All Comments on 'You May Now Kiss The Bride'

That was by far the BEST story I've read here.

A couple of typos but well written.

I look forward to the sequel.

With 'all do respect' but I cannot agree with anon's assessment.

Zack's, I mean 'you're', no I mean the author's story, spelling and grammar are just too 'bazaar' for me to enjoy 'starring' or 'gaulking' at it.

Loved it, a few typo's and I didnt need to be reminded ever other sentence that he was body jumping, it could have been every paragraph or two. A good editor and you should be one of the better ranked people on here. Kudos look forward to more!!!!!

Very well done, excellent scenario that was well written out. A little bit of editing would have helped with the typos and yes, repeating the wife/mom thing so constantly was a major distraction, but those are fairly minor issues. Keep up the great work! *****

Loved it all , hope the next chapter will be out soon. need to add sister-in-law into fun with both Zacks,also twosome with son and dad.

loved it, to bad he switched back, any more plans in the future for stories like this

Work on the editing, but I think I'd like a sequel.

This was a great story and definitely needs to be continued (hopefully soon). There's still the "surprise" that the son arranged for his parents and the challenge that has been made to Julie that still need o be discussed and that leaves open many possibilties with where to go. Please don't leave us hanging.

Great story, hope the next chapter is out soon with the surprise and the moms seduction of the son whilst the dad is away

A few typos made it a bit hard to read, but the struggle was definitely worth the effort.

You seriously have a good thing here.

Just get some more dust, and you are set.

I know it's been a while since this was initially posted, but I must say that it was an excellent story and definitely needs to be continued. Hopefully it won't be much longer before the author comes back and graces us with the next chapter.

Fantastic story idea (one I've been waiting to see for a while now) and well executed, minus the odd over use of mom/wife/father/me etc.

Really look forward to seeing a continuation or even another story in a similar vein (perhaps mom and son swap next time)!

Write more pls! :-)

I hope to see another chapter on this story soon! It has been too long coming!

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the best story that I've read in a very long while. MAKE MORE PLEASE

Thank you :)

You do know that your name is Zack and the mother was calling the dad Zack.

loved the story please write a sequel it has the set up right

Can u make a sequel

this story leaves you lots of room to expand great reading

A sequel pls

Hot story but seeing as this was the last thing he wrote on Lit and he wrote it almost 5 years ago, I wouldn't hold my breath waiting for a sequel.

Good premise. Crappy execution.

1) We get it, they switched places. You don't need the "my cock, I mean dad's cock" crap, ever other line.

2) I can't stand stories that use euphemisms like "wet box" or "love stick". It just makes the whole story sound goofy.

This is the first time that a story was so painful to read, that I felt compelled to leave a comment.

You need to do part 2 with the challenge

I started to re-read this story but couldn't get past the first page with the constant "I mean this, I mean that.". I wish I could take back the five star rating I have it 5 years ago.

so what a follow-up story about the mom trying to seduce the son