by Liar
mood piece..and I'd have given it a 5 just for " rain pearls"
what a perfect description.
Nice job
But does need a bit of work. It seemed like you tried too hard chopping extra words, and I believe they're needed in this poem. Also, punctuation would really help out.
Example:
the breathless (,)
and the shiver (,)
the giggles the grace
long since erased
The giggles, the grace
Or
The giggles,
The grace
I thought it was meant to be taken in bit by bit, better absorbed that way. And I like the juxtaposition of "breathless" and "shivers." The lines seem too short for commas, which to me would be overdoing it.