by JMaxwell69
Ending too abrupt AND lots more pairings that could be made. Hope you continue this (forget about the last paragraph - or better yet just edit it away) and keep going.
A good story with some very hot sex but the story did end quickly and was a little too long.
Very hot story although, what happened the other 3 days, this story has some much potentual, and it needs to go there.
Brilliant - When will part two cum along ?
Well, the ending is a bit botched and it literally cries for a follow-up.
1. Good character description, for all of them. Real people! The usual reader already knows, has already met all the types described in the story. There aren't only super-humanly-beautiful-strong-and-hung here!
2. Good build up, description of the situation, relationship dynamics and overall effort to make everything believable as a real life situation. Stories in which every character is naked and already has sex in the first paragraph are so boring.
3. uh-mmmm dude! MORE!!! wtf!!! MORE MORE MORE!!!
Keep up the good work, man
Talk about a big build up and then nothing.
How can you not finish this, but just leave us wondering what happened over the next 3 days ?
Up until the end it was worth 4 stars, but I'm only giving it 2 because I'm so disappointed.
You got bored with this and just wrapped it up as quick as you could, didn't you ?
That's not what a good writer does.
Very, VERY disappointing ending !