All Comments on 'Whispers of the Moon Ch. 01-02'

but please make sure to read your work once or twice before submitting or find an editor to help with some mistakes that somewhat detract the reader from the story.

on another note, i really do hope you continue. i do love stories about strong alphas falling in love. please update soon.

good luck for the rest of the remaining chapters.

-e.l.

if you don't use an editor, when writing, don't use contractions. you misused them or used the wrong form. also read the story outloud before you submit them. don't forget the easy their, there, they're. it helps when double checking for odd sounding sentences and word usage. good story. i look forward to future installments

You've got a lot going on here. A lot of characters, and it's a little hard to keep track of them all. It's a good story, it just needs some tidying up. The suggestions that other people have made are right: you need an editor, or at least to read things over yourself once or twice; be careful of your contractions; you need some more punctuation, as well. Also, some lines or something to delineate when you've switched story lines or POVs would help as well. It's good -- it just needs some organization. --wlt

Well written and enjoyable I am very much looking forward to the sequel

I enjoyed your story but you need to work on your story transition...you jumped around alot and mixed up words...try an editor. but other than that it was nice your story has potential.

I think this is a really good start to what could be an excellent story. Great beginning. Keep'em coming.

It's a good story and I look forward to more. Keep them coming.

However, as others have pointed out, you should consider using an editor to polish it up.

To give you credit, you did admit in your bio that you needed an editor badly. It's an interesting story to say the least and I think it could be great with an editor. Despite that it was sometimes hard to follow, I enjoyed the concept of your story. Once you get an editor, I'm sure this will be awesome.

You really need an editor. You tend to switch tenses a lot, even within paragraphs, which can be distracting. There are also a lot of spelling mistakes. Storyline is really interesting though, it just needs some review and polish. I like the pace you are setting too, although you introduced an awful lot of characters in chapter 2 and I don't know if I'll remember them all in the next chapter. Regardless, nice job. Get an editor and your story will be great!

I can't wait to find out what is going to happen next. I love this story. I can't wait for the next chapter.

i really liked it cant wait to read more

great start cant wait to read more, alittle confuseing with so many charactors all at once but really good, Keep writeing :)

loved it and hope to read many more chapters!

So far this is a great story I can't wait to read more.Keep up the good work.

hurry and write more!!!

im to anxious to see what happens next!!!

am dying for some more.hurry please

The technical aspects of writing are obscuring the creative potential of this story. Please find an editor to tighten the grammar, pacing and flow, so we can read your story.

have read it before and was even better on 2nd read hope the 3rd chapper is as good

What a wonderful story I stumbled on;can't wait to continue as to how its going to unfold LOL

well written, but wouldn't a Canadian driver's licence have her height and weight in metric units?

Apart from that particular nitpick, this certainly seems to be a good starting point for a story.

would love to read the other chapters

It's too good of a story to let go to waste