All Comments on 'XXL Pt. 01'

God you suck at writing. One of the tags says "high school dropout." I think that was Billybob and everyone who reads this shit. I couldn't finish the first page. Damn that was bad.

but why would any man put up with that wife and those kids for even a year? 2* And who is sending him the pictures of his wife the lesbian adulterer?

You got choices in life, yeah.

people who work white collar jobs? Assholes

people who drive low emission vehicles? Smug Assholes

vegans? the smuggest of assholes (wait, that one might be true)

lesbians? evil, man-hating, home wrecking assholes

the only hispanic characters....violent gangbangers

the only black characters? "militants"

sexual assault? the only mention here is an obvious and nonsensical false claim

millenials? every last one of them, lazy spoiled little bastards

wives who don't act like live-in slaves to their husbands? nagging bitches

Im honestly surprised this story doesn't include random "observations" about how Obama and Clinton have destroyed America's morality, or character attacks based on rear bumper political stickers that various characters have, side stories about how "corrupt liberalism" has destroyed the school district where Richard works as well as the college he attended (though the kangaroo court scene did a pretty good job of that), or include the wife taking a "women's studies" course and immediately becoming a psychotic man hating serial killer or some "militant liberal" mystery course about how evil white men are that convinces her to show she is sorry for slavery by sleeping with every black guy within 100 miles, or maybe wifey starts cheating with a guy who works for "the fake news" who immediately frames Richard in the press just like our poor dear president uh I mean emperor Trumpov.

Oh and one more thing. Take a look at female dialogue in your stories. Notice how female characters rarely SAY things, or exclaim, or otherwise make vocal utterances without the descriptive terms of "screeched", "squealed", "quipped", "snapped", sneered", and "shrilled". It tends to make the reader think that you just hate the sound of women's voices, period.

Are gonna be kicking 3 lazy, unappreciative people out his life. And I'm here for it!

Give me an A!

Who sent the pictures? And why? And why/how did they have his number?

That's fine… long overdue even , but apparently Plan b is sweet but morbidly obese , ex-student who didn't graduate ? Out of frying pan and into the phat . Let's see what Pt. 2 brings. Hopefully a courtship intertwined with implementation of paleolithic diet between zydeco outings. Story is well told , if reader can ignore how main character let himself get nigh martyred for decades.

Good shit, as always. Don’t pay any attention to comments by whiny ass bitches who don’t understand good writing.

One? Maybe. But every. Single. One? Bitch please.

I'm just glad he doesn't try to write about Sherwood Forest in proper English! 5 *s and 😁😁😁 for making trash popular.

AMerryman

Consistently good, and prolific. Thanks for so many good stories.

You know I think silly little missed details should be let go but I can't not comment on this one. An "unstoppable defense"? Really? WTF? To belabor the obvious, which seems necessary at this point, you can't "stop" a defense. You can stop an offense. Defenses are who does the stopping.

Just a comment for "Dominant" - try reading the rest of his stories and you will find you missed the mark by a mile or so.

Three strong characters in Richard, Mary Beth, and Mandy. And Mrs. Bonham tossed in there like a hand granade with the pin pulled waiting to explode in Richard’s face. Exciting setup for the rest of the story. *****

Why he married Mary Beth? She seems like a fucking bitch. This is not a marriage. He's just her servant, there to serve her and her lesbian fuck buddies. Are we sure the kids are even his? I really hated Mary Beth and her friends with a passion. She just allows anyone to just disrespect her husband in his own damn house.--where he and he alone are paying all the fucking bills. .. I wish a bitch would. I have checked my family for being rude/disrespectful to my husband. I will not allow anyone family, friends--whoever to disrespect my husband. What type of wife is Mary Beth? She's a shitty mom and wife. I absolutely can't wait for part 2 please hurry.

Thanks for sharing.

Duh!!!! Pious is an adjective that describes an actively religious person. Pius is a former pope and current saint. Saint Pius--not Saint Pious. It's had to get into story with such a blatant but simple error.

I happen to enjoy your stories,,,and cannot understand comments like dominant posted,,it is a story,get a life and stop trying to make the rest of us politically correct

The chapter was difficult to read because of the constant TMI about his loser wife and loser children. 3*

Most of the readers and commenters are fans, some are petty and some have no reading comprehension at all. Keep 'em coming JB44. Looking forward to part two.

anyone like this really exist? Who would put up with this shit for all those years? I must lead a sheltered life.

for the next installment. Really like it so far.

Woodmanone

Your writing is generally good (as always).

1. Consistently I've wondered why, no matter where you geographically place a story, everyone has a LA accent. In this case, you specified that the protagonist at least came from LA. So thumbs up.

2. A guy in his 40s or thereabout who is going after a 20yo high school dropout with limited life experience, who is overweight and has confidence issues as well, is just a creepy fellow.

3. As someone noted above, you seem to have culled every liberal stereotype into the evils this poor hero has to face. Lesbians, millennial kids, effeminate IT colleagues, vegans. And by gawd, they don't know how to grill. Plus of course cheating, lazy, entitled, shrewish, unappreciative woman as wife, cause women can't actually be complex and have positive and negative traits like people do.

4. It is good to know he needs 14EEE shoes and magnum condoms, and that comes up as a plot point repeatedly.

5. He doesn't really seem to be deeply invested in anything. Son dies, no great crisis. Done with wife, moves out and sleeps in some staff room without bothering to actually move on with life, wife makes decisions about houses and life and kids, he puts up with it sort of passively. Is he somewhere on the autism spectrum? A bit of social disorder?

Again, your writing is good. This one seems like you're trolling the audience a bit though. Writing is a plus. Explaining why you're using the Cajun accent is good. The characterizations are a minus.

I have enjoyed some of your stories so I do read them but I am disappointed most of the time. This jumped around all over the place. It had no continuity. I also don't understand why he wouldn't confront the wife. His life sucks, why not get out of it? I didn't care for this one much at all.

Re DominantYetServile: Damn buddy, sounds like you got a pretty good handle on things. Do you write stories?

Great tale, can't wait for more of this story!

I like your stories, they are always entertaining with a lot of real life drama. Can't wait for another chapter!

Wry, understated world view is continued here. I wouldn't dream of debating JB on factual accuracy in a work of fiction. But, many readers might note that kids who grow into lazy, entitled young adults have most likely been consistently enabled by parents along the way.

Keep rolling, JB, and may the "directional school" and inhabitants of DeGarde continue to keep us entertained.

You may lack in some basic writing do and don't, but as a storyteller you are top notch. 5*****

This story raises one gigantic, flashing neon sign of a question that it doesn't seem to be in a hurry to answer: Why?

Why in the name of all that's good in the universe is Richard still with such a selfish, uncaring, immature skank like Mary Beth? We all know why she's with him; he's the meal ticket. But Richard *knows* he's the meal ticket and nothing but in her eyes, and by all accounts seems to be getting absolutely nothing out of it. You can't even say he's putting himself through this torture out of love; there's no mention of him loving his wife or their kids(except Peter, the good one)at the present time anywhere in the story. So why? Even after he gets malicious and undeniable proof that she's now cheating on him(and likely has been for a long time), he just tries to ignore it and carry on, like there's something worth carrying on for. Why?

Honestly, this reminds me of a horror movie that would be over in 5 minutes if even one character ever made a single smart decision. If not for literally every relevant character being braindead or unreasonably stubborn, there would be no story here. With horror movies like that, I root for the killer/monster and only stick around to see the splatterfest, and it's the same deal here. If there was ever a bitch who earned herself a good burning, it's Mary Beth. But I'll settle for Richard just dropping her like yesterday's trash and moving on with his life while she fails spectacularly at trying to live on her own. Though I must admit the possible new woman in his life being more than 30 years younger than him is an exceedingly dumb plot device. Going from one relationship with no future, to another relationship with no future makes no sense.

Reserving my rating for part 2.

It did take me a few minutes to start reading the dialogue in dialect, but then it all made sense. This is a very good story and I look forward to reading the rest of it. You were already in my favorites list, but I believe this may be your best story to date. Thank you for sharing your talent with the rest of us.

Top Score on this one!.....Quoting Steve McQueen "Magnificent Seven".... So Far So Good!.....Brilliant Story Thanks! ★★★★★ WOOF!

I posted 5 minutes ago and I've been rejected on this site!.....This is one Fantastic Story! THANKS 5 ★ ★ ★ ★ ★ WOOF!

Always laid back and entertaining stories....great story teller. I'm not from US but JB puts me in Cajun country every time. Well done as usual...can't wait for Pt 02.

Great start. Hope number two is not to long in coming

Looking forward to the next installment.

I always look forward to your stories, and you never disappoint.

on the start of another great story.

You're a talented storyteller. I'm looking forward to part two.

JimBob44,

I thoroughly enjoyed “XXL Pt. 01”. The only story I found worth reading in the last several days. Always look forward to your posts.

Fat girls, always some mention of urine.

I love to read JimBob, but I never come out happy. However, the writing is good and the representations are great. Into each life, a little shit must fall ... unless you’re a Coon Ass, then a lotta shit will fall.

I can accept that Richard speaks with a Cajun accent. I can even accept it in the narration, even though not first person, but why do the Irish people from Colorado speak with a Cajun accent?

He should stop paying on the old house, let it go into foreclosure if she won't sell!

True slice of Americana...Cajun style. Well written, entertaining and fun to read. Come on part two!

Your stories are always good, entertaining and told well. Keep it up Jimbob, Its so refreshing to get a good story after all the shit that seems to be on lit lately

the story is overwhelmed and crushed by the massive amount of extra detail and minutiar about everybody's daily lives which has nothing to do with the actual story in the coming conflict. It's long it's boring and I've badly done

Nobody would edit for you, you are all over the fucking place, maybe see a doctor about that?

I always enjoy your work. Can’t wait for the next parts.

I'm looking forward to the next chapter.

Don't pay any attention to the "it's too long and boring complaints". They're unhappy if it takes more than half a page before someone gets fucked and don't want to know anything about the characters beyond how big his cock and her tits are.

Not very uplifting, but curiously sweet, the way JB44's stories often are.

A lot of added history, but can't wait for Richard to lower the boom on his wife, and put her out to pasture with her lezzie friends.

Tough to read a story when all of the characters including the protagonist have zer redeeming qualities.

If not for the wife getting a little pussy, this would have royally sucked.

If for no other reason than he is starting to fall in love. And the wife can go to hell as far as hes concerned. I hope the divorce comes through and the new romance comes together. Maybe both romances.

You may write for your pleasure, but you also write for mine. JimBob, your work is a candle in the pool of darkness that LW has become . Your characters come to life, and make me want to know more about them. Live long and write often.

JimBob's stories are so different from other's

and so colorful.

Really a joy to read.

But, once in a blue moon, it would be nice

to read of people who think before they marry.

Yes, a lot of people let their hearts and genitals

decide their marriages.

But a lot of people think too.

I'm a fan of JimBob's stories.

He always brings us something new,

even though the frame of his plots

differ little.

Top ratings from me.

Give me an A!

Do people really put up with all this without exploding? I do not understand ṕeople

any more!

Your writing style takes some getting used to. I am looking forward to reading more.

Why did he cut the grass?

I've read so far (there are still a bunch to go). He tells interesting stories, and you can't always predict where they're going to go. He creates characters that hold your interest--obviously some likeable, some quite the opposite--and he knows how to keep a tale moving. I'm always pleased when a new story appears!

Thanks, ohio

Always look forward to what you put out and this is no exception. Good ole people in good ole siti ations.

How’s he going to handle the morality of dating a baby girl while married

So... I'm going to shout part of this review.

I'm going to shout it out, right into the abyss.

And, since I cannot emit sound online, it's therefore going to be in all caps, baby.

Got a problem with it? Don't blame me - blame the author.

...

WHY THE FUCK IS RICHARD STILL MARRIED TO MARY BETH? THE FUCK IS HE WAITING FOR TO DIVORCE HER? DOES HE ACTUALLY BELIEVE SHE'S GOING TO MAGICALLY CHANGE BACK TO THE WOMAN HE MARRIES OR IS HE SIMPLY TOO FUCKING GODDAMN LAZY TO DO ANYTHING ABOUT THE SAD, PATHETIC TURN HIS LIFE TOOK SEVERAL YEARS AGO??? IT'S BE, WHAT, ABOUT A DECADE SINCE RITCHIE DIED? 10 YEARS, FOLKS! TEN YEARS OF FUCKING MISERY, LIVING AROUND A GENUINE CUNT WHO COULD NOT WAIT UNTIL HE DIES!!! COULD YOU JUST IMAGINE LIVING EVEN A YEAR LIKE THIS!? MAN, THIS SOUNDS ACTUALLY WORST THAN BEING MARRIED TO THE USUAL SLUT THE LIKES OF JPB OR, YES, JIMBOB WRITES ABOUT - AT LEAST THOSE SKANKS STILL MANAGED TO DELUDE THEMSELVES INTO GENUINELY THINKING THEY'RE STILL IN LOVE WITH THEIR HUSBANDS! BUT THAT CUNT, MARY BETH? HOLY SHIT, DOES SHE HATES THE MAN SHE'S MARRIED TO! AND THE MOFO KNOWS IT! AND DOES N-O-T-H-I-N-G ABOUT IT - NO TALK, NO ATTEMPT AT COUNSELLING, NO ULTIMATUM, NOTHING!!! MAN, EVEN IF SHE WASN'T LICKING CARPETS, DUMB DICK SHOULD HAVE STARTED DISSOLVING THEIR UNION - NEWSFLASH: YOU CAN GET DIVORCE FOR OTHER REASONS THAN UNFAITHFULNESS! IF YOU CANNOT STAND ONE ANOTHER, WHEN EVEN ATTEMPT TO REMAIN TOGETHER FOR THE REST OF YOUR LIFES!? AND, IF YOU ACTUALLY WANT TO SAVE THE MARRIAGE, THEN WHY AREN'T YOU DOING EVERYTHING IN YOUR POWER TO ACTUALLY DO SO? GOING OUT OF DATES WITH A GIRL 30 YEARS YOUNGER THAN YOU AIN'T GOING TO DO SHIT, BUT MAKES YOU LOOK LIKE A GODDAMN PERV WHEN YOUR WIFE'S LAWYER BRINGS IT UP DURING YOUR DIVORCE! LIKE BEING AROUND MANDY, OLD MAN? THEN DIVORCE YOUR WIFE, IDIOT!!! EVEN IF YOU END UP GIVING MB HALF OF YOUR MONEY, YOU STILL WILL COME UP AHEAD, SINCE SHE IS RIGHT NOW SPENDING ALL OF YOUR MONEY!!! STOP BEING SUCH A FUCKING, LAZY-ASS JACKASS - GET A LAWYER, GET YOUR WAYWARD WIFE SERVED, AND MOVE ON WITH YOUR LIFE ALREADY!!!!

Goddammit.

Once again, JB44 got me all piss off and shit over his main character's dumbass actions... Therefore, his story must be going great! But seriously - if MS ends up filling divorce papers before Richard... ★★★★

Very entertaining to me. Thanks for sharing.

You ask "WHY THE FUCK IS RICHARD STILL MARRIED TO MARY BETH? THE FUCK IS HE WAITING FOR TO DIVORCE HER? DOES HE ACTUALLY BELIEVE SHE'S GOING TO MAGICALLY CHANGE BACK TO THE WOMAN HE MARRIES" ?

It's because JimBob44 is the author, and that's how he wrote the story.

I am rather fascinated by the number of times commenters make comments like that made by MightyHorny. They somehow seem to believe that the author doesn't know what his or her characters should be doing.

Fact of life: The story belongs to the author, and the characters will do what the author decides they should do. If you want a story with characters doing what you want them to do, put fingers to keyboard and write it yourself. Give it a try, it's fun to see what the commenters say.

Lue

and take them croc hunting. TK U MLJ LV NV

I still haven't seen an answer to why he simply didn't stop paying on the old house that Mary Beth refused to sell!

There didn't seem to be any surprise on the husband's part. No anger, no shock. No feedback whatsoever on what he was feeling. Just... fuck it, I'll turn the ringer off. Weird.

Can’t usually see where a JB44 story is headed, until it arrives. This one fits that mold, with the usual Cajun flavored lingo and culture mixed in. Richard puts up with a lot of crap from his wife. Really, supporting 2 households while his wife doesn’t work? If she really wants to keep footing the bill for their kids to trash the old house, then he really ought to limit the wife’s access to cash.

If you don’t like his stories stop reading them!. JimBob44 doesn’t even care about your negative comments.

The protagonist in this story has a very thick skin so Mary Beth’s actions and their kids laziness doesn’t phase him. He just goes and does the things that he likes to do.

"Give me an A!" "Give me an E" " What does that spell?"

Best line in the story.

Putting up with too much crap from wife and kids

When enough is enough

hardly a surprise though from the best story teller on here.

Time to kick that bunch to the curb

Reading again. These are some.of the best in LW. JB44 is one of the greats.

Sounds right.

Regarding the 2018 comment by luedon.....spot on! I would love to have the storytelling ability of many of the authors on this website. Of course there are times when I can’t fathom why an author has a particular character doing something. But it ain’t my story that’s being told.

As I said. I’d love to have the creativity to write stories as well as many here. I don’t. So I am grateful to the people that have that ability and who share their time and effort.....on a free website, I might add.....to entertain us.

Interesting story so far - On to Part 2

He’s been sent photos of his wife cheating and just shrugged his shoulders, perhaps I missed something but wouldn’t that constitute evidence? He seems reluctant to ditch her, why?

So he's totally okay with his wife fucking around on him? Or will we see him get mad in the next installment? Hope he dumps her ass and gets away from her toxic bitchiness.

So great to have an imperfect love interest. Mandy is a great character. Looking forward to reading the next installment.

Depressing story

Mandi is a good character. Richard is a spineless idiot who I don't even feel bad for, never mind root for.

How the hell did I just now found you??? Man can you write your ass off or what? You have so much talent. How do you do that? That story flows so smoothly. You don't spoonfeed the reader, but instead give us a chance to connect the dots ourselves. The backstory is so smoothly given without noticing. I found myself so interigued about Mandy. And how you managed to make me HATE mary ann to my core! The amount of sympathy I have for Richard. Just, wow. Can't wait to read the next part!

I do like your writing style and creativity... Although, I found this offering to just be depressing, I have hope of some sort of equality developing in the next chapter.

any wimp puts up with that deserves what he gets!

I disagree with some of you people. I don’t think Richard is a spineless wimp. I think he’s a guy who keeps it under tight control because he knows if he lets it go, people are going to get seriously hurt or worse. Maybe get dead. I’ve known guys like him, they put up with a lot of shiit until they just can’t and then it gets real ugly real fast. I guess we’ll see.

Great story so far, JimBob

5🌟⭐️🌟⭐️🌟

Good job, Jim.