All Comments on 'Swing Your Blade'

but the jist of this poem bewilders me, but you have some wonderful phrases here. I will read again and try to decipher the jade/razor/esteem thing :)

really enjoyed this and

you use some fantastic

wording.

thanks,

~ J

What a terse little poem this is--really tightly worded, which conveys its edginess perfectly. And the ending is killer. :)

Wonderfully worded, and deep. Enjoyed!

whose words cut deep.

plenty of imagery throughout. I'm thinking that the first 3 stanzas is purely the display of distress of some sort. then these last 2 stanzas I have below indicates...the poet has released and moves on. That is my take. It made me work to come to some kind of culmination as to how it really changed from the forth stanza.......nicely done......don

You swing your blade

sometimes, and severed bodies

are too startled to fall apart

until you're too far away

to hear them topple over.

Lots of cutting imagery,thanks for the read.

swung your pen with a fierce hand for this one! I actually envisioned the glint of the blade and the "whoosh" sound as it came down upon his/her victims. A carniverous entity for the innocent to beware if this is about a certain real person in your life. Very intense {and effective} feel to this poem, Liar.

Vixxx

I don't think you could make this tighter.... very well written, and enjoyable to read!