All Comments on 'What Feats He Did That Day Pt. 05'

There is not much more to say than that. I throughly enjoyed it from beginning to end. Well done.

Very good. Well worth reading. Perhaps a sequel?

Brilliant story! The way you blended both worlds as believable realities was magic. Really enjoyed the story

echo the sentiments of previous commenters and say simply the best.Very well done indeed.

Another wonderful tale from the warped mind of Mr. Alien! Do you write for a living? You do it too well for it to be just a part-time hobby! Which famous writer are you - really? You can tell me -- I promise not to tell anyone else!! :-) In any event, thanks for sharing your talents here - I eagerly await your next story!

...as I finished. Truly wonderful. Your best yet. How about that sequel? *winks*

You write better and have a better sense of a good story than what passes for professional writing found in bookstores.

Late at night, just idling killing 15 minutes before bed; two hours later, I find myself suffused with that warm fuzziness that comes from finishing a great, rollicking tale. A wonderful story!

I stayed up all night reading this, you are extremely talented and thorough. Please continue to write, you have a wonderful style and imagination! Thank you!!

I stayed up for four hours to read this story. It is great! Skilled writing, compelling plotlines, believable characters, realistically complex story. Really well done. Thanks for sharing it with us.

MA,

you're one of maybe the four best writers on this website, I need a rss feed or something, I checked your page randomly and just read this whole story.

Thoroughly entertained! Thank you.

Absolutely brilliant! A paraplegic studmuffin journalist that excels at the under-rated art of crafting obituaries saves the planet. Who woulda thunk it ? Almost as good as "A stitch in time" . . . almost. And that is high praise. Marsh Alien, I hope you have been financially rewarded for your gift of story-telling as greatly as I have been psychically rewarded by your sharing it.

I loved it and spent a few hours reading it non stop from start to finish. What an idea for a hero. I had my suspicion at first about the SM of BDSM, but your storytelling caused me to doubt myself until it was fully revealed.

Now I'm onto the next of your stories. I'm sure I won't be disappointed. Once again, keep writing and I'll keep reading.

With skills like this I cannot believe that your are not a published author. What name are you published under, I would pay to read your work.

Fantasitc ! Mindblowing ! Super ! You're a genius, write more for us !!

at the quality of the story (actually, of the three parallel stories: obituary writer, game champ, and future world saver), although the story about Rick Handley the newspaper reporter came out as the most developed. <p>

the wheel chair-bound game champ that's known to very few people outside of the VR world he goes into is the least developed, although it could actually be the most interesting, if the over-all story was longer. The hero who saved the people of the future from Morhlings was too interrupted by the newspaper guy aspect to be fully polished at this length as a short novel. Although I read it for the sci-fi aspect of the story, the aspect about West Virginia political corruption captivated my attention more than his nightly "dreams" of/visits with future earthlings who were about to be enslaved by ugly humanoids who went by Star Trek rules of allowing either simulation games or dual, hand-to-hand combats to settle global issues. <p>

for some reason, no character captured my interest than Shawn Michaels, the prostitute who posted as a newspaper reporter on behalf of old, decripited politicians. she only had a small role in the story, but her mysterious past and unknown future --- both as a professsional prostitute-for-hire and as a serious newspaper woman who was actually good at her job --- was just as intriging as Rick Handley the Rambo hero of the story, of all the women characters featured in the story (Angie who was Allie's younger sister, Allie, Rachel, Francesca, et al. Shawn was the most interesting... and not only because she's a gorgeous blonde... since to a shy, horny cripple guy, basically all the women he knew in the office were beautiful... oh, and yes, all the dozens of virgins and Lara Croft's he met in his dreams, too... he found all of them to be gorgeous!, with the "it" woman being Francesca, the twenty something virgin daughter of the old scientist of the future, Wizen...) <p>

again, job very well done...

Terriffic story. Thanks for crafting it for us. Keep writing. In my humble opinion you have the talent to publish. If you do, please tell us whose name to look for at the bookstore. Cheers

I feel so privileged to have had the opportunity to hear your unique voice. Please continue to write, because I could see a story like this being picked up by a publisher. Keep plugging away, and don't let anyone discourage you.

The best compliment I can think of. Too bad I didn't write this story.Will look forward to reading more of your work.

I love stories that actually GO somewhere. And yours did just that. And I like little details (like the logical symbols) and "reality" (like limits to powers).

Totally enjoyed it. Rick is a very appealing character. Well written.

This story is not what I thought I was looking for but is now one of my favorites. Very awesome. Thank you

Pretty good story. The sex scenes seemed a little forced like they didn't belong in this story and were put in as an afterthought to satisfy literotica readers. But the story was really good!

with his reporter skills, he should have looked up Ken when he returned to 2008 to catch up on what he did. would have made an interesting side story.

Great, great story. Sex was fine, added some nice spice (and humanity) to the storyline . . . wihich was superb! (Did I mention it was a great story?).

I noticed that all your stories were writen in 2007 and 2008.they are great stories.you havent anything on this site since.I hope it has nothing to do with your health.if you write on another site I would like to know where so I could read more of your stories. ron from the usa

The sad is just that it is over. Thank you for the story!

But honestly dude this is an erotic site! You can't put plot and a good story here! It's unheard of!

Loved it by the way.

I love it. Please continue writing.

Congratulations MarshAlien.

I must agree with all the other commentators {I read} that your creation "What Feats He Did That Day" is a superb story. And I also would hope that whatever you have done the last few years is available through other channels? Hope.....hope!!!

I enjoyed the the whole thing. It appealed to me on many levels - sci-fi, going after the truth, having the good guys win, making a difference in the world, funny little movie references, multiple-plots, story twists, solid grammar, and everyone loves a happy ending!

Bravo! Bravo! Bravo!

I think I'm going to read it through once again.

I'll go along with a previous comment, you put a story like this here, its to good!

Keep up the great work, nice plot, nice love story and excellent scifi!

excellent story. more fun than i thought possible. idea was inspired.

My favorite story's here are always ones with an interesting and well thought out plot. I've read most of your other submissions, and I think this one of the best.

This has been an amazingly good story. Thank you so very much for sharing with all of us. True, it was written some time ago, but the story line is quite timeless and fits with so many other well told and appreciated tales. You have showed many an incite in the ways people interact with one another while injecting just enough humor. Please continue to share your talents.

Handroclus? I laughed outloud! Loved it. Great story, fun and funny. You made my day.

"Terror of broad sides of barns across the west".

Fair warning, I am SO stealing that line!!!

A very imaginative story that did not disappoint. I only wish we had real journalists now when we really need them.

It was a great story idea that was executed well. I enjoyed all 5 installments and only wish there were more. ;)

Thank you for your work.

Fantastic idea, well implemented and written.

Thank you for sharing =D

Man the story is Awesome.Loved it

This is one of the best stories I have read in a long time, thank you for sharing it

If you haven't already, look into publishing or self-publishing this. :)

I read this story once before and I liked it then. I am a long time sci-fi reader (50+years) and I liked your story very much. I have read too many stories to say yours is the best, but it is up there. Thank-you for sharing.

Read this one after it was posted and then came across it again today. Excellent series. Author pulled off parallel plot lines perfectly. Well done!

Thank you or the effort it took to create this excellent story. I was riveted from beginning to end.

Chimo1961

This was an honor and a privilege to read. Warm, glory, humor and pain. A very, very well told tale. You, sir are indeed a storyteller. Trajan321

A great piece of work, imaginative and very entertaining. I loved the play between the two story lines and who doesn't love to read about crooked politicians getting their pee pee's spanked. Loved it!

Read this story three times.Loved it every time!

Sir,

Your story telling skills and writing ability have combined to make a great story! Thank you for mixing sci-fi, erotica, and a worthy plot into a great read.

The whole story was a strange jumping, here and there until you got used to the parallel story idea. What fun to read and what a shame it is finished. Even the sex scenes were delightful for the indirect manner in which they are suggested. Could we have a sequel?

If the PDA came from Pete, why?

I'm not kidding when I say this is art. There are plenty of amazing stories that have crappy sex scenes (you know, the whole thing this part of the site is based on), which ultimately detracts from the story in general - and, it should be noted, plenty of well written smut with no story at all. Which sucks. But this? Fucking hell, man. I think I have maybe two critiques PERIOD. Well, something closer to 30 if you want the grammar mistakes or punctuation errors. But yeah. HOLY FUCK! Write more like this, and I may be persuaded to ask for some assistance on my own stories (none of them are as sexy as this one, as a word of warning :-p)! This is really QUITE good. I'll be reading your other series to see if I like them as well. You should fully expect to hear more from me :-)

- The Four-Eyed Vampire

Man work is gonna suck today I haven't slept instead I read this

WORTH IT .

Why are you not writing professionally?

I'd pay to read anything you write if it merely has your name on it!

Great Story! I really enjoy it from beginning to end. 9.5/10! I just wish you give a more conclusive ending for Shawn. I mean, I know Shawn had basically ran away, but I would like to know what she is doing now. Did she find works elsewhere? Feels guilty about betraying Rich? Is her life miserable now that she is ousted for being a part of the scandal? I alway prefer a more conclusive ending for most major and minor characters so I was rather unsatisfied when Shawn’s future is unknown. Other than that, great story! Loves your works!

I really enjoyed this story, quite a lot in fact, but I feel that the whole was perhaps less than the sum of its parts. The two plotlines, reporting on the scandal and being drawn into the future to fight for the planet, were both very engaging, and either one of them could easily have carried a story of this length on its own. I think that in switching back and forth between them each is done a disservice, and that more exploration of either concept could have yielded great results. Overall I'm very pleased to have read this story, so kudos. Still, I can't help but wish that it had been two stories to read.

I agree. There are 2 stories here that vie for the attention of the reader. Together they dilute the impact of each.

It saddens me to see that some previous commenters were unable to digest and appreciate the scope of the story. It is an example how to deftly handle a multi dimensional adventure. I applaud your work, I celebrate your effort, and I have rejoiced in my pleasure while reading. Thank you!!!

My two Favorite subjects in one. (Mints anyone?, Although younger readers may not get it.) Well written as always. I also re-read Acts of Grace, and Goin' Fishin', about every 3 months. Such Fun! Thank You.

This guy is dumb as a rock. Great story. Love reading it. This is one dumb fella

I loved the story.

As a fiction author, especially a science fiction author, you're allowed to have some illogicalities, and sometimes these are necessary for the story.

There were two in this story that particularly stand out:

1) With twenty years to prepare for the third challenge it would have made more sense for future Earth to raise and train a large group of warriors, using mentors from the past, along with the methods in the story, and then select a champion from among them. While there would then be the issue of integrating the warriors into society afterwards, this would have been less of an issue than losing the challenge.

2) In a battle of champions it is usual and honorable for the challenged to have the choice of weapon, and this would have been consistent with the Morling sense of honor that said that if Rick didn't have his flychair then the Morling would have to be similarly immobile.

Mind you, with the very substantial physical advantages of the Morlings, it would have been hard to find an earth weapon, short of a firearm or crossbow, that would have given the human a chance.

So well written. Incredibly original. Like a Baldacci novel in that it is un-put-downable. A stunningly good and fun read!

I've never liked science fiction before, if that's what it is...I stayed up way too late reading this.

So well written. I could not stop reading! Shame you cannot give more than 5 stars!

Great fun. Many thanks

Fine work.

Thanks.

Well done!

Wow I love this story.

Love this story.

Fun to read. Excellent

Two for two, very well done. Thoroughly entertaining, been reading sci fi since the ‘50s and your writing, while obviously a bit different, fits the genre perfectly. Thank you.

I really enjoyed this series. Really well written. But I feel that it needed a bit more. About the story he broke. What happened with BD after she recovered from being poisoned? What about the original whistle-blower? Also what about SM? I can't believe the paper or the MC would let her get away with just resigning after she betrayed them to protect herself and others. The Governer merely resigned and it all went away? This series needs at least two more chapters but we will never see them unfortunately. Still an excellent story well told. Thanks for writing this. BardnotBard

Outstanding, I have found many stories on this site that I enjoy that are more than just sex....keep writing Marsh!!

Thank you, Marsh, for giving us another great story…

Tob

What writs this Writer hath wraught! But alas! Nothing here since 2008. MarshAlien, I hope you are alive and well, whether you ever lay eyes on this or not. My thanks, and my respect for what you have shared with us, and for the craftsmanship and the artistry with which you did it.