All Comments on 'ZMP~ Tomorrow's Sun ...'

The thought is good. The words' O.K. - The construction is weak.

Are you kidding me? I

think this is one of my

favorite's of yours! I love

the simplicity of your words and

the gentle beautiful flow.

I may be

a star one day

but for now I will

light my own way.

Loved that bit!

A poem doesn't have

to be full of long and

complicated words to

be profound or meaningful.

I really enjoyed this piece

and for me it gets top marks!

Thanks.

~ J

Smoooth!! Very nice!

I may be

a star one day

but for now I will

light my own way.

A leaf in the wind

blowing away

as I hold to a tree

till my leaving day.

These were my favorites stanzas.

Thanks!

is rendered throughout the piece. favorite lines:

I may be

a star one day

but for now I will

light my own way.

******

from a writers point of view. one can see the dream. i did notice the boxed format from top to bottom. line breaks may be an issue though. but i'm not a god in that arena...*LOL*

My favorite line is the one about the star too. It makes you feel hmm, I don't know, really neat.