All Comments on 'Desert Sunset'

A five star poem. It creates the images and atmosphere perfectly. A lovely moment shared. Thank you.

Tess

"The tall saguaros stand in silhouette

in gross pirouettes

of surrender"

It gets a 10.

Nice work

in crisis ....words are packed with wake up images...held my attention ...most impressive...blue

utiful imagery, with a lot of feeling here. Almost showing a romanitic twist then you spin us out with dust in our eyes. Love it my friend ~

As I read this I heard something by Ennio Marricone.

Great to see you back posting.

One criticism or maybe it is the way I'm reading it, 'quick' at the end of the line 'I feel the temperature drop quick' rather clangs for me. Other than that, I really enjoyed the complex simplicity. ;-)

bb

"As I read this I heard something by Ennio Marricone." You too, Bill? BB, "quick" I'm glad clanged.

It's an intriguing poem with some very well done language. I like/understand some lines better than others, but really excellent on the whole. Did you mean "through fingers of clouds" or otherwise? I love "I watch the stars spin away"