All Comments on 'drifting'

This is a very good poem! This is cool line: peppermint pane-cicles

interesting metaphor, with fresh phrasing. Enjoyed.

this was my pick of the monthly contest poems, though I had no idea it was yours.

Well done, Imp!

(in case you haven't heard, I'm a whore for alliteration...)

Enjoyed this! Clever alliteration always makes me grin, and as has already been said, it's a neat little metaphor.

However, I had a question about this stanza:

sun-drenched distraction

oblivious to her

blinding beauty

The line break from second to third line feels off kilter, to me, maybe because the third line doesn't feel like a complete thought. My brain kept binding here, in rereads, so I thought I'd point at it and look confused.

Loved it, on the whole!

~D.A.

I'd said this is IMPRESSIVE....but u already knew that.

Drifting was my favorite.

To write poetry like this is a gift. Wonderful Imp!

Isn't that what you say? especially loved:

"...crystal blood

from an icy heart

on ivory eaves..."

beautiful.

Impressive~

I too picked this poem <grin>

I am impressed, had no idea who wrote it

but I loved it, ...drifting an excellent

#1 POEM for Janurary <grin> chilling

I meant drifting~

great job~

Pane-cicles? Passion in the winter gone awry? Do I remember correctly? Wonderful poem, Imp. A professional writer expanding her realm. I like.

This poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 38,000 poems.

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