All Comments on 'Yes, I Was a Porn Star Pt. 02'

Wondering where you're going to take this next....?

Does Kim and her mom fuck the men in the family? or do they just have lesbian incest with each other? Glad to have another incestuous family added to the mix, maybe Kim's brothers can become boyfriends or husbands to Steve's sisters, with Anders added in to become Tina's new future husband, with lots of incestuous swapping between the two families.

I'm gonna be honest with you I enjoy your work and have read just about everything you shared here my only issue with your works are the majority of them have a similar formula about them where a brother is going through dramatic change negative or positive and ends up getting together with a sister or sisters and sometimes a mother and the connection they have feels strong then we introduce a non related female and the MC tosses aside the family members like they were less than this new female and that is not to say there's anything wrong with your works but it feels kind of jarring that one second the siblings are declaring their love for each other and the next they are pulling away from each other like they didn't really mean anything they said which feels weird when you think from a character building standpoint that any coupling strong enough to overrule the stigma of incest would just fade away like a summer camp romance now I'm not saying this to be a hater I'm saying this help because this method hurts your works

I’m actually a fan of your work here, but this story lost me on page one.

Having him be some sort of expert fighter and roundhouse kicking (seriously?.. is this roadhouse?) some guy and being Jason Bourne essentially really takes you out of a story.

You need to work on story. Everything you write seems to be you as a hero to your sisters who gets in a near death fight. Changing names and places does not change the fact it is the same story again and again. Might I also suggest you slow them down, you speed things up too much so that there is no way to believe them. Think of writing as sex, and you are having 2 minute sex instead of 45 minute.

Can't wait for the next chpater.

Best Porn actor sorry EVER.

Hope you can finish with some more good action

Interesting, but I'm curious how a 42-year-old woman has 4 kids, 2 of whom are lawyers, one is a reporter and the last is a porn star who died 5? years ago after at least starting a career in porn. I suppose if they were quadruplets or some combination of triplets and twins it's possible, but doubtful.