

It's not like she's the only piece in Kentucky.

should leave his dolt of a wife to the tender mercies of her fucked-up family. It wouldn't hurt if ole' Warren grew a set, too.

I've read this story several times and find it to be a very fine read. I don't know if warren was as wimpy as others seem to think but she didn;t cheat on him, and I do believe the mother in law was the real source of the problem. There are times a hubby and wife should reconsile their differences and this was a nice example. R.T.

I read this series when it first came out and then stumbled upon it again tonight. Reads even better the second time. Plausible plot, realistic character development, good pacing, and interesting. I could feel Butter's pain. I'm hoping KK starts to write again!

The story is not sexy but it deserves the 5 I gave it.

But I couldn't stop reading it.

No obvious grammar issues.

Well done and write stuff of this quality some more.

...but why should he take any part of the blame? It was her, who forgot all loyality to her husband. Why should he accept to have a bitch of a mother in law and a brat of a teen-boy disturb their marriage? Why didn't Megan lend an ear to his side at any time in the story? If this would have happened to me (or anybody I know) she would have heard my ultimatum much earlier. His only fault was beeing too patient! Her apologies - on the other hand - seemed weak to me.

5*

to gain a lot, its not easy, but may be worthy. TK U MLJ LV NV

Enjoyed it the first time......... Enjoyed it this time

Thanks for sharing it. I've read it a couple of times now.

MissouriUSA

Let me start off by saying this is going to be a negative comment. I don't like the story, but I'll explain my reasons logically, without attacking the author. Okay, well to start off, I'm usually a RAC (reconcile at all cost) type of person. Normally, I root for the couple to get back together. However, in this story, I feel like that this reconciling was too premature. Don't get me wrong, I understand the wife did not cheat on him sexually, but to me, she did the second worst thing by disrespecting him. A wife and a husband's primary loyalty goes to their respective spouse without question, even more so than their family. Examples can be found all over where a couple will marry and cut off all ties with their families as the family members do not accept the marriage. A wife, above all, must defend her husband's honor/reputation and the same is expect of the husband. In this story, Megan, several times, let her mother make snide comments about Butter without any repercussions. No "back off mother" or "that's my husband you're talking about". Throughout the marriage, Butter worked his ass off for Megan and her happiness. What did he get in return? A cheating wife. Right now, some of you are pulling your hair, screaming "Look dickwad, read the story. WHERE DO YOU SEE ANY CHEATING!!!!" Well, my response is she cheated on him throughout the whole story. When I mean cheating, I mean emotionally cheating. By ignoring his concerns, Megan was subconsciously degrading Butter. Now I'm not one of those macho macho mans by any means, but every man has some self-respect. For your wife to completely ignore that sense of self-respect for her own happiness is simply incredible. Throughout the story, Megan always placed her happiness over Butter's. It was always about her -- from the bigger house to the Lexus to the country club membership. It's common knowledge that a marriage is a partnership, compromising is the key to a successful and happy long-term marriage. In this marriage, Megan and her mother got what they wanted, every single time. Now some might debate that the husband is a wimp, but either way, the opinion is irrelevant as love is blind. I know it sounds like I want to burn the bitch, but actually, my opinion is to the contrary. I honestly believe that Megan deserves another chance. It's not completely her fault that her mother is a conniving, old hag with a bastard son born out of an affair. However, several things must happen first. First, Megan must acknowledge her mistakes and instead of blaming her problems on her mother, accept blame for her role in the partial destruction to the marriage. Even at the end, she kept stating how Butter was partially to blame. To me, that's unbelievably selfish and ignorant. Any lesser man would've ditched the marriage early on, but Butter, through love or whatever motivation he had, stayed on and fought for his marriage. For her to not acknowledge that is simply insane. Secondly, Megan needs to show that she's changed. I don't know how she can do that, but she needs to demonstrate her fidelity (emotionally/sexually) to Butter, and show that she'll place his interests above all, not like she's done in the past. Lastly, Megan needs to reconnect with her father. This part might seem somewhat random, but it is not. To be given the chance to reconcile with Butter, Megan needs to cleanse all influences of her mother. Among those influences included the destruction of her relationship with her father. To apologize and reconcile with her father would demonstrate her willingness to do everything to win back Butter. As you can see, the steps Megan needs to take in order to reunite with Butter comprises quite a lengthy process. That's primarily why I don't like this story. The author reunited them within one-two days, completely bypassing all these steps. My guess is within five years, Megan will do something extremely stupid, creating deep unhappiness for Butter

I couldn't stop reading it. Seeing it from wife's point of view in this chapter is interesting. The hubby's main problem was his lack of balls, at work and at home. The author did a great job of ramping up tension, read like a mystery in the middle chapters. The two things which seem so fantastic are Trish's pure malice and Megan and her father not talking at all since the divorce. He loved her, she loved him; they were close. So then they just go incommunicado? But, both elements were necessary to make the story work. I suspended disbelief and went through the flow. I can understand the wife feeling caught in the middle, and not seeing the scheming of her mother-it would be a difficult situation and almost impossible to believe that her mother was purposefully and relentlessly seeking the destruction of her own daughter's marriage. I was cool with the reconciliation. And, it was a most entertaining read.

"I never knew what she did with herself during the day but I suspected that she spent her days hanging upside down in a cave somewhere." -- funniest line in a lit story ever...

My only issue is that Megan can honestly assume that Warren could have come with his concerns and she would have listened. She complained about his lack of trust but what about hers. I have to agree with him, if she was in a frame of mind to believe him she would have figured out some things herself. It took basically a two-by-four across the head for her eyes to open and by then the damage was done. Good story with slightly presumptuous characters. Don't know how I missed his KK story befor but glad it showed up today.

Perhaps, the author could've had Butter court Trish and eventually marry....Not really, just mental diarrhea. Butter and Megan were both betrayed by a scheming wretched mother/mother in-law.

An amazing story. An instant favorite. Five stars. I was actually amazed that he left her. It really didn't make much sense. I understand that he was upset about all the times she took her mothers side, but he failed to see that she truly did love him. When the tennis guy confessed about the attempt to seduce Megan, he indicated that she wouldn't even have a drink with him. That was a clear indication that she was going out of her way to not do anything inappropriate. That seems like something he should have picked up on. There was a lot to be proud of in regard to this wife's behavior.

Great story. I don't know why people feel this story is unrealistic. I had a friend who was married to a real life mama's boy. His mother tried to intrude in every part of their life. He refused to see his mother for what she was. In the end, they got divorced and he went to live with his mom. She is now engaged to another guy. Her ex-husband actually came back later apologized for everything his mother put her through and wished her the best. He discovered that his mom has been sabotaging his relationships since his dad died. She had never dealt with his death and wanted to keep her son close to her because she was lonely and he was all that she had left. I told this story to say that it is possible for a parent to want to sabotage their children's happiness if they are missing something in their life. The child's natural reaction is to trust the parent first. I can see this story happening. Great job.

About a total pussy.

Yea, Thad went to the hospital, big deal. Yea, Trisha gave Megan 250 grand. So now what? Does Warren started flipping burgers at Burger Doodle? Does Kate learn to tie her shoes? What about Leon?

Thought this was an excellent story! Congrats to the author. Didn't care for the 'weakness' of the husband or the 'blindness' of the wife towards her mother's actions but they did act in character so that makes the story. Also thought the 'flu' at the end wasn't needed but was entertaining!

Well Done! One of my favorites of yours!

Her clock is ticking, how many yrs wasted with that sick mother. The wife was to easy to sway and be minipualated by the mother. Megan has at least 70% of blame fall on her for let her mother do her thing. He was a wimp until after yrs of punishment he wakes up.

I loved it really.

But you never made much of a case for equal blame between Megan and Butterfield.

when Trish was giving him grief his wife should have stood with him.

she went to play tennis with treawell even after he warned her,believing her mother again rather then him.

Even then she should have been considerate enough to discontinue playing with Treadwell.

So i'm just saying,the make up didn't ring true all she did was make excuses and he was so lonely and weak he agreed.

Are all of your male characters this weak? He went from being pissed at her and her mother to realizing that it was all his fault? This is an hour of

My life that I will never get back!

This was a compelling read and a well written story. The main concept I take away from it is that big problems develop from poor communications and they get worse over time.

5*

All the story should in be the romance category,

sub-class: evil mother,

sub-sub-class: yielding husband.

and a pair of scissors wont cut the ties, TK U MLJ LV NV

Great story. Period.

Beset by two demons at once. A monster of a M.I.L. and a job that takes advantage of him and drives him up a wall.

Why didn't Megan cheat?

She had no respect for her husband.

She showed no loyalty to her husband.

She put no real value in their marriage.

She treated him as a meal ticket but otherwise kind of a nuisance to have around.

Was the tennis guy just a little too sleazy?

Not quite the right thing?

In the end this is a rather heavy-handed RAAC story, putting a weak marriage back together.

She was clearly at fault letting her mother walk all over her husband giving him no support. I just thought you two couldn't get on or words to that effect. That's rubbish her mother forced every issue and constantly belittled her husband.

Why spoil a good story by such a stupid rationalisation of what happened between the two. She should have just apologised for not supporting him as she should have. Then he would have accepted that and they could have reconciled instead of such a stupid conclusion.

Hey loved the humour though! Still 5* despite my reservations.

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She demonstrated her faithfulness to him by never responding to the other guys advances. Not sure why he couldn't see that as a major point in her favor.

There could of been a much better ending..or continuation..

Anyone with sense could see that something wasn't right there from the beginning. I mean, Megan couldn't be that stupid. Your father who pretty much spoiled you your entire life just abandons his family and leaves them penniless. Your mother takes it upon herself to get rid of all your furniture and replace it with hers as soon as she moves in, without anyone's consent, and then shows a complete disregard for you or your husband's feelings on the matter. These should have been the first signs that maybe she should take some of her dad's calls and find out the full story. Then on top of that she starts putting down your husband every chance she gets. COME ON.

Reread. The ending just wasn't. I just kind of ... dribbled.

Love it. A story where a guy spends over a decade being a doormat in the most obvious LW way (you know, the 'I think I'll say something... oh wait it's not the right time" way). All of the sudden he gets on his horse and cuts all contact with anyone.

And the usual band of idiots try to defend the doormat, attack the doormat, quibble about the dopey twist at the end and never once say "this writer writes lots of wimpy doormat characters... this seems to be just one more story along the same tired lines."

hilarious.

Gawd he's such a wimp!

4 Chapters of boring wishy washy wimp crap

I guess he never liked happy stories. I mean he made the guy a door mat. I atleast expected it to have an epilog but the mother fucker put me through so much of the crop, only to finally read they lived happily ever after. If I find this deranged mother fucking piece of shit he better hid behind his dominant wife's skirt.

K.K. managed to keep me glued to 4 parts, 3-page each. Must be his (her) writer's craft.

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This is an the anon comment to Part 1 (Intro):

"I do not know what will happen.

Based on what i have read so far, Megan is a keeper!

Warren settled for too little as regards his carieer. His situation at work affects his self esteem.

Warren's mother-in-law is a bitch. However it was wrong to start a shouting match.

The situation at home will adversely affect Megan & Warren's marriage and sex life."

I actually enjoyed this reconciliation - except it seemed to me Warren was accepting more than his share of the blame. Others have already addressed this, but unlike many of them, I still found it a good story in spite of that flaw.

One thing I was curious about...when he was worried that his wife might be having an affair, she began suspicially calling him at work to see what time he'd be home, and then he'd find the recently used car. You explained the car (her mother) but forgot to explain why she started curiously calling him when it was a new behavior from her.

Thanks for the story.

Cog

I get the story , but at least you could have written a longer epilogue or stuff like that, but it's just filled with depressive story for 4 chapters.

A piss poor ending. He turned into a pussy. Caved right in. He should of just divorced the stupid bitch. She deserved it. She had absolutely NO faith in him.

Seriously KK?

You got stories here that are brilliant!

But for everyone brilliant story you then go write one that truely sucks!

This is one of them!

I’d of never allowed her back into my life. I’d of gone the divorce route. She had little to no faith in me, she believed everything her mother and brother said and did.

The story ending sucked.

I think you saved the story in this last chapter. Not my favorite, but not as bad as I thought it was going to be. I've seen much worse.

I enjoyed the story. Gave it 5 stars. But I can't resist observing that the protagonist is dumber than a sack of hammers. So obtuse it detracts from the story.

a good ending. A faithful wife, seemingly a rara avis in these self-centered times. A deluded but upright and well-meaning husband. I liked it a lot and gave it 5*. So there!

how do these characters survive in the mind of the author. Would like to say more, but i feel my iq sinking lower the more i think about this story.

As previously commented, these characters are too stupid to live, and so am I for having slogged through four installments of this POS hoping for a good KK story to appear.