All Comments on 'Working Together Ch. 03'

a bit confusing and a bit all over the place in regards to the dishonest cops

would love for you to post the Italian lakes story ASAP

Seemed like you had set something up in chapter two that you really did not know how to fulfill. As a result, you rushed through this concluding chapter. I hope you will not let that happen in the future, if you choose to right another multi-chapter story. Sorry, only three stars.

was flagrantly abused...thus 3 stars - otherwise it would have been 5+ for stars

I enjoyed this story, but it is a bit unfinished. There's a lot of future for these two!

as has been said there is more to explore with these two. Please continue

The combination of police action and sex made this story interesting and fun as well as sexy. Enjoyed it very much and had me handling myself very often throughout.

poppadom842.

As an American, I get you are writing as an Englishman. Its just you use so much regional slang, I've missed what the story is about. Its a real cock up!

So sorry Anon, I don't believe it's a regional thing, it's just how we speak over here. Perhaps I need to think about a small section, before or after in which common terms are shown and their international equivalents are set out.

I hesitated there because I didn't want to use the term "Americanism" which would be as chauvinistic as some of your compatriots have been about "Anglo-Saxonisms" I may have used. We invented the language but don't have a monopoly on its use or extension.

Thank you for your honest response and the really superb use of "cock up", brilliant.

I am not sure about the regional slang angle. I found the story very entertaining and well written.

Thanks

Len

i love the story. all 3 chapters. AAA+++

What a lovely story. A shame there wasn’t more to it. A few more chapters would’ve been fantastic.

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