by Ashson
What's the motivation? No build up, no context, just leaves me going "WTF"......
Nothing to go on here.Not very likely at all, her behaviour.
and you find this exotic. she should call the cops on his ass.
along the way you went from a not bad story teller to a piece of shit.
Now that Peter has had his way with Kelly, and assured himself that she is an easy fuck,I wonder if he will stop by while Bob is at work and take more of Kelly's pussy.
I like my fantasy to be rooted in either reality or potential reality. I couldn't buy into this one even though it was reasonably well written. Good try, but it didn't work for me.
Ashson the resident male chauvinist pig writes again. I won't say I enjoyed it because most people loath creepy fuckers like this guy.........and the author!
enjoyed a few of ashson shorts but there's no disputing this woman was badgered into this and there's a disturbingly fine line between rape or not. It's all well and good in another category, apparently. 2*
But even they wouldn't have fallen for this horse shit. The brash one I knew would have knocked him on his ass for groping her in the house and the most timid one I knew would have made herself more unavailable and even she wouldn't have stood for what eventually happened in the garage.
I like my fantasies to bee built on a foundation of plausibility.
You don't give women a hell of a lot brains, is your woman this stupid and slutty?
If there is any doubt, any lack of a clear refusal, it isn't rape. I don't recall her saying no. Peter certainly harassed her a bit, but harassment does not equal rape. She's a little too co-operative as well, bucking her hips in response and evidently not trying to fight him at all. No, not rape. Aggression, harassment, but not forcible rape. Is Peter a dick, yes, he is. Is Kelly a slut? Not really. She was weak at a key moment, presumably doesn't regularly step out on the old man or anything. It's likely that she is a little slow, too, not bothering to see the risks in going to the garage after being groped like that. She's a bit dense and weak, but if she confessed it, hubby might forgive her. Might. Not sure what I'd do, to be honest, but given how close this comes to rape, I would be a little less harsh than otherwise. Then again, I'm in an open marriage, so I'm not normal. I'd probably get some payback, though, such as fucking Peter's wife or sister or something like that. Just once, since this was an isolated incident. Nothing nuclear.
Too short is not. IMHO, this begs for a little history about Sweetie and Peter! If he's a former BF, or been flirting with her (and vice versa) for weeks, it might lend SOME credence! As it is, it is incredible...in the literal sense of the word!
Underdeveloped in terms of characters and buildup to the act, which itself, is unconvincing. Cannot become invested in it.
Who the Hell is Peter, how does he fit in, she seems to know him, thought she was a straight wife, she doesn't raise hell in the house - the garage and certainly after they both cum?????
Short quickees are great but do you think you could, at least, identify the players and any history. To me, she is an easy slut...WTF?
The many forms of retribution in the flowing upstream and downstream simultaneously in the female mind - make this pleasantly plausible. Some men peep the readiness (as did Peter) for actions of the disturbed getting even. Many women enjoyed being controlled outside the cave, inside is a different matter (it is a only when i want to be controlled at home). Men should best reflect some of their best encounters occur away from the cave (even with their own mate). And if you don't recognize the authors words and symbols that Kelly was disturbed, you missed the story's incite.
First, the only way she wouldn't know who was groping her is if she were in a huge crowd of people, not five guys in her home. Dumb. Second, at least introduce the characters an maybe give us some reason for their motivation.
This is NOT impossible. On the contrary. The story is based on similar true events.
Hi Ashson:
You are a prilific writer; I like your stories.
This story is (a) VERY EROTIC, & (b) TOTALLY REALISTIC (100% believable).
Some guys are so BRAZEN that they grab the wife's ass cheek or boob the moment her husband leaves the room (or even better the hot tub!) When the husband returns, the brazen guy plays dumb.
Above happened to me with my first wife. The brazen guy was my bestman at the wedding. I do not know whether he fucked her but i know that he felt her up all over her body.
It happened to me with the same wife once again, this time around campfire (different guy).