All Comments on 'When a Witch is Not a Witch'
by TwistedPlayr
- 23 Comments
Anonymousover 19 years agoI really liked this story and thats saying something because generally, I don't care for stories featuring dominant females. Good job!
Black Tulipover 19 years agoI liked your story even though I normally avoid dominant females.
The only thing I could not appreciate was your big globs he had to swallow. I found that not sexy at all.
Good luck.
Anonymousover 19 years agoPlease, more dominant females! How can us poor males resist!?
Anonymousover 19 years agoI like it. You made it very sensual. I may go and find myself a goblin female. :-)
5' 8" with a Big Irish Cock
tarsusover 19 years agoGreat story. The witch's use of simple seduction to establish her dominance is the key to making this story work so well. Good development of the characters and set-up for the premise without spending a lot of time with a convoluted backstory.
Anonymousover 19 years agoThis was fantastic, although it seemed a little quick to end. I had expected another scene with whatever it was she was holding back.
Anonymousover 18 years agoHey... great story. I loved it and thought you did a very good job with incorporating sensuality into fiction. You may want to use spell check once or twice... but other than that it was a great story.... GOOD JOB!!!! :-)
Anonymousabout 18 years agoLoved it. Something about this story hit just the right angle. The seduction was complex enough to hold my attention. The ending did hold me wanting far more. So much so that I'm now curious about chapter two. So get on that will ya? LOL
Anonymousover 16 years agoYou made a real effort to write, which I applaud. And it appears you took the time to run it by an editor, maybe, but there are still errors that I stumbled over. Or maybe you didn't have it edited?
A good read nonetheless. Good imagination. Keep writing!
Anonymousover 16 years agois very erotic. I wanted more description during sex, more fucking, more fem sucking. It was very hottttt!
Sexy
Anonymousover 14 years agoNicly done, very good word play, I felt like I was there, almost wish i was.
Anonymousabout 14 years agothis was a very well written story and i enjoyed it very much! :-p the ending however seemed rushed and fell a bit flat. I would have enjoyed finding out how her "qualities" were better than a normal females.
but overall, very well done :)
Anonymousabout 14 years agoI really liked this story. I also wish it was a bit longer. Maybe you could have a sequel explaining her more than human female qualities and some of the fun times they had her ordering him around to pleasure her
Anonymousalmost 14 years agoVery nice, liked it a lot, and Haha about dave, funny end ^-^
At first i thought she was gonna be like a succubus or something, but then you throw in a twist and make it a goblin, totally wasn't expecting that , nice.
Anonymousalmost 14 years agoa fantastic fantasy that kept me glued and hard all the way through
Anonymousover 13 years agoYou found the fantesy of many men a woman who can control and bring out the best in her man
Pistolpackinpeteover 13 years ago....needs more resolution at end, as most have noted. And a bit more detail about how all this ceremonial shit leads up to total submission.
Anonymousover 13 years agoCunt cream really dude
totally ruind it for me
I mean im just a 14 year old girl I dont know much
but if someone called it cunt cream Id be done.
And a goblin thats just fucking creepy like a witch or vampier but a fucking goblin...come on.
Anonymousover 13 years agoC'était très Bon! c'est très mignon! Je l'aime!!!
bbwlover7557about 13 years agoblew my load reading this story=]
......love when women can dominate a man and make him cum and be in complete control like the witch/goblin.
