All Comments on 'Yes, I Was a Porn Star Pt. 01'

Well you did it again. This has so many possibilities to where you take it, you have a wonderful way of telling a story and I get so excited when I see that you have posted a new one.

Like your other stories the character building is excellent and their story lines work really well together...

Definitely want to see the next chapter

Your tense is all over the place and really hard to follow. Write in just past tense.

Shame because the storyline held promise.

Seriously, man. This is the fourth or fifth story that follows the same concept: Man on the outs rekindles family connection. Find something new to write about.

Do people actually refer to pastries with the generic term "bakery"? I've never heard that before.

Can't wait for the next Episode.

Love the story. 2 more and I can't hold out.

Great story.

Looking forward to the next chapters.

Sure there are issues with tense and a few other things, but nothing another good proofread wouldn't fix, and frankly, comments to the effect that such minor issues ruin the story for some overly demanding anonymous readers who think the story isn't original enough or that the story otherwise "held promise" aren't worth heeding. Kudos to you if you've disregarded them. It's free, after all ... you gave those readers (and everyone else) something worth much more than we paid for it. Thank you for sharing it!

He was a great lover in high school but never knew how to please a female? Forgot, maybe. Never knew? That just kicks suspension of disbelief right in the crotch. Since that's supposed to be a key point in the sisters' reason for chasing their brother a fail here makes for a fail in their motivation too.

I get that this is wish fulfillment, but it could at least be internally consistent. It might even be good as something more than fap bait if the characters were a bit more developed and more plausible.

Holding a man off the ground after spending the previous six months as a hardcore drunk? Only in B movies and bad comics.

I don't understand the complaints in the comments. This story is good, the characters are developing emotionally, and I can overlook grammatical mistakes. It's not like a fiction story from a major publisher, who has an army of proofreaders to find mistakes.

5 stars.

Original story.

But some childish patterns.

At 30, a retired porn actor?

At 30, he just goes from being a rookie to a pro and starts making money. Look at the profiles and stats of male porn actors. Their age. How many are famous and popular? Working for serious companies? PornoHub has 20 per 2,000 porn actresses.

Abby could clearly start her career in porn as a MILF.

He's been married twice. Forgotten how to fuck?

I get it, it's a fairy tale. But there has to be realism too.

The writing is kind of clumsy, but the story concept is wonderful. Closer to a 4 than a 5, and overall, a good one. Thanks!

Why are ‘Funny’ and “Humor” not tags for this story?!?!? It’s sad, touching, sexy and laugh out loud funny! What a great story! Moving to Part 2 now. 😁