All Comments on 'Final Renovation'

loved it; wonderful words here -

I especially enjoyed;

"in punctured palms

but that is all forgetful flesh recalls."

- nice

"cyan white as carefree as the sky."

- mmmmm, delicious!!!

and finaly a really great end -

"You said

I will never hear it,

but I leave a better story when I go."

:)

I especially liked this:

We let in

an indian summer wind,

spiralling a dust cloud in the sun.

You stepped in

and swirled along

to tell me that a new day had begun.

-Curiouswife

mentioned in the new poems thread.

And you

are older now than ever,

slower now to savor every breath.

You say

There's always something bigger

but living on a linger isn't death.

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overall a very nice piece......don

just checking in on some good solid writing

of soul food...gives me the munchies...just grand Liar...smiles/blue

Many areas I enjoyed in this wistful work... thank you for the lesson

du lac`

imaginative, very visual piece.

This is really good, Liar!

Fly

this is good stuff, each stanza is fabulous.

This poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 39,000 poems.

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