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- With Blood Ch. 01
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by musicankane
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Flpantherover 15 years agoOk, I really liked it, but I'm a sucker for these kind of stories. Be careful, Twilight is copyrighted and you are very, very close to the line.
I look forward to your next installment. Nicely done! You may want to have someone else proof your stuff before it's submitted. Don't keep us waiting...please
Neorotoxinover 15 years agoI like wherever this seems to be going. i'm not usually into vampire stories, but this one has me intrigued. i will definitely be eagerly awaiting the next chapter.
knightofheartsover 15 years agoVery impressive opening gambit. Twilight is derivative, no worries on that front. Keep up the good work.
Anonymousover 15 years agoI'm curious to see what you do, but you've basically laid out the beginnings of what appears to be "Twilight" but with a boy as the protagonist.
Anonymousover 15 years agoSIMPLY WONDERFUL, IGNORE THE TWILIGHT REFERENCES YOU POSSESS A GOLDEN QUILL... DO NOT ALLOW THE PESSIMISTIC NEGATIVITY OF OTHERS AND OUR TIMES TO DESTROY THE FLOW OF YOUR GIFT... CONSIDER BECOMING A NOVELISTS... AND RISE TO THE NEXT LEVEL.
CHEERS
Anonymousover 15 years agoIgnore the Twilight references. Your prose is even better than that hack. Write faster, please. Your half-year long gaps between writing submissions gets irritating. If you're trying to make it perfect, well, perfection is good, but get a proofreader to make certain you're not proofing something into the ground.
bob7770019about 15 years agoHey, i check back to see if there is a new chapter in this every few days, and nothing for 3 months! I love the story so far; don't stop the story now!
MunKiyabout 15 years agoI can't wait for the next chapter and anything else to come of this story!
Anonymousalmost 15 years agoBeyond hot , if there was a option for a higher rating i would have chosen it , this story is truly over the top
Anonymousalmost 15 years agoJust wondered what happened to this story? Left with the charactersand relationship and future barely devloped. Hope for more in the future.
Anonymousover 14 years agoAre we going to see more of this series. Its started out really well.
formiscuseabout 14 years agoI'm not sure at this point if this story is more an homage or an imitation of Twilight, but it is well written and kept me engrossed from start to finish. I'm curious to see where you take this.
Anonymousabout 14 years agoWhy the hell r u not writing? Ur last submission was on 2008 this now 2010. If u r reading this please start writing again. U r a very good writer.
Anonymousover 13 years agoI love stories like this that dont follow the old cliché with a male vampire and a weak female human. Frankly I think its tired and worn out and just annoying so please write more.
Anonymousover 13 years agoYou should'a finished the story. It's irresponsible to post SOME of a story and not finish.
Anonymousalmost 13 years agoi found your story disappointing as it seems to have the same concept of the twilight series but with role reversal.
Anonymousover 12 years agohey why aren't you continueing the series JAKE'S SISTERS.that was a beautiful storyline.i have been waiting for its next chapter since last 5 years checking your storylist everyday.please please please start writing about it.i am just dying to read the next chapter.i am just not able to do anything but think about the next part of story.i am in love with that story and just wish to god you continue writing about it forever and ever....and i continue reading it for ever and ever....
Anonymousalmost 12 years agohey love all your stories, look forward to reading those to come
Anonymousover 11 years agoGreat story i really liked it too bad there isn't a chapter two .
novicemanukover 10 years agoLove the storey line and were it could go...... and I just love were the vampire is girl/woman...!!! they are so much in control ... I hope there a lot more... PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Anonymousover 10 years agoThere is very little in this site vampire girl and human boy romance. I understand its been a long time since you wrote this ,but i hope you write more.
hellturtlealmost 10 years agoI enjoyed this but at the same time it kind of reminds of the twilight saga
Anonymousalmost 10 years agoI was very disappointed when I got to the end and you just left it hanging. I have to know how this story turns out. I loved it and please write more and don't stop until it's finished.
Dragons_Banealmost 10 years agoPlease post more on this series i hate the cliff hanger, i need to know what happens next please post another chapter or two soon thanks!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Dragons_Bane
Anonymousover 9 years agoI believe you could turn this into a very nice novel and sell it as an ebook on amazon. Can't wait to read more
Anonymousalmost 8 years agoJust what I wanted to read, a chapter one in which the writer had no plans to write a chapter two. Another 1 of the 85-90% of stories on this site that start and are left unfinished by the writer. What is so sad is the majority of them are wonderful stories that never get finished and leaves a large group of very frustrated readers. Retired Army NCO
dault3883almost 7 years agoplease do more chapters for this story its really good shame its sat unfinished for so long
linnearover 5 years agoI really like this story. I'm very sad there were never any more posted as it was very good.
RodimusMikeabout 4 years agoI rarely express such strong feelings about stories on here,but in this case I practically beg musicankane to continue this one,the whole subplot is based on Eliza being a Vampiress and Jason a Enigmatic Highschool Virgin,that Eliza can't figure out,so for all the love of pete's sake this deserves more chappters just to give readers some resolution.Please I beg of you musicankane.Thank you.
Anonymousalmost 4 years agoYou write these great stories but don't finish them. Why? Thats about as bad as writing a BAD story!
