All Comments on 'You Don't Have To Be Coy, Roy'

Loved the story. Very interesting characters. Jimmy Choo not Chu. Yes, I'm that kind of guy. 5*

You spun a long-winded tale about a man and his wife, but became so obsessed with irrelevant tangents that you lost focus on those two main characters. A very weak ending.

It's a given when you see qhml1's name in the new submissions list. As usual, this is another well-crafted story that boasts the hallmarks of this author's quality. *****

Did Jimi ever explain why she did it? Why did she believe the asshole and never speak to her husband? I liked the story but knew where it was going but never found out why she cheated so easily on the man she loved and who gave her a great life. Still 4 stars.

Too long. Could have been half as long. The Anne and celeste 3some did not fit the story.

Why be with celeste she was fan of open marriages?

Edit issue:

Jack just disappeared after being served for alienation of affection, and even Anne doesn't know where he is. She could find out if she wanted to, she just never had a reason to want that.

Jack was with celeste not anne

Let me start by saying I enjoyed the story and give it a solid 4 stars. Would have been 5 but... we had 6 pages of build up, including great details on the investments. When it all came to a head we got 3 short paragraphs of the confrontation with the wife (Loving Wives, hello?) and the divorce. not a problem with his aftermath and new love, Just the lack of confrontation, explanation, and divorce with the wife.

Just my thoughts, Thank you for a good story.

It's 2020, you had a lot of people kissing the ass of a man who only had $4,000,000 (mostly illiquid). It kinda reminded me of Dr. Evil and his"One million dollars" demand.

Great story as always. Thanks for it and please keep writing.

It's a five star piece and you ruined it with mentioning the a of a lawsuits. Do your research! If you are basing your story in one of the nine states in which it is still possible to sue for a of a then maybe. But it doesn't even exist in forty one states so you lose.

Great story otherwise. You didn't need to ruin it.

R.

And to me, this did not disappoint. Although, I did see the Roy-Celeste thing coming a mile away and when Anne was brought back, I knew she was gonna have a piece too somewhere.

Still, 5-stars!

--JMFC

Now that was a really entertaining yarn.

Really liked it but felt there were so many threads it was over the top. Great writing and emotion.

I enjoy your work and am always pleased with the stories. Thanks!

Very interesting story including two life styles I know nothing about, Stage & LGBT. Nicely written in such a way that there is no sexual recriminations, just differences, without being over graphic or opinionated - after all we are only human. 5*, hooyah, salute!

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I feel you missed proper retribution to Phillip & Jack, they were due some serious hurt!

I couldn't stop reading it once I started. Again great job 5*

Great story! This went a little different than I expected but I enjoyed it.

5

A lot of work. Great job.

felt weird to me, like the characters were all bipolar or something. C thought the best way for a person like roy, after what he went through in his first marriage, was to have a 3some? just weird, i did enjoy it though so ty for the read

Excellent story as always, thank you. 5* of course!

It was a decent story, although all the stuff with the TS bar just felt like virtue-signalling and didn't add anything to the main plot.

I actually found it sad that he let Jimi destroy their marriage. If he'd persuaded her to have kids, like they both wanted at the start, most of her insecurities would've been sorted out years ago. He was hardly going to "dump the half-breed" if she was the loving mother of his four children!

There's no way in hell he should have ever let her get involved in acting again after the first debacle. Jimi proved she couldn't be trusted in that setting and humiliated him in the process... that should've been the end of it. Time to settle down and give him the big family he wanted or gtfo!

I'm not surprised he had doubts about marrying the super-promiscuous mid-thirties swinger. Celeste had fucked dozens of guys and it messed up her ability to have a normal relationship... hence all the breakups after her divorce. She was basically damaged goods.

He was a handsome, charming, fit, well-hung millionaire, with stakes in dozens of successful businesses... basically the ultimate catch for 99% of women. Realistically, a guy like that would end up with a beautiful young trophy wife to give him the big family he wanted.

You have a revenge tag

What revenge?

Excellent story, Mr. 1. Thanks for sharing it and participating in the event. It's always great to have a new QHML1 story to read.

Great story well paced and well executed. I almost dropped out a couple of times thinking it was going to be a typical BTB tale that isn't my forte despite any hot sex that it might entail. Glad I didn't and kept reading to the end. Glad to see even Jimi finally found happiness. Self doubt can be a terrible burden and cause otherwise good people to do strange things.

Again good story and good read though not my normal fair I did enjoy this one. Thanks again for sharing your fantasy and talent as an author.

5 stars of course!

A beautifully constructed tale. That's all there is to say....

Whenever I see your nom-de-plume on a story, I know it's going to be a good day. Turns out I was right again. Loved the 50 Ways to Leave your Lover connection.

Thank you Mr Q. 5*

Good story but there were a couple parts that I have read from another story like the cheater play and the bedroom scene and her cheating with the other actor. Some parts got a little boring but over all I liked it. 5*****

And musical queues started to assert themselves- from Ronnie James Dio to Jeff and Casey Williams! Outstanding read QHML!

You and Todd_172 are my favorites. Bravo Zulu.

A very interesting and enjoyable story, with a wide and very varied cast.

Good job!

And not really interesting. No big deal about cheating wife and why she cheated. He is ok being with a well worn swinger slut and her ultimatum of commit while i have sex with a woman or lose me? That is love?.

Tickled to death she got you to post a new one and it's every bit as good as 'The Food Desert, 500 Annies, Air Possum and all of the rest.

"but you have no idea how original your doughnuts taste. My vision is to have one in every city in the state with a population of over 20,000. I thought we'd branch out to Texas, Alabama, Georgia, until we cover the South." I only have two questions; Are they as good as Sweetwaters in Kazoo and BC and when are you opening up in San Antonio? Signed: BTW

You are one of the best writers on Lit; so I started to read with the expectation of finding an interesting story. Sorry, this one let me down. There was a lot of detail of little interest, and not one of the characters appealed to me. Of course, that's a subjective feeling and others might think otherwise. There seemed to be no drama, no dramatic moment when threads were pulled together, no compelling psychological moment towards which a dramatic story should lead.

You might check the distinction between averse and adverse.

I shall wait for the next story.

on how to live ones live as honest, truthful, morally to a code. TK U MLJ LV NV

great setup and enjoyed the story. i liked that the LGBT was involved, it wasn't sexualised and gave them a new dimension through exploring their friendship with Roy.

I thought Jimi separated a bit too easy considering Roy hounded his ex-partner for 4 years. Was hoping for a harsher punishment with larger guilt reaction from her. It just came apart easily like it was a new relationship.

Quite a good story

The bitch's burning wasn't nearly as much as her behaviour deserved. In the circumstances she caught a big break that he didn't enforce the prenup as written and turn her in to the police for theft and conspiracy to commit theft.

But oddly missing the emotional punch of a typical qhml1 story, you don't get the deep emotions from him or the wife. When asked why she didn't talk to him about the cheating, she basically shrugs her shoulders and gives up. We know roy is angry about being cheated on but he is oddly not that emotional, you don't really feel his pain. Jimi doesn't even try to explain, she kind of sighs and says whatever. You don't even sense she is that angry at Roy,they are financially ripping him off, but she still wants to sleep with him. If it is her self consciousness at work,insecurity, why does she tell Roy that? If she is the slut who craves swinging.it could explain it, but even there we don't see that.

One note,the trope about LGBT people being well off, with high paying jobs, is a myth created by Hollywood and the right wing media. A lot of trans people are on the margins and have a huge employment problem,and gays and lesbians are not all well off, despite what the L word promotes or prominent gay men seem to indicate, lot of them struggle financially.

The writing is as solid as ever but the plotting was a bit flat.

...to let us know in the end what we knew from the beginning...***

and you didn't make much of an effort to explain her betrayal in a believable way. So she was going to rob her husband blind and run off with her fuck buddies, and the experienced skillful business shark husband couldn't discern her lack of character and ethics? Did the Martians get to her before her husband realized she'd been zapped?

The problem with all these "I suddenly determined I married an Aardvark" scenarios is that they make the husband look like a clueless disconnected tuned out punk. There is this profession, called psycho-analysis, and after asking questions and analyzing the answers you can pretty much discern the difference between a normal human being and a sociopath. Jimi was dishonest, lying, cheating, self-serving, arrogant bisexual slut, and her soul mate husband who made his living reading and decoding people was pretty much strung along like an amateur sucker. At some point Jimi transitioned from loyal loving wife to becoming his worst enemy, plotting his financial ruin, and he never saw any significant change in her demeanor, her attitude, lack of respect, deceitful, and arrogant? If he was that insensitive and lacking in perception then he got what he deserved.

But then you tell us Jimi ended up doing and becoming what her first husband wanted all along, a monogamous wife and mother. Did the Slut Ray wear off or something? Was it just a phase Jimi went through?

It was an interesting array of characters and a lot of drama and suspense, but Jimi was just too outrageous, extreme, and contradictory. She ended up destroying only herself. But then she comes back rehabilitated and restored? Her behavior was morphed and contrived to fit the plot, but made no sense overall.

Still, it was an enjoyable if long read. Thanks for the effort.

I’m with katib on this one - long on words, short on emotion, the story meandered along to an predictable conclusion without ever really getting going, or drawing me in as your other works have done

That said, you’re still one of the best Writers on the site and I, along with many others, will eagerly await your next submission

I dont know why ut I started losing interest early on and shortly after that jumped ship and went to the end. Maybe I'll come back to it when the list is yet again full of chuck crap. Oh it is I guess I'll try again.

I think you're one of the best writers in this site. This story didn't seem to have the usual polish of your other works. A few times I had to go back and reread some parts because it seemed disjointed.

Yes yet again another fantastic story from you. Yes did notice a few mistakes but hey I didn’t care I just enjoyed the story. The only thing making me a bit irritable was the fact that you got carried away with the story. Do not get me wrong it was fantastic but it was just to long . An average person attention span when reading stories last up to 5 pages before boredom kicks in any reader can say otherwise. But I would probably say your most complaint you will have about your story will probably be the length of the story. Because I couldn’t really fault it and that was my only bugbear about this story . But for the amount of stories that I have read the stories that go over 5-6 pages always get moaned at about the length of the story. Anyway back to your story yes it was fantastic story and I just can’t wait for your next story. So a big thank you for sharing your stories with me and others.

I was excited to see your name attached to a new story. That quickly turned to disappointment after reading the story. While I realize this is a fictional tale, you've got some big holes in the legal parts and in the characters themselves. I wasn't thrilled with the gay male aspects either. But the worst was the ending. After all his sermonizing about morals you want us to believe he'd marry a woman that has a history of being a slut, brings another woman with her to "convince" him it's time to get married and that she'll be forever true to only him? THAT, my friend, is buying a pig in a poke. And did he have Celeste sign a pre-nup? Like I said - too many holes in this one. You must have run this off in a couple of hours. Still - it's better than 95% of the trash that gets posted in the LW category on a daily basis. Thanks for the effort.

...and worth every one of them.

An entertaining story well told.

Thank you.

At least 2 pages could have been cut out. Many places dragged on but didn't add anything.

I didn’t think it was too long. I enjoy your stories. I did see one or two edit goofs but nothing serious. Please keep writing!

I always love your stuff, so when I bring up points, it's more like people arguing which is better: Pepsi or Coke. It was a great story, so I'm merely quibbling about minor points. lol

I know the theater culture and how it is, but to say Jimi, who was terrified and shy to start, would become SO enamored with EVERYTHING in that lifestyle even beyond acting seems a bit far fetched. You took a close relationship between her and Roy developed an alternate personality for her that at the end even in your words, she couldn't explain why. Especially after she was caught once. I'm also not sure if Roy, who has fears about Celeste's past with swinging, would somehow have an epiphany because a blackmailing threesome. lol Wouldn't that cause MORE angst?!? Because she was a woman and he could satisfy her needs that way? It would seem Mr planning in everything, didn't think THAT through. lol thanks again for the hard work and effort in writing this. ;0) -Vicki

This is the first story of yours that I did not like.

Did this get taken down for awhile and then reposted? I was reading it, I think up to page two then boom it disappeared. And now here it is again. Anything change?

I found much to dislike, yet at the same time, your characterization and your storytelling skills kept me "turning pages" the whole way. 5 stars for your quality storytelling and subject matter doesn't enter the equation. :-) This is one of few of yours that I doubt I reread, but being in the Loving Wives section, it is to be expected.

I'll look forward to your next offering.

probably because you wanted to keep the deadline for the invitational. It is a pitty though, because given your talent, some more elaboration ans 3-5 more pages would certainly have resulted in a tale more up to your usual standard. Still, it should justfyably score above 4.5, if we wouldn't vote our disappointment instead of the inherant quality of this submission, it was still a nice enough read.

Thank you

You spent most of the storyline building a semi romantic love story with Jimi...only to destroy it in the last few paragraphs... not one of your best...no trade up just lateral.

Excellent! 5 stars

I too was caught by the 'reading, go to page 3, and...denied'. Came up this morning fine.

I enjoyed the story. The ending with C and A, I dunno if I'd have gone there, given that Roy would be more likely to eject, given his experiences in the story with how multiple partner situations turned in to a shit show.

Not my story to tell, it's yours, my opinion is worth what we paid for it. :D

Looking forward to your next story.

People are Asian. Things are oriental.

Thanks for posting such a great story! :)

qhml1,s stories are kinda like sex (or donuts) ... even when they are bad, they are great!

an easy five. don’t understand Jimi changing!

Good stuff always enjoyable

Thanks

Nicely written and a good storyline

from this author as always...imho not too long or short on depth of character. A great tale well told. Thank you

Usually a big fan of your writing but not this one. I don't care for the super duper guy that everyone loves and helps everyone out cause, after all, he's super duper. :-) How's that for circular logic?

Also I didn't appreciate you throwing out BS swinger divorce stats. It's exactly the opposite. Divorce rate between 2-5% compared to 50% or so for the general population. 4*

yep

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For having his fingers in so many pots so to speak (businesses) only having a net worth of $4M sounds kind of low. But it's your story and I liked it

Good story.

A thoroughly enjoyable read if a bit long but I like that. I would have liked to know why she really did what she did.

Thank you for another great story

So I have to read 7 pages to get to the ending I knew from the beginning.

And he did not leave his wife, she left him. For dick and such. He has a marvelous dick and eats pussy like a bitch. And she still left.

And he winds up with a woman who has the demonstrated morals he hates. Everyone knew it would happen. The ex even sends a congratulations card! The other

characters acted, in part, because it was obvious to them.

The fat woman is beautiful and fun in bed! Who knew? Duh.

In today's world 4 million is the price of a modest house in California.

Story started off with such a blatant misstep, and then the conflict seemed kinda forced. Love your work usually, but this one seemed a little phoned in

I wouldn't miss one of your stories for anything.

MFH

Still good not your best at drawing me in to the story

Since we knew the theme, we knew the same thing Jimi's card said, but you still made it fun getting there.

The story itself was only 4* to me, but the courage to crack on the Cabal gained you the 5th. So our protagonist's name is actually Roy McCoy? It seems there should be another pun in there, just waiting to get itself free....

There's something about a qmhl1 story that no one else can duplicate. This is another great story. Your characters are amazing and storyline was always interesting. I hated seeing Jimi become a cheater, she was so much fun early on. Celeste was a little loose, but had a good heart. Anne was my favorite though, she sounded wonderful. Just a great story, as were all that I have read here. I really hate waiting until the next time someone is able to coax the greats to write again.

One thing about many of the wives in these stories: A guy (or guys) that she KNOWS want to get into her pants, tells her that her husband is cheating, and with no further ado, she decides to cheat "also."

Thank you Sir! Fun and interesting story, with a boat load of interesting characters.

Killian

A classic LW story.

Nice touch with the gay/trans theme.

Added fine colour to the story.

Thanks qhml1 for one great story!

Top ratings from me.

Great story, as always, Mr. Q.

Not your best,but better than most.

It lacks originality and has long sequences of very tedious details that don't really help paint a picture. If you're going to insist on the tedious then you should spend a little more effort on making the steamy scenes interesting.

Always a pleasure to see your name in the list to read.

Great characters and interplay, as usual.

Hooked

The new bar/theater was a GLBT pickup center and had a busy crowd but when Jimi suggested a Rocky Horror production the idea got shot down because of the “conservative nature of the community”. Seems to me that a town that would accept the bar’s clientele would accept a Rocky Horror production. Hell, I bet they would appreciate an excuse to see the entire production live and unedited. Worth the time to read twice.

Gee, even I knew the theatre was in a small town, bar in a different big town.

Enjoyable romp,

Just a bit long.

Another extremely readable story. Looking forward to another.

I really enjoyed your story. It was more like a short book. You defined your characters well and I enjoyed your plots twists and turns. On the slightly negative side your written story had a number of errors in spelling which required stopping and rereading to understand the line. But hey, the story was free and I enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing. A Five from me.

A little long for my taste, but I knew this going in. I thought it was a little slow in places, but still well written. Debating between 4* and 5*. Since I couldn't write a decent story if my life depended on it, 5*.

for a man with hard and fast rules he wavered a lot.

writes well, but he has something of a fixation on gender ideology and feminism. The story is larded with that stuff to the point of making what should have been the main dramatic moment seem less important than it should have been. The "stuff" also extended the story beyond the strength of the plot.

Jimi was a loveable character and she was turned into an untrustworthy cheater. Why did you do that? This could have been her telling him about what was happening and them being ousted with appropriate punishment. Still worth 4 stars

Why did you make Roy marry the swinger slut? Roy deserved better! Once a slut, always a cheating slut!

About Jimi's insecurities, all of those assholes would have had Phil's prison experience. Scorched earth policy for the cheating slut. She was probably fucking those assholes the first time too.

This one had a lot of twist and turns and ups and downs. It didn't end liked I hoped but then I wasn't the author. I also thought you didn't spend enough time on the punishment for the three that tried to steal Roy's money using the love he had for his wife to do it, instead of a little blurb at the end like it was an after thought. Still a good tale and high quality writing. I do a lot of reading of the old stories that I had read years ago. You really have a lot of gems in your collection of stories that have given me and others many hours of entertainment over the years. Especially, for those that aren't able to get out and experience their own adventures, anymore and in some cases help escape the pain of their injuries, if only for a little while. Thank you for the story and the entertainment.

No criticism. Some things didn't go like I wanted them to go but, I am not an author. Overall, I thought it was great. 5*

Like your writing and love it when the conspirators get just and more. The cheating wife was characterized as being quite insecure and felt she wasn't good enough which of course you set up earlier. Just about all the bad guys got their dues and the ex wife got off pretty easy. Good story, please keep it up, we love you out here in cyber land.

Ended up marrying a skank of the worst sort , socialized the the depraved Pretty Screwed up what would you call him ( He resembles all the Jewish men I have had business with) Frustrated greed , self indulgent ego, exploitation to feed a sociopathy life funded by , lack of morality , and all the other fundamental issues that make the world healthy and viable . he should crawl back into the cave of depravity he came out of "the preforming arts Why ? " frustrated self worth to shed his feeling of filth and dirty life/style he even coated his vanity with his conditioning feed by a women . what useless dupe.

Maybe Anne should get her own story...

Thank you for some great loving wives stories. Spent many a long night reading just o finish one of your great stories.

I HOPE WE SEE MORE STORIES FROM QHML1 LIKE THIS. THEY'RE REALLY EASY READING.

any barrel he dove into would be less than angels and stars just waiting. TK U MLJ LV NV

And that’s a hard thing for me to say because this author is one of my top three favorites here. And I’m not putting the story down, I know a lot of people like it and that’s fine. For them. But for me, sex is NOT a spectator sport, and I just can’t get into stories that swing that way. Pun intended? I dunno, maybe subconsciously. It’s just a personal predilection of mine, and what other people do, etc. etc. Just ain’t my cup of tea.