All Comments on 'Wanting to be in charge'

I think that your premise is good, and I like sonnets. But there are some bumps in the road that need to be addressed. "Fudge" is disconcerting, and doesn't actually mean something that furthers the cause of your premise. It looks like a clear case of desperation for a rhyme, so you might want to reconsider that line and the one that rhymes with it -- I think you can do better. Also, "jail her" and "fail to" is an unsatisfying half-rhyme. You might try reformulating it to use "failure", which would be closer, or just find better lines for those positions. It is unclear to me what is meant by "keeps her locked away." I think you can come up with a better version of this poem, which will be quite good.