by DaktoRto
Looking forward to Chris breeding his slut mother - she really is a cock struck whore - the best!
Don't know what's so hot about these pussy men you write about. No revenge, no retribution, no rage, no anger (I don't call,for violence here tho). no nothing for fucking around, for being unfaithful sluts without consent. To each his own I guess.
Besides the weak main "characters" I like your stories.
and not even good, sensable porn, at that. Sharon's conversation with J.C. just before he gets his "mercy fuck" promises him (and the readers) with an explanation of how she gets to be the fuck-slut of the neighborhood teenage boys. Does this mean another chapter of this crud? Give it up!!!
The only thing that was missing was an explanation of what caused her to become a slut.
Other than that; the story was really over the top for being erotic.
Thanks for the good read.
There is nothing better than to read a story about a cum dump. What a whore.Should of had her and the daughter fucking the whole dang town. You damn near did. If i was the guy i would of beat the hell out of the the punks them dumped the whores sorry ass after i divorced her.
The title says what happened, but why she fucked half the neighbourhood kids was not explained, and why did they film everything. Will the dad get his big titted daughter,as a trade off for allowing his wife too keep on fucking her son.
Maybe the next chapter will explain it. And who is Paul?
I like simple and direct, so I liked this. (Does that mean I am simple?)
No changes are needed, if I had my druthers you would include more description , flying tits are very nice, some description of flyees is nicer.
The thought of incest is, in itself, disturbing, though it is a part of growing up. It was hot and good material, but the story and characters don't really make it a good story for me. Incest doesn't turn me on, cheating doesn't turn me on, but a good fuck does, and that's what the story had... up until 'Charlie' decided to join in. If it was me, I'd have divorced the fuckin' whore. She goes and fucks behind my back and thinks I'll be okay with it if she says 'It's okay to join'? Fuck no! Can't trust you now, couldn't trust your ass then, and will never trust your loose cunt again!
Just my opinion, though.
Overall, great job. Writing style was a definite plus -- descriptive without going overboard. If I had to pick on a minor detail, I think you got a little carried away on your use of commas. Otherwise, anxious to read some of your other submissions.
Hot beginning of the series. I like the way the dad was finally included so they didn't have to sneak around.
Wtf man you was doing decent with it besides a few mis haps but you had to go off and really fuck it up it was bad enough that you had to include the other guys and make her look like a slut but you could have saved it but than you went off and had to bring the kids dad into it that was a mistake and fucked it up you should have kept the dad's Ass out of it
Enjoyed the story. I wonder why the father was so unattentive to his wife's needs. I also wonder when, where, and how the father lost his honor.
Nothing erotic about betrayal and disrespect. Nothing realistic about the story and the characters reactions. 1*