All Comments on 'Who Did It?'

of a cheating story with CSI.

Loved it!!

Different way to tell us of a cheating wife and consequences. It was a refreshing approach.

Thank you for taking all the time to give us this story in a mystery plot.

PT

I don't know how you come up with story after story. Always a great read. This one was even different then usual but a great read.

an avid fan of DG Hears stories.

This was an excellent mystery and very compelling.

I couldn't put it down! Or, at least, stop scrolling!

You have an unerring touch for the little details that make your characters human.

write a good story..Ever thoiught about submitting your stories to CSI?

something different, well, a different POV.

another good one... great new angle to boot.

I always look for dg hear stories i don't bother with the title or description or category if it is written by dg hear i read it i've never been dissappointed.

PLEASE do a lot more stores like this. You write GREAT stories I wish more writer's would learn from you. The stories on this site are going down hill bad. Keep up the good work and try to get more writers to do stories like yours. Thank You

Indeed, this would make a good script for one of the CSI shows. Outstanding piece of work.

-- KVK

DG:

Why am I not surprised that you've told another great tale? Thank You. Ronnie W.

can i say that some of it seemed a little "Dragnetish" but perhaps that is inevitable when describing a detective story...i really enjoyed it

DG,

You have done it again, (I think I'm the 37th one to say that just on this story). When you try something different you really go for it. Well done and thank you sir!

You write great stories and this is another one. I love dedective stories.

Roger

I really liked the story alot.

- when every one goes: ‘Yea yea another quality story by DG…what else is new?’ Still we have to do our duty, and tell DG again: Thanks for another overall fun; smooth read which you can’t stop, and when you do, you wish there was more.

who loved this story. I thought the use of the third person POV was great and is under utilized in cheating wives stories. The POV from either the cheating or victimized spouse has one significant disadvantge - objectivity. If you tell the story from the cheating or innocent spouse then we, the readers, heard the best spin from that perspective. So when the author writes less than credible basis for their actions there is the tendency for the reader to insert other rationale.

The only thing which did seem not credible is how the blood on got on Mark's shirt. A police officer would tell a suspect to lie down in the victim's blood? Shades of Johnny Cochran!

Thanks for a great story! I would like to read more about the adventures of Bobbie and Jim.

SleeplessinMD

As always, interesting story. Ready to turn into a screen play. Might have worked in the following words: wit (witness), vic (victim), perp (perpetrator), unsub (unknown subject) and hinky (hinky) just to add to the atmosphere. Cop talk.

Y'all know that in real life CSIs don't interview wits or conduct searches, right?

Thanks for a great story – a real TV style ‘Who Done It’! The clever plot and the very believable characters make it a CSI 'masterpiece'. Telling the tale from a third party POV is an excellent but underused ploy and other authors should try it. Can we look forward to more adventures of Bobbie and Jim?

Wow, this story was interesting! (And nicely written, btw.) It was suspenseful and thrilling to read. I’m going to have to read more of your stories. I liked this one.

Now this is a quality read, intelligently written with gorgeous flow. Oh, I just love a creative author who works at his craft. Thank you, DG, can we have another?

Perfectly paced-why don't you write a book commercially?

You should have included Grissom from CSI in the investigation then that would have been great i liked how you did the story around the CSI show you should do more like that thanks .

Pat

Atlanta,Ga

I was surprised to read such a good yarn on here. Now after reading the other comments I'll have to read your other stories.

You've got to be joking. This writer should actually watch some crime t.v. before attempting to explain a murder investigation or police procedure.Sure the CSI guys wait till after the suspect is back at the station and showered(huh?-was Paris Hilton his cellmate?) before testing him, the dress was in the murderers trash on and on...At least no switching of names or tenses but overall laughable.

Nice work. It escaped my attention the first time around.

Thanks, for your contributions.

obviously outside your area of expertise

clean miss, oh well, at least you tried.

and a happy ending. TK U MLJ LV NV

Out of your element?? Like they would be in theirs -

It did flow a lot like an old Mike Hammer novel - and those were spectacularly successful so don't let the nay sayers ruin your fun. I am assuming you had some fun with this one. It was fun to read and fun to try to figure out the criminal I picked her early and dropped her you won -

Thanks for the fun -

Of course more sex would have been appreciated but a good story without it.

Good writing and no sad husband moping for his lost love!

surprised I missed it before. Good case, strong writing, and yes...perfect TV episode fodder. A nice change from alot of the LW standard fare, THANKYOU!

While I'm sure photos of the sex would be helpful, I think photos of her going into motel rooms with multiple men would be proof enough of her adultery.

As someone said, I don't think they were going to clean the rooms!

You wrote; "While I was there at the jail, I did run a test to see if he had discharged a gun lately. It came out negative but he had taken a shower after he was put in his cell. The residue, if any, could have possibly washed away."

The guy is supposed to be a CSI, and yet the very basics--gunshot powder residue tests on the person of the main suspect--are not taken BEFORE HE TAKES A SHOWER!!? This screw-up of yours makes the rest of this work unreadable.

Fix, please.

loved how it unfolded...I like detective stories ...adds a lot of interest and fun....not surprised she was a cheating slut who spread it about and Aid's....just have to feel sorry for their partners who got it through them cheating with that slut whore....poor little rich bitch with no morals....

A fine well developed story with a good story line.

before, after and during the period, TK U MLJ LV NV

That one kept me scratching my head most of the way through.

Not sure how I missed this ... great story!

until today. Different for LW catagory, and all the better for it ! *****.

As others pointed out, they would have checked for gunshot residual immediately. Also, why did it take until the next day to get pictures from a digital camera? That would have been immediate. Several holes in an otherwise well thought out plot. I can't imagine everyone was fucking bareback. This proves the adage that when you sleep with someone you also sleep with everyone they've slept with. Please remember, "If you think she's spunky, cover your monkey."

As usual, your writing is excellent.

I'm going to overlook a few previously pointed out glitches as this was a well written entertaining read. Loved the end where Bobbi stated if I have panties on was his next case.

What a great story! It had a little bit of everything you could want in a story. Cheating, murder, aids, whores, sluts, lbc, bwc, anything LW can offer. I love how it worked out that the killer took out the cheating wife, her asshole father, and most of her lovers. The killer surprise was just giving on a good cake.

This was a great story! You need to write a few more like this! You have awesome potential as a writer

DG Hear has great potential? Hell, he's been writing since before the creation of dirt. Me thinks an author should stop using those testosterone supplements.

Fantastic story and 5 stars!

People often talk about "Luger" guns - and in this case a "9mm Luger" was used.

The Luger is the 9x19mm parabellum round. That's it, period. Many manufacturers make guns that fire that round and are therefore "Lugers" but that doesn't tell anyone much. Luger itself was not and never was a gun manufacturer.

It is like calling every gun an "automatic colt pistol" that uses the .45ACP round. Most guns that use this round are somewhat based on the M1911-A1 but there are many manufacturers beyond Colt that make even 1911's - and other non-1911 guns that use the .45 - like some of the Glocks.

On me. Luger invented the bullet but the first gun to use the bullet WAS called a "Luger" and it is what most of us think of as a "Luger" pistol made famous by WWII German officers carrying a version - either 9mm or a smaller 7.65mm (.30 caliber) version.

I tried to delete my previous posting but I don't know how to do that.

Sorry.

Still one of the best cheating wife crime stories I've ever read. Yep, DG Hear has some potential as a writer.

Very well told

you never disappoint DG

A fun and different story, great job as usual

@justbobkc

Georg Luger, an Austrian ex-military, constructed the gun you refer to on the basis of the Borchardt C93.. He was not a manufacturer or entrepreneur. The construction was modified a couple of times, by Luger himself for instance. The pistol was first made to use the 7.65mm parabellum round, later the 9mm round you mentioned. There are also a number of different barrel- lengths in existence. The pistol was first mass produced by German manufacturer DWM. It was called Automatic Parabellum Pistol, Borchardt-Luger System. This construction with it's distinctive knee joint is above average in it's mud resistance. The Swiss Army adopted it in 1901, the German Imperial Navy in 1906 and the German Army in 1908. These models are often referred to as the Model 1900 Parabellum, the Marinepistole 1904 and the Pistole Modell 1908 (Pistole 08). The (Borchardt-) Luger Pistol was also adopted by a number of other army and police forces from different countries. Of course there do exist other pistols which fire the mentioned rounds but are of different construction. However, these were never commonly called Lugers.

Good story, different for the average Lit story. 4 stars

Great and crazy story...totally different from what I've read in the past...5 stars

That was a great story, especially the ending for Tony and Susan. These old HIV stories were pretty good.

This was a really interesting and teasing story. I suspected two others before I considered Mary but it was a great read, Thank You 5***** I also like the info on Lugers.I recall shooting one once, it felt sturdy and stable and it was a 9mm This story was a welcome change to some of the silly garbage in this category although some of the characters in them deserve the same fate as our victims here.

Excellent story. 5*****

I loved the story-line, the suspense, the plot, the investigation depth and extent. Easily 5* Almost a masterpiece. I hope that Jim and Bobbie make it together.5*

BJ

Would love a sequel with more Jim and Bobbie. 5*

Good enjoyable, but hardly plausible story but i gave it 4*

Great blend of humor and mystery. I like your stories generally, and this may have been one of the best.

Why is it that the men always need to do the asking. In the age of me too, this can be career ending. And women who have crushes are simply willing to endlessly wait and never have a relationship, so just passively wait forever? Such a stupid practice perpetuated by keyboard strikers on free lit sites.

A very good blend and story line definitely kept my interest. The story just gelled and the flow was great. Shame that the cheating wife can't be a character that reflects imagination, however L/W M/C's are all in one slut category or another. Good story and character development around the cheating slut makes this tale a cut above. Thanks for sharing.

Four stars for the story. But I found it interesting that you have officers that examine crime scenes doing the investigate work of homicide detectives.. to me, it doesn't add up. JPB

Great story. Two comments:

1) Shouldn’t Jim be pulled off the case because the suspect is his friend? Conflict of interest.

2) Aren’t the police supposed to keep the details of evidence to themselves and not tell everything to the victim’s father?

well-written and definitely held my attention throughout. Thanks for an excellent read.

Sell it to the TV program producers. Would make a hell of a show. 5 +++++.