by tungtied2u
What a poem. The sadness just reaches out and grabs ya.. Loved the imagery. So deep this poem. Can feel it all around you. The emotion shown here is just overwhelming.
*only to feel the waters rise up
from the well of my soul*
outstanding.. loved this line~~!!
Keep'm coming~~!!
Sometimes, for no reason sadness
wraps me like a straitjacket
Consider moving sadness down to the beginning of the next line.
Good poem.
Sometimes, for no reason sadness
wraps me like a straitjacket
squeezes my chest, chokes the breath
from my lungs in short, shallow gasps
Prehaps:
Sometimes, for no reason
sadness wraps me like a strait jacket-only thing I noticed
that took away from the nice flow.
But, it really pulled me in. I thought it was a GREAT title. This is definitely fabulous work with wonderful choice of words. Filled with emotions, drawing me in....suffocating pain!!