All Comments on 'Woman's Atonement, Mom's Body'

As always, thank you for reading. I hope you've enjoyed this. Be well.

heyall

Hope there will be a follow up to this!

I like the Lucia character. Would enjoy a story about her past and how she became an assassin (who she had to fuck to get there).

Would love to find out where else the story could go, more hot unforced sex between Lucia and Gabriel

agree with the other comments.. great opportunities for back story, previous encounters she'd had with "marks" prior to the killing, followup events. Heck, why not they team up and become a hit team? Maybe even take out the former bosses. oh, and well written from a syntax/grammar perspective. And, i'm both an a**hole and anal retentive when it comes to syntax, good grammar and story development.

Good story it needs part 2

Kind of a different take on the Mom / Son genre but that's what we expect from HayAll! A good one, Sir, and a tip o' the hat to one more hot twisted fantasy.

Agree with other commenters, this would make a great opening to a short series. Realize that isn't your gig!

5 stars and until next time...

Cheers

Sage

I really enjoyed reading your story, very different and creative. Thanks so much for writing it!

Cant wait for more if these two, also agree with others great set up for some back story as well.

I loved it but want so much more.

Very well done. I agree with others in that this is crying for a series of additional stories.

I have an idea for you.

Mother and son build in the their incestuous relationship as they travel around seeking retribution for that fateful day. Mother trains son as they systematically cap each man that was there. They save the best for last, the big boss. A taped target practice with confessions as to what he made them do just so his widow knows what a pig he was.

Possibilities?

Once again, great read! Five stars.

As many others have said you have opportunities with this all over the place. Even as a solo i think it is one of your better stories

Very good, hope there's more.

Please add. Another chapter

Excellent story line. Lays the foundation to develop Gabriel's lust for his mom, and her awakening (we presume) lust for her son!

I deliberately looked for this story for three reasons. (1). You mentioned it on the forum. (2). I like reading and writing stories in which there is a reason for the sex. (3). I’ve just written a female assassin story for the Summer Lovin’ contest but both her and the story are very different from this one.

I enjoyed the story. I felt it was just the right length and telling it in such a simple and straightforward way without embellishment was the correct way to go. I agree with suggestions about other stories but I would say only another two stand alone stories. A prequel without the son and a sequel with him involved but not necessarily sex with his mother. But only, and I’m sure you’ll agree with this, if you come up with a story you’re happy with not because me, or anyone else, suggests it.

I’ve never heard of a ‘goomah’ but, unless it’s a typo, I understand what you mean.

My major regret about the female assassin type of story, and I’ve read many both on here and other sites (and without sex in some), is no matter how good the plot and the writing they don’t get the recognition they deserve. This one is no different and should be rated higher. Certainly a 5⭐️ from me because it’s not the best story I’ve every read but you’ve got the tone of the story right.

Looking for more. Want her to surrender her other two holes to her son in the videos.

hoping she gets back at the boss and the others and her and her son get away to live together as lovers for many years maybe her son can screw the bosses daughters and wife

More please

love this story and was hoping you'd add to it

HeyAll, you have a real talent for this type of story. I'm blown away by your skills as a story-teller, and this is something special. Unusual? Certainly, but coherent and complete, as a true non-consent item. Thank you so much - like others, I'd like to hear more about Lucia and Gabriel, but I have no doubt there are other HeyAll stories well worth reading. And this is well worth five stars, more if they were available

I loved this story. (5 Stars) I would love read about the mother and son teaming up to punish each man in attendance. In the dark of night the son could fuck every wife and of the mob family while the mother stands guard. If anyone tries to retaliate, the mother takes them out.

Great stuff again! And it's so nice not to have to plough through 121 parts! 👍

I'm on my way to the store to get my mom and my plan is to cum on a few things from around the house.

Fun for me

Very good story and would like to read more if you wrote more. Thanks

Now, that is a unique spin on a Mother/son story! Good job!

Damn sexy. But you have served the main course without the appetizers. She should have been made to fuck every man in the room, including the guards and servants and all recorded before allowing her son to deliver the coup de gráce to the evening's entertainment.