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by SweetOblivion

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twelveoonetwelveooneabout 13 years ago
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maybe this is the verse refered too from the other poem. A 5, although I lost interest.

ishtatishtatabout 13 years ago
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Nicely constructed but 3 different 'a' sounds in the second line make a bumpy start. Maybe get rid of 'all' and start the line 'words banal'

vrosej10vrosej10about 13 years ago
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I didn't get it but that might just be me.

buttersbuttersabout 13 years ago
i echo the comment about

nice formatting. i wasn't expecting a sonnet, having been reading what i just have!

however, the bite of the write did feel more gummy as it went on. more form over substance, for me, i'm afraid SO. :flower:

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