All Comments on 'Winter of Discontent'

With his powers, it seems he would have foreknowledge of the crash at the beginning. I also note the switch to .45 acp, but I've learned in the last few years that with modern ammo there is negligible difference in one shot stoppages. The only outlier (very slightly) in the popular calibers is .357 magnum and that can be explained somewhat by the typical velocity. If the preference is for penetration, then 10mm, .357 sig, and 5.7x28 would your go to's.

Some more info as to what happened to his wife would have been nice, we know she died but why?

Also you said not one government has ever given up power without force. That is incorrect. Lucius Quinctius Cincinnatus was given utter dictator authority not once, but twice by Rome and both times he resigned his power as soon as the crisis that led to his appointment was over.

and setup. I look forward to future installments.

Great job.

but their short range peeks are more successful to themselves, TK U MLJ LV NV

who can't handle the truth. Just ask Jack.

Always happy to see another story. It literally makes my day! Thank you!

Especially when they are well written like this story! I am sure we'll see the further adventures of these characters and I can hardly wait! Thanks for the hard work for us readers!

If only more of the other writers on Lit were as eloquent as you, we would have a really rich tapestry of excellent stories. This one is deserving of ten stars. Also likeable was the fact that I found no spelling errors on my first read through the story, the characters were believable, descriptions of the country in winter were enticingly accurate and I am already looking forward to what might come next. There is another chapter isn't there? I really hope so.

Devir Ginator

What a ride this was. The precognition made such an interesting angle, and the love story was as sweet as anything I've read. The slow build to whie hot was just perfect. Remarkable story. Five stars. I hope you continue this story.

A lot of thought and really good talent went into this story. One of the most important things a story should do is make the reader feel like they actually know the characters and feel in touch with them. This work does that exceedingly well.

Thanks for the hard work and waiting for what comes next.

Woodmanone

"Have you ever heard of a government in the history of the world that ever gave up one scrap of power unless it was at the point of a gun or at the hands of a revolution?"

Yes, this is what made George Washington great: he was the first general in history who walked away from his army at the moment of victory instead of using the power to put himself in control of the government. Some 5 years later he accepted election to the presidency, then when he declined to run for a third term 8 years later, it was the same process done within the context of a functioning government, and it established the tradition that it was the country and institutions that mattered more than the person. Napoleon made himself emperor. Big fucking difference.

BTW, you are a great fucking writer. I often wonder while reading pretty good stories on Lit what really separates amateurs' stories from literature, and it's you. This was so well written, so compelling, this is literature. I don't like the adventure/romance genre, and find it very hard to take the adventure seriously, but I started to read it because it was yours, and once I started, I was enthralled, and just couldn't stop. Thanks.

A Clancy story with sex.

Looking forward to the next chapter.

...a 3 , 4 or 5 rating? That question is for me. Not anyone else. You are one of the elite writers here IMO. So held to a higher standard. The premise of your story is great. It is great fiction, believable. Except for no one knowing that the helo went down. Too big a leap for me.

This a delicious SF/Action story.

You are a sly one... one story getting a bit of economics in, another some libertarianish attitude and some (excellent) poltical philosophy. And much less pedantic, than say, Ayn! LOL!

Of course, this story may get you kicked off of any and all of the big social media sites (we know who they are) and by now the NSA is capturing all of your electronic communications. And by the by, that crew dressed up as a telephone repair crew you can see out your window? FBI surveillance, most likely. LOL!

Hope you will actually follow up on this one - a couple of really great characters for an action thriller series.

RE: illegal substances. The Alphabet agencies all do lie-detector tests on a regular scheduled basis, but will also do spot checks to make sure you aren't using Beta-blockers to fool them!!!! So will the contractors. HAHAHA!

The concept of the story is good, or should I say GREAT. However, some fact checking would have made the story better... Norway may be way up north, but it is fairly warm for its latitude, due to the flow of "warm" ocean water. -20⁰C would be very cold for Hammerfest. (Wikipedia)

Another issue is that you don't mention the polar night where the sun stays down the horizon for months... Instead the sun seems to rise early every morning. In reality days in Norway are short in winter, a few hours, if the sun rises at all. Think about sunrise at 10am and sunset at 2pm.

Take a libertarian stance, get one star. That’s because, more than the shallowness of libertarianism in general, is that the characters and human relations in general are almost always simplistic. The author is good at plotting — not an insubstantial skill — but not so good at getting into the motivations of the characters.

"She was a little careless with the covers, and before long one luscious breast was exposed." - Wouldn't he have known that her breast was going to be exposed?

I've heard that lawyer/snake joke before, only with sharks.

"I'm a lawyer, not a doctor." - This reminds me of the Dr. McCoy line in Star Trek, "I'm a doctor, not a bricklayer."

@Anonymous Re: "Good...Better...Best..." - I think they knew WHEN the helo went down, just not where.

Are you going to continue? I thought the characters were very interesting and the story compelling.

A fun and thrilling tale. The only thing was the casual use of marijuana. Cadence states that it is legal where she lives. Well while it is legal in Colorado, as a federal employee she is held to the federal law which has it still illegal and punishable by fines/imprisonment/loss of employment. Same goes for companies that maintain federal contracts. Still, an amazing story.

Am looking for something new that I have not already read. However, all her stories just keep getting better. Eventually she will run out of reposted works. Still, all are 5 star quality, and I am frugal with my "stars".

I'm just wondering how does the story and?

I believe you are a genius writer. You can do no wrong. This story is as good as any you've done.

Even though we're in Ludlum territory, I am swept along in the story and the unreality of it doesn't even occur to me until I stop reading.

Should we trust the Government? I work for the Government and I still don't trust them. I find it incredibly frightening how much liberty and privacy we've given up in the last 50 years. The worst part is we've given much of it up willingly.

R.

@Anonymous: I believe. Thanks. Keep watching!

@Birdstheword: Stay tuned. This will be a long one.

@IAOldTimer: Just posted an entirely new one last week.

@J_Reader_Comics: I think they're pretty much over what legalities there may be, at this point.

@jneric2691: See my answer to Birdstheword.

@SBrooks: I wondered if anyone would catch the "Star Treck" reference.

@Annie with the political problem. I give zero fucks about your opinion, or your one star. Do you imagine I care what the score is? I write what I want to write. I've come to the conclusion that assholes aren't everywhere, they're just strategically placed so you come across at least one a day.

@Anonymous "Fact Checking." Umm, weird flex, but okay.

@Postscriptor: Yes, my friend. I do my thing. Hopefully don't attract any attention.

I'll get to the rest. Thanks for reading. Randi.

I liked the story. I believe that I read the story under a different name on another site that you were on which will go nameless. The story was titled Reluctant Resuce. I can not find it listed on your SOL page neither. Like I stated I read this one in 2015.

It is good to see you back on this site even if you are releasing your original titles under a newer name.

Keep up the great work and I hope that your health gets better.

Another great read I look forward to seeing one of your stories come on the new list. Would love a follow up to this one.

A merry Christmas to you and yours.

We need a second chapter, of course.

...now lt’s see if you follow through...

5 stars...

This is one of those stories that can either end right here with our personal imaginations supplying the continuing plot....or you can continue to add to it. Or we can do both: continue ourselves until we see a follow-on from you... or not. Still a good tale with my three requirements for a good story well satisfied: well developed characters, good plot and good dialog. 5*

Very good read! There is a lot of truth in your story though. Looking forward to more conspiracy plots!! :)

Looking forward to the next chapter.

Randi,

Completely agree, was just the impression the character gave to me of "Oh I know all about this cause it is legal where I live" when for her it could still have meant jail time.

......sure hope there is more!

I'm sure I read this quite some time ago, hope there's more chapters to come this time.

The writing is so good. The story is so deliciously over the top. The seeing the quantum future works. You make it seem effortless.

While there is much potential for more, I don't understand the implication that it's not complete as it stands.

Loved the story, 5*

Thank you Randi for the @ comments, glad more is coming.

@ sbrooks I believe the comment was" why Mac didn't forsee the helicopter arriving".

There seems to be some limitation to his gift, like if the threat isn't going to effect him or those he loves directly he doesn't see it as needing his attention. Since the helicopter crashed and killed everyone but Caden he wasn't forewarned and didn't foresee any threats. IMO.

I very rarely use the term “outstanding” when reviewing a story. You certainly had me fascinated until your love activity between the two after he had suffered a serious gun shot wound to the shoulder. I have never witnessed a guy ever even entertaining having sex after a serious gun shot wound. Erection? Nope! For me the story then dropped back to “okay”. The lack of a proper conclusion also was a downer. Suggestion: flesh it out, go with your main idea and make it into a novel. Yeah... it would sell. Thanks.....

Been following you almost since I signed on.

There's going to be more episodes, right? RIGHT????? :)

This has been my FAVORITE piece of yours as well as so far on this site. LOVED IT. I think it’s the snowy mountain, seclusion, danger of the weather as well as the adventure, but mostly I wanted to express that as a woman it’s SO great to read about a tough, rugged, capable man that is so caring. Ultimate fantasy, thank you for brining it to life!!!

One of your all time best. Also could be a Literotica top scorer. Already looking forward to the next chapter.

Absolutely loved this but I find myself wanting to read more about Mack and Caden. Hoping there will be continued adventures!

Reading this on a snowy winter night imparted a warm glow. Thanks a bunch!

Know you don't do many sequels or multi-part stories but this one has great potential. How many agents does the CIA lose before they give it up, or do they? Does anyone else with Mack's abilities join forces with him? Does it become a three-way relationship with Malinda as well as Caden? Please keep writing!

Looking forward to the story. This was fun, kinda Schwartenegger meets dangerous cia supergirl, morality and explosions happen. He has everything even cornish game hens in - 50° weather. Extremely radical purchasing power but off the grid and nobody noticed? So will he leave a string of cia and nsa bodies plus a few foreign bad guys in his wake before he destroys the evil mastermind, saves American purity? Will his beloved survive or ? Will one of them die??? Or will his network with the same superpowers defend justice? I am looking forward to tuning in but I hope the movie/ game sells well in China!

You do a great job with stories containing action scenes. There’s a lot of entertaining backstory, and the characters are well developed and (mostly) plausible. There’s conflict, romance and bonding, and sex in the right mix to keep it interesting. Like the others, I’d welcome more of the Mack & Caden show; but since he will always be a fugitive, how many episodes can be done without repetition? The storyline might lose its ‘snap’. That said, it might be interesting with prequel stories, and/or stories told from alternate perspectives involving these characters.

I've enjoyed your stories since the first one I found. Several of them, though, beg for more. This one and First Estate in particular, scream for more ...so here I am asking (okay, really its begging) for a part 2!

Honestly, this is as good or better than most of the spy stuff I've bought in bookstores and online. If a continuation is in the works, I'm looking forward to it! (If not, I'll wait more or less patiently for your next tale.)

Thank you for sharing your talents with us!

This is a well written piece, as are all from this author. But, in essence it is an unfinished story that pulls together a number of fashbacks to identify two characters as a prelude. Assuming that there is no more of this story coming, it is unfortunately a great disappointment. ☹️

The story would have been worth a five instead of a three except YOU DID NOT FINISH THE DAMN STORY.

I don't understand why you write such a good story with likeable characters and then show that they are drug users. Yes every person has the right to do what they want but I personally find people that use drugs to be pathetic. That's just my opinion but that's the only one that matters and it's also my right.

An epic tale and I thoroughly enjoyed it but I would have loved to see an conclusion to it. I can understand why you left it where you did, all of your writings I have read are a pleasure and I can't thank you enough for them.

Hopefully not the end of the Caden Mack saga!!!!

Awesome story just wish it would have more ?

interesting but left discontented...

Excellent tale so far, but it needs to be carried through to completion.

Love your writing. Don’t quit on us now!

Munchie184

Great read, but there’s got to be a part 2.

very good story served once again by very good characters, and a nice plot.

Thanks for sharing your talent.

There’s a lot more story to tell. Keep going.

I need to know what happened to Sara. Is it a plot point?

Good characters.

You can't end it like that! Where is the rest of the story? It was getting good too. Please finish it. Maybe one or two chapters.

Hi Randi.

Perfect combination of action and eroticism, another new word I believe I just created. Remember the word erotics? By the way, how would you create a verb out of erotic(s)? Eroticize? In languages, not all families of words are complete; sometimes, there are components missing: the adjective, the verb, etc. But enough of linguistics. This story is worth a rating of five in my book.

HOWEVER

The site is asking the reader to rate the WRITING; yes, what is written, NOT was is NOT written. As other reviewers have stressed, there is at least one more chapter missing, and why not, maybe two more chapters? I feel I need to give the missing chapter(s) a rating of one. What is missing generates total frustration! If you eventually decide to finish this story, please include Malinda as a permanent and active partner with Mack and Caden. After all, she took a bullet for them!

BJ

Good story, love the action and and the bad guys never win. And the idea of super powers the good guy has. We do need more of an ending though, PLEASE?

“Turn back over, baby and let me just hold you."

When a noun is used as a name, it should be capitalized.

eg: You are a sweetheart. (Not a name.) I love you, Sweetheart. (Used as a name.)

He’s a real asshole. (Not a name.) Hey, Asshole, what time is it? (Used as a name.)

So your sentence above should have read: Turn back over, Baby, and let me just hold you.

It’s unlike you to leave a story unfinished, but you did. Sad and frustrating. Four out of five stars as a result.

How nice to be precog and see a bright future. I would anticipate a more negative and channelized limited future for all of them. Because of the current known experiences of dark deep state and its greed.

Very imaginative and surprisingly romantic.

Simply a great read.

Thank you.

Very great story! Are you going to continue to the end?

Great story line.

Needs a sequel, feel like there's a lot of directions this could go but I honestly didn't expect it to end well.

Man seriously I would have real issues being with a true believer whose as naive and gullible as this chick is. Anyone with any type of contact with intelligence services knows you literally can't trust ANYONE that's literally Intelligence 101 🤓

Great story well put together and I look FWD to more installments (jaybee186)

Wow this story was like action movie could have gone on a lot more it’s like we only got half the story

You’ve done it AGAIN..where’s the rest of the story ?. This is another one of your incomplete stories. This is really starting to get frustrating. Finish the fucking story plus the other ones as well… but there again and you don’t listen to our comments anyway .⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

YOU HAVE DONE IT AGAIN!

THERE MUST BE MORE TO THE STORY ?

I love this kind of story. Except it leaves us wanting more.

applesauce!

Great story, although hanging a bit at the end.

With all that, when does chapter 2 come out?? Love the intrigue, the anxiety, the love, the passion, and more.... thank you!

If there is no more to this story,then it died a death at the end.

People do say there r Grammy, Emmys Oscar's in America, but I am disappointed with the new era of American especially literature read the the stories whether they R romance or mature except konard or moog player rest seem more than dumb if u ask my honest opinion there might be 4 - others but comparing 2 these icons they are shame

Well done. Five stars.

The deal hadn’t yet been made with the gov’t, which leaves a lot of unknowns up in the air, thus leaving the story in an unsatisfying state. I also think you missed a great opportunity here for a series based on Caden getting pregnant, having a child that displays an enhanced version of of his ability.

Randi, you are an amazing story teller. Your every story is different and has something new. I have read many of the authors in Literotica, but just a handful have that ability. This is one more of your masterpieces. But I am a little disappointed with the ending. There should have been some more. How does he tackle the CIA people finally? Was he able to convince and satisfy them? Do they finally let him be? What happens to Caden and Malinda? Do the CIA accept that they were kidnapped, and do they get their jobs back? When Caden finally marries Mack, how does the CIA look at it? You should have shown Caden getting pregnant and then delivering a baby with his father's ESP or maybe the ability to even pinpoint future incidents. Still I loved this story. 50 stars!!!

This is one of my favorite stories. I really like to see a part two. Although I have to say, you still have the Eye in the Sky series to finish.

Needs another chapter.

Good cadence, grest character development and interesting subject matter. Excellent work.

Geeze, I’ve lost count how many times I’ve read this story. At least once a year. It’s just a fun romp by a fabulous story teller. So, I’ve read it many times but this is the first time commenting. I’m trying to get better at that. Thanks for the fun read and for sharing.

Thank you Randi, my second trip through your tale, 5 stars

somewhere east of Omaha

Exciting adventure turning adversaries into allies through honesty and compassion. Some the story reads like an introduction to a longer novel. Since the State of Insecurity is to dominate their citizens, the need for social control is greater than protecting individual rights or human rights. A few extraordinary paranormal prescient people are psychic scouts to give warnings about grave threats or opportunities.

(Terrorists worth killing like the 'Golden goose'?)