All Comments on 'Winter Surprise'

What a story well done really enjoyed it

It started out great. But when they began playing strip poker only a few minutes after saying their first "hellos", it became unblievable, literally. A good story must make some sense, even science fiction. This one did not. Marathon sex does not make up for lack of a plot. It becomes boring, even in a porno film.

Erotic stories are for entertainment and you certainly entertained me with this one. So it wasn't Steinbeck or Wolfe = so what? It had a plausible story line and rushed the hot stuff,(Don't they all?) but I enjoyed it very much and hope you submit more. Wish I had the stamina of your hero!!!!

Erotic stories are for entertainment and you certainly entertained me with this one. So it wasn't Steinbeck or Wolfe = so what? It had a plausible story line and rushed the hot stuff,(Don't they all?) but I enjoyed it very much and hope you submit more. Wish I had the stamina of your hero!!!!

Afraid I agree with Yawn in a way, you write well enough that you could have got us really involved with a great story, but the sex was just too rushed/implausible. Still hot though, so I'll be looking for more stories from you.

Not a bad story. I would like to request a second chapter where they meet and see if thing can be worked out.

well done. You write well. Keep writing more stories. The characters all seemed very willing in this one. Perhaps some variety next tmies. All said, I really enjoyed it.

Gotta love stories where a man aids a damsel in distress and can rock her world at the same time. If Mike were real, I'd consider getting lost in the woods *wink*

Great sex, great story, a lot of men's and women's fantasies rolled into one.

Would love to see our sexual superman hero return to find he'd impregnated every one of them!

I agree the sex was too fast, but this is after all, a fantasy!

Erotic stories: just love them, hope to read more of your erotic fantasies, or are they

I think a cross-country move is called for. Particularly for him, so he can continue the three-somes, four-somes, and more-somes. I mean Joan is all ready half in love with him by now (and 100% in lust). Imagine a wedding night with him, Joan, Sandy, Megan, Daina, and possibly Jackie. What a free for all that would be if he could keep it up...He might have to call in most of the combined armed forces to satisfy all these women. I hope that you will think of adding a second part to this wonderful story.

...but damn cold !! :)

Thank you for an enjoyable story.

A bit too much so - not enough dimension -

All of that interaction - all that willing warm woman flesh and he never stops to think about the offers to stay, or even look in to the option of building more?

They found out so much about each other in so short a time and no actual connection?

It seems way to unlikely a plot device without some history to show he has some extraordinary life back there??

He goes back north - where he wants to live - gets into this remarkable situation with a woman who treats him like royalty, has the ability to share with those who are important to her , wants him - and he drives off into the sunset with no doubt or hesitation, no discussion of why or how he can be so casual??

The first time you went into such depth in the story then walked away with no rationale -

What was there rocked though ,

nice story but lost me entirely when you threw in her shrewish, horrific, rapey, cheating friends and joan was just ok with it.

nice to see your male hero have the personality of wallpaper paste. creepy fucking weirdo women throwing themselves at you in front of their significant others? if that isn't a warning to get the fuck out, i don't know what is.

and then you have the one psycho attempt to get pregnant from him and he's just "durrr okay" when she tells him to (albeit nicely) fuck off w/regards to responsibility?

should have just kept it with the mother and daughter

There's a good story in there, but it's buried under the porn. Even a stroke story need a little more tease than this one, and the back-at-the-hotel scenes just got uncomfortable.

thought you should have ended it where he comes back to her two or three months later and they lived happily ever after.

He seemed like a nice guy. I don't think he would have done Jackie

I liked the first 4 pages, they were well written and entertaining, unfortunately the last two were a rushed mess, full of typos and spelling errors, and the perfunctory orgy kinda boring.

This was a great read.

You can not please every one, but I enjoined this very much except the end.

You find a woman like that and just walk away, I find that had to swallow.

But all in all still a great story.

You never disappoint BUT I thought for sure at the end they would get together. I missed that the women were locals and thought you would have them actually living not far apart but not knowing it and that's what I'm going to believe.

I would really like for Mike and Joan to get together!

A sequel with Mike and Joan getting together, and Mike taking on Joan's bridesmaids, AND several of Daina's friends at the reception would make a wonderful story!

48, 11, 51.2 north and 91, 50 59.39 West

Wondering where you got that.

I think that places you in Khovd, Mongolia.

wouldn't it be nice for Mike and Joan and her daughter to get together with the occasional single Moms party !!

A good story spoilt at the end by her skank friends!

The husbands of Megan et al should divorce the bitches!!

Oh to be a knight in shining armor to two damsels in distress, and pleasure them and then three others as an additional reward. Another great story, I definitely enjoy your writing and look forward to reading more. I appreciate your and your Muse's imagination and abilities to bring it to your story. Thank you for sharing your vision and talents.

What a shitty end... he should have ended up with Joan... why didn't that happen???

OMG what a series! Except for a few minor editing errors, this was HOT, SEXY, Plausible and fun.