All Comments on 'Broken Boy'

The subject matter of this poem is extremely interesting. It juxtaposes the possibilities of intimacy in a true friendship with the indifference of serial sex. It focuses on the value of apprehending the full person and experiencing life in all of its multiplicity and suggests the focussing on single aspects of life and a person leads nowhere.

<br><br>I have a lot of problems with the rhythm of the poetry, though. It seems out of sync with what is being said and jerky in places for no apparent reason. It needs to be worked on with an ear to the music it creates.<br><br>

It's very well written. I like the pacing and the images are clear and quite moving. I felt it could use some editing and that the ending is a bit sentimental--maybe it would pack more of a punch with a somewhat ambiguous ending. That's just my opinion though. All in all, teriffic writing. :-)

Your poem was recommended in the New Poem Review thread today on the Poetry Feedback and Discussion forum.

Angeline

Sorry for my un-intellectual cry of joy, I just needed to do it. What a clear effective and efficient address to an age old theme of inter gender connection; vulnerabilities/ expectations; not to mention the tension built in by the not so hidden sexual tension attraction. I would have enjoyed even one concrete example to the dude's life's experiences, putting it down to earth a bit. Still, very very nice poem.