All Comments on 'Will You Call Me Patty Ch. 01'
by The Fantasizer
- 29 Comments
Anonymousalmost 19 years agoI don't know why you changed pespectives... overall interesting story.
Anonymousalmost 19 years agoThis is a wonderful story line. Looking forward to many more chapters.
Anonymousover 18 years agoI like it, but there's a continuity breakdown I think: they work out 'for a few months', then 'as time goes by' she starts to push her son during workouts, then 'after 3 months' she's got long hair and a new wardrobe. Cheers! Mike
Anonymousover 18 years agothis story has got a lot to say it is not boring or drags on .just right every one should wright like this.
Anonymousabout 18 years agoHey, your story is hot. I was thingking as you were fucking and she told you to pull out, but you were not able to. Was she afraid of having a baby with you? I think so!
Jan
Anonymousalmost 18 years agoIt was hot but some words ruined it for me. Never put the word 'ew' or 'boiiing ' or however you spelt it. Also, don't change the perspective of the story. The plot was good though. And didn't drag on. Good job. Just work on it and I'll look forward to reading more of your stories.
Anonymousover 17 years agoI like the start of the story and also adding the sisters makes it a lil more spicy that there may be more to the story and eventual man of all the women in the house. The part about pulling out was good and also lead into another fetish of mine in this genre. Would certainly like to see this story continue into a series and possibly a lil more detail in the lead up to the sex etc... Personally lil more of the attitude change relationship development, changes around the house with the sisters etc... maybe next time. Great story though!!!!
Anonymousover 17 years agoThis is hot and very good, but next you need to get the sisters into it also. Lots of possibilities, including that he just knocked her up. OOH, that would definitely be cool! Then maybe go on to knock up the sisters.
Anonymousover 17 years agoMore please, make her pregnant with a whole new involvement including sisters.
bornagainabout 17 years agoMan you did a hell of a good job i wished it was longer the mom was so hot i wished it was mine.
Atlanta,Ga
Jena12over 16 years agoFabulous story - OK - lets get down and dirty now - get the sisters involved one at a time - then have them all pregnant - WOW - what an extraordinary few chapters that would make - Great writing
Anonymousabout 16 years agoLoved the pulling out part,now add getting her pregnant and some how work one or both sisters in be great follow up
Anonymousover 15 years agoIf my mom was hot - I would want this exact thing to happen to me!
Anonymousover 14 years agoThis is a fine account of how a son's motherfucking instinct is unleashed to his own and his mother's great satisfaction. I agree with a number of the commentators below: this story demands a continuation, and there are logical ways to go. First, Jimmy-boy becomes the REAL man of the house. He starts fucking his younger sisters as well as keeping on boning his mom. Jim'll be one lucky motherfucker and sister-humper, with his own private harem. Every day--and night--Jim has his choice of where to stick his hard cock and unload his big balls, up his sisters' tender young slits or his mother's fat seasoned cunt. Then the inevitable happens. Jim plants his seeds up the fertile twats of the family females and starts making a lot of babies! Lucky stiff.
LAROCover 11 years agoI TOOK A WILE TO GET TO THE POINT , BUT TOO BOY WHAT A POINT , MORE PLEASE , LOTS MORE. ......LAROC OF AGES
LAROCover 11 years agoI DID NOT PROOF READ MY LAST COMMENT. ......LAROC OF AGES
Anonymousover 8 years agoI'm sure the story is probably ok but it's written so badly, I can't read any more of it.
The Fantasizerover 8 years agoAuthor...and like all who submit stories on this site, usually the first offering isn't going to be the best. Maybe someday, I will rewrite this one.
Turtle1952over 7 years agoplease keep going with this one it is just getting to the good bit
BG187over 6 years agoThe dialogue in the beginning was robotic.please be more detailed when there's dialogue. Felt rushed.
The Fantasizerover 6 years agoAuthorBG, I agree the story wasn't perfect and I rushed it. This was one of the first stories I had written 12 years ago. I hope I have improved somewhat since. Thanks for the feedback. I may clean it up and resubmit.
Anonymousabout 5 years agoWorst advice ever...rest to take your mind off drinking. I think you mean stay busy? Nothing like some unoccupied time to muse over your cravings
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