All Comments on 'Soulful Eyes'

Such a beautiful sonnet, so lyrical and fluid. You really understand how to enjamb lines for the best effect. Easy five. :-)

you can always be relied upon to write beautiful sonnets, not sure about soulful eyes screaming though. I would have thought a soulful eye was quiet and passive

Sensuously raw....very well done!

Angie's right about your line-breaks and enjambments, SO - this runs on smoothly. i liked the message these lines develop, and especially the phrase 'soldered to her skin'

She slides

Away from usage, soldered to her skin,

Wanting another world that coincides

With everything her heart would advocate

I do share UYS's small concern about 'soulful eyes that scream' - it feels a slight contradiction in terms

I am always fascinated by the story hidden in someone's eyes. You created an eloquent artistic journey.