All Comments on 'Workin' for a Livin''

A slightly-different-from-the-normal scenerio and some nice build up to the action. You do a nice job of creating images. I hope there'll be more to the story.

Well written with an unexpected, but perfectly logical in progression, plot twist. Very believable fiction. Also Very erotically stimulating.

Thanks for the positive feedback, I appreciate you taking the time to respond here, in emails and by voting.

Regarding voting... if you liked the story please remember to vote.

If you don't like the story, please take a moment to tell me what it is lacking. My score is pretty low so far and since I gauge reader appreciation by the score I'd like to know what's missing?

Be honest, but gentle!

Thanks!

Happy Holidays!

JG

you write a good tale but you put more into the background of your characters than you do the sex act itself. For this to really make it in the cat you have it in, you need to emphasize the sex more, put more details, feelings, sensations then just cut and dry fucking. I hope that helps.

OK, he's still a cop, and she still needs a story...

Part 2, please.

that was a great story. i hate to say it but

i do work at wal-mart and i loved the line about

how well they pay!!

Great job! You certainly excited me!

Great job! You certainly excited me!

and very original tale. Thank you.

I know it is fiction, but I can't read when I don't believe in the characters actions. A cop threatening to arrest her. For what? Prostitution? Based on what? Cops don't grab someone for wearing a mini-skirt and high heels. She would have to be engaged in a crime, and she wasn't. Don't care if the story got better, but you lost me there.