All Comments on 'Your Body or Your Mind'

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pilotgal almost 14 years ago

love the last verse

sssofftee almost 14 years ago

stop

I think your attempt is sincere, sweet, and honest, but I think you need some coaching in the art of poetry. Rhymes are nice, but they remove all the romance from the image you're trying to create. Sorry to criticize, but you did post this for us to read, huh?

neutrona almost 14 years ago

Loved it

This poem wasn't meant to be romantic or perfect "traditional" poetry. It's cute and funny and I especially love the twist ending!

Keep writing!

tbabyhot almost 13 years ago

Sweet, yet truthful

I can't believe I missed this poem, when I read others...

I liked it ! ♥