All Comments on 'Wolf's Pet Ch. 07'

Thanks for the update

But how long is this moment to last? What of the other rouge weres? Will they attack to get their Alpha back? Will Trey survive the attack and what of James? Will he want revenge for Trey with the remaining rouges. And I don't think Cole is just going to sit on his paws like everything is ok.

So how long is this moment to last? I'll be watching for chapter 8 to find out some of the answers.

It's interesting that she dreams about him being a wolf and herself as a wolf before she is even turned. Add to that all of her friends being wolves makes me wonder if she has latent wolf genes or something.

keep up the great work

This was a beautiful segment and just so gentle. It conjured images of romance and we need to have more of that in fiction these days. Wasn't sappy...just the right mix of action and loving.

Thank you

is great, the writing near perfection( i could see a few things written slightly different, but just in the rhythm not content) but i do think Karen is not exactly human, what she is i am sure we shall find out, and that should be very interesting, hope to see more soon

I am amazed at how well this is written. I hope that you will continue to gift us with more of your writing. One word. WOW! Thank you!

I like it a lot - however you seem to over use the leering smile. I don't mean to nit-pick it's a good story. Thanks for sharing.

1) The lack of sophistication, pertaining to the language used in your story as a whole, really hinders the quality of your work. I think it would be nice if you had a bit more "flowery" and action packed language rather than simple (no offense) middle school english that contains a billion of be verbs and redundant phrases

2) Be careful with your pronouns. They are often times ambiguous which leads readers to confusion. I catch myself having to reread some of your sentences to make sense of exactly which character is performing what action. This could be easily fixed if you had an editor

3) Transitions are nearly nonexistent. Without transitions, your writting becomes choppy. The situations, requiring action and descriptions to be use concurrently, are not be as good as they could be to build sudspense or aurouse some sort of feeling from your readers. Some hardcore authors would argue that whether or not the reader understand or enjoys the piece of litterature does not matter. You, however, are writting a paranormal romance story, where reader comprehension is very important.

Even though I am a little frustrated with your writting style, I really love your plot. It would be a 5 for me had you not made so many crucial mistakes in writting this...

You have an exquisite sense of the romantic. Each chapter makes me go all warm and fuzzy inside. :)

I agree with Dreamers_reality about points 2 and 3, but not point 1. The level of linguistic complexity you use is a matter of artistic style, and you should write your stories the way your muse guides you to. And this is coming from someone who uses way too many $50 words in his own writing. ;)

I like the way you use their dream state to show them how they are connected.

Great work, again. To Dreamers_reality, the word you want is "writing", NOT "writting". You're a writer, right? You might want to learn to spell what it is you do.

Lilgirlsix, there is a difference between "breath" and "breathe". The first is a noun, and the second is the verb. It really needs the "e".

Thanks for your story. Can't wait to get to the next chapter!

I'm absolutely in love with this series but a little surprised that Cole didn't reciprocate the happy ending! She's the injured and traumatized one so how about a little kissing to make it all better? Oh and I'm not talking about the lips unless they're south of the bellybutton! Seriously I had to laugh at some of the pretentious comments telling you how to write. This is just as good or better than anything I've read published on Amazon. I'm surprised it's still here but grateful none the less.